Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Haydon, who ran with scissors..."A collection of my children's poems
25 total reviews
Comment from emjaihammond
This was created from a cute idea. The piece is well written and for the most part I liked the rhythm and the rhyme. In a few places your rhyming seems a little bit forced. But, all in all, this is a good little poem with a good sense of humor.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
  |
This was created from a cute idea. The piece is well written and for the most part I liked the rhythm and the rhyme. In a few places your rhyming seems a little bit forced. But, all in all, this is a good little poem with a good sense of humor.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
-
Thank you for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written with a humorous flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is excellent imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
|
This is very well written with a humorous flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is excellent imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
-
Thank you for the kind words.
Steve
-
You're welcome, Steve. Charlie
Comment from country ranch writer
Oops now her doesn't have a heir to carry on the legacy. He should have listened when told not to run so now he has a messed up willy to add to his misery
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
|
Oops now her doesn't have a heir to carry on the legacy. He should have listened when told not to run so now he has a messed up willy to add to his misery
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
-
Thank you for the kind words.
Steve
-
WELCOME
Comment from Titanx9
Thanks for the laugh, I enjoyed all about the lad with the long name who had one fatal flaw. It shows it only take one misguided jab to end a family lineage and more importantly to castrate little Haydon Reginald McMurray. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
|
Thanks for the laugh, I enjoyed all about the lad with the long name who had one fatal flaw. It shows it only take one misguided jab to end a family lineage and more importantly to castrate little Haydon Reginald McMurray. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
-
Thank you for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from MM lives on :)
definitely a laugh pal, reminds me of the redrider thing of, you will shoot your eye out with that bb gun child..ha...did make me laugh and although a bit longer to get your point across it was amuzing, well done1
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
|
definitely a laugh pal, reminds me of the redrider thing of, you will shoot your eye out with that bb gun child..ha...did make me laugh and although a bit longer to get your point across it was amuzing, well done1
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
-
Thank you for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from visionary1234
OMG!!! I'M SO GLAD I DIDN'T ENTER THIS COMPETITION! I KNEW YOU'D DO SOMETHING TOTALLY DREADFUL LIKE THIS ONE AND BLOW US ALL OUT OF THE WATER! I NEARLY FELL OFF MY DAMNED CHAIR! :)))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
 |
OMG!!! I'M SO GLAD I DIDN'T ENTER THIS COMPETITION! I KNEW YOU'D DO SOMETHING TOTALLY DREADFUL LIKE THIS ONE AND BLOW US ALL OUT OF THE WATER! I NEARLY FELL OFF MY DAMNED CHAIR! :)))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
-
Maybe all the voters fell off their chairs too and that's why they forgot to vote! Struggled into third or fourth place I think.... sigh....
Thanks for the sixer and the enthusiastic response.
Steve
-
you're kidding! am I the only one who basks in the knowledge of your genius???
Comment from Jade Lawson
Definitely this poem made me laugh in almost every stanza. I enjoyed to read throughout. You did a brilliant job... Articulated, nice flow, humor and interested reading... Well done x
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
|
Definitely this poem made me laugh in almost every stanza. I enjoyed to read throughout. You did a brilliant job... Articulated, nice flow, humor and interested reading... Well done x
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
-
Thank you for the kind words.
Steve
-
you are welcome
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer delivers a message that brings me to tears from laughter. The writer tells the story clearly from start to finish. The flow is smooth as the writer does a good job in the rhyming couplets.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
|
The writer delivers a message that brings me to tears from laughter. The writer tells the story clearly from start to finish. The flow is smooth as the writer does a good job in the rhyming couplets.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
-
Thank you for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from 9999pool
With this lesson in a story, who would want to carry sharp objects especially a scissors? Some people never learnt. handing a scissors with a pointed end to someone is wrong. Hold such object when doing work and walking with them is just as bad.
The story had a funny ending and the lines are funny too.
Good write and well expressed.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
|
With this lesson in a story, who would want to carry sharp objects especially a scissors? Some people never learnt. handing a scissors with a pointed end to someone is wrong. Hold such object when doing work and walking with them is just as bad.
The story had a funny ending and the lines are funny too.
Good write and well expressed.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
-
Thank you for the kind words.
Steve
-
Welcome Steve,
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment from God's Writer
A grand a comical poem my friend. I appreciate he grand laugh. I found your poetic flow to be excellent and overall a fantastic poem.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
|
A grand a comical poem my friend. I appreciate he grand laugh. I found your poetic flow to be excellent and overall a fantastic poem.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
-
Thank you for the kind words.
Steve