Ghosts Of Peggy Hollow
Speaking up is dangerous...27 total reviews
Comment from joann r romei
this piece needs a bit of rearranging, the opening is quite intreging then shifts to a woodpecker perhaps that can be the last paragraph, the title suggests a phantom memory but doesnt give any depth to the writers feelings some lines are cliques also.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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this piece needs a bit of rearranging, the opening is quite intreging then shifts to a woodpecker perhaps that can be the last paragraph, the title suggests a phantom memory but doesnt give any depth to the writers feelings some lines are cliques also.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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Hi Joan! Lol! Just wanted to say thanks, but this was explained as a metaphor, and I like cliche's, I hate cliques, and let's just let 'sleeping dogs lie' with this one! lol! Thanks again. Susan :o)
Comment from missy98writer
Susan
Your haunting story is superbly written. I dub the queen of horror. Excellent descriptive writing and great narrative. In this story you've effectively managed to give the reader main character, setting, conflict and resolution. You do a good job showing instead of telling. I'd recommend your story to other reviewers. I was enthralled by your thought of Mother Nature seeking revenge. Have a blessed weekend, my friend. By the way, killer metaphor for life.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2011
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Susan
Your haunting story is superbly written. I dub the queen of horror. Excellent descriptive writing and great narrative. In this story you've effectively managed to give the reader main character, setting, conflict and resolution. You do a good job showing instead of telling. I'd recommend your story to other reviewers. I was enthralled by your thought of Mother Nature seeking revenge. Have a blessed weekend, my friend. By the way, killer metaphor for life.
Melissa.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2011
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HI Missy! I love how you always make me feel good about my writing...what a sweet and very loyal fanfriend you are...and have been for a long time. I'm very lucky to know you Missy. Do you know how much I admire and care about you?? If not, now you do. All your words are so helpful to me...they keep me sane and trying. Love, susan
Comment from Ted T
Hi Susan :)
I love the piece, it's well written and filled with profound emotion. A sad tale, yes, but then things are not always sunny days with bright blue skies.
Your last two paragraphs are stunning.
Very good work.
Ted
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2011
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Hi Susan :)
I love the piece, it's well written and filled with profound emotion. A sad tale, yes, but then things are not always sunny days with bright blue skies.
Your last two paragraphs are stunning.
Very good work.
Ted
Comment Written 03-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2011
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Mr. T! How are you?? Ted, I send you a hug for being kind enuff to review for me even tho I can't keep up with books lately...yours is super, I need to catch up to your chapters...thank you so. Your friend...susan
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Hi Susan, I understand. Review when you can :)
Ted
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A tired smile for you...s.
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You're very welcome :)
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You know I am not into horror and thiller, but I read it because you do a good job of it. Your writing is sound and you did a good job.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2011
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You know I am not into horror and thiller, but I read it because you do a good job of it. Your writing is sound and you did a good job.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2011
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yes, and this makes a review this good all the more special too. ") I am always so glad you approve Barbara...and I hope you are happy and well. LOVE, susan
Comment from BethShelby
This is an excellent short story. In the past many have died because they dared to tell the truth. In the first paragraph you say as you look back and remember Peggy Childs. If she was your mother wouldn't you have said when I remember Mama? You could word it differently than remembering if you don't want us to know she was you mother until later. I love the line where you say "We came home and home was dead."
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2011
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This is an excellent short story. In the past many have died because they dared to tell the truth. In the first paragraph you say as you look back and remember Peggy Childs. If she was your mother wouldn't you have said when I remember Mama? You could word it differently than remembering if you don't want us to know she was you mother until later. I love the line where you say "We came home and home was dead."
Comment Written 02-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2011
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HI Beth! I did struggle with that...I was trying to hide that fact...I will go in and see if I can do it differently. Thank you very much! I appreciate your pointing this out! HUG! Susan
Comment from Carrie Smith
Wow, Suse,Wow! The reality of terror is written here in your usual mesmorizing descriptive way. Using your thoughts to tell the story made this all the better. Yes, a real chiller. Hugs...Susan
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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Wow, Suse,Wow! The reality of terror is written here in your usual mesmorizing descriptive way. Using your thoughts to tell the story made this all the better. Yes, a real chiller. Hugs...Susan
Comment Written 01-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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HI again! Susan!! Your review is awesome! SO good to know it creeped you out! LOL! I am happy you liked this! I do too...for once! I waited for your call?? HOPE you are okay! xoxo, susan
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Welcome, Suse -a great writing. hugs!!
Comment from robyn corum
I enjoyed this short piece. It had haunting echoes that will linger. It was a good topic and was handled well. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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I enjoyed this short piece. It had haunting echoes that will linger. It was a good topic and was handled well. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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HI There!! Thank you! I am very grateful for your time for me Robo! AND honored with your kind words...Susan
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
what a haunting story,
Susan, and what a tragic
death for such a brave
woman - murdered by
cowards who were afraid
to show their faces.
year old oak(,) where the
You have a real knack at telling these tales.
Margaret
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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what a haunting story,
Susan, and what a tragic
death for such a brave
woman - murdered by
cowards who were afraid
to show their faces.
year old oak(,) where the
You have a real knack at telling these tales.
Margaret
Comment Written 01-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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Hi Margaret!! Thank you! I will go see about the comma too! I love this photo...and wonder about how it was made. OR???? Hmmm. It's very scary to me. I have lived with the ire of these types and it is not fun. Thank you again!! I hope you and Colin are safe and in tact after Halloween!! xoxo, susan
Comment from Gungalo
A topnotch write and one to envy. You have faced your demons here and most can never. Isn't it purely amazing, the things that have happened in such a short time?
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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A topnotch write and one to envy. You have faced your demons here and most can never. Isn't it purely amazing, the things that have happened in such a short time?
Comment Written 01-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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HI there! I am still fighting this nonsense too. This story is a was of describing how my life has been ruined by certain people, who revel in tormenting me. It really is getting old. Don't know how to describe it. BUT, thank you again for being here for me Miss Caterpillar! xoxo, susan
Comment from JW
Your story is very well written and no doubt, expresses the horror intended. Just the thought that parts of it reflecting events in real life is quite frightening.
Good job. JW
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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Your story is very well written and no doubt, expresses the horror intended. Just the thought that parts of it reflecting events in real life is quite frightening.
Good job. JW
Comment Written 01-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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Hi Jonathon! Thank you so much. I used this as a sort of analogy? The loss of the mother is the loss of my civil rights...long story. BUT, it worked for me...Our country is not what it makes out to be anymore. SO sad. Thank you again Jonathon...Susan