Never to Return
5/7/5 contest entry24 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This five - seven - five does a lot to remind the reader that the relentless development of the woodlands means that the delicate balance of nature with succumb to the need and greed of the contractors. Nice poem.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2014
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This five - seven - five does a lot to remind the reader that the relentless development of the woodlands means that the delicate balance of nature with succumb to the need and greed of the contractors. Nice poem.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2014
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Thank you, Bill, this goes on more than we think. As contractors would rather pay the fine, and get rid of the tree.
Comment from Domino 2
How true your notes are!
Excellent 575 describes the Eagle's plight with drama and expression so well in restrictive format.
Nice one!
Best wishes, Ted
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2014
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How true your notes are!
Excellent 575 describes the Eagle's plight with drama and expression so well in restrictive format.
Nice one!
Best wishes, Ted
Comment Written 31-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the lovely review.
Comment from dennis0530
Sadly, so true. And more despicable because the so-called "developers" destroy the natural habitat in the name of progress and development. They couldn't care less that these magnificent birds are losing their homes. Their main concern is building homes for people and rake in money.
The writer rues the situation. Not so much for the loss of these lofty creatures but also the cruelty inflicted.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014
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Sadly, so true. And more despicable because the so-called "developers" destroy the natural habitat in the name of progress and development. They couldn't care less that these magnificent birds are losing their homes. Their main concern is building homes for people and rake in money.
The writer rues the situation. Not so much for the loss of these lofty creatures but also the cruelty inflicted.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014
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What a wonderful review. I'm so glad you "got" my intent with this poem. Thank you
Comment from SLHarper
A very clear, important message, with the third line appropriately serving as a synthesis and an ironic twist. Hopefully, your message will make an impact on your environmental conservation efforts. Sometimes poetry can afford people consciences where other methods to communicate fail. Good luck in the contest! Steph H.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014
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A very clear, important message, with the third line appropriately serving as a synthesis and an ironic twist. Hopefully, your message will make an impact on your environmental conservation efforts. Sometimes poetry can afford people consciences where other methods to communicate fail. Good luck in the contest! Steph H.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014
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Thank you, for this really intelligent review.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I never knew that but I will definitely think twice now before I mess with a birds nest. Great job with this and thanks for teaching me something. :)
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014
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I never knew that but I will definitely think twice now before I mess with a birds nest. Great job with this and thanks for teaching me something. :)
Comment Written 30-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014
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Oh, this review made my day. Thank you for reading it with the right heart.
Comment from Righteous Riter
in lush green forest
Bald Eagles once nested where
real estate thrives
The photo compliments the piece well. The syllable count is spot on. Good alliteration with eagles/estate. Clear message that is short and simple.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014
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in lush green forest
Bald Eagles once nested where
real estate thrives
The photo compliments the piece well. The syllable count is spot on. Good alliteration with eagles/estate. Clear message that is short and simple.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from livelylinda
Author: nice poem, reads well. Your message is an important one for us to remember. Your last line syllable count keeps coming up 4 syllables instead of 5. I counted and recounted and got out the dictionary but I still get 4 syllables. You might want to check that before the contest ends. Good luck in the contest. livelylinda
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014
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Author: nice poem, reads well. Your message is an important one for us to remember. Your last line syllable count keeps coming up 4 syllables instead of 5. I counted and recounted and got out the dictionary but I still get 4 syllables. You might want to check that before the contest ends. Good luck in the contest. livelylinda
Comment Written 30-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014
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I'm sorry but if you look it up in the dictionary, or an on line dictionary, you will find that real has two syllable counts, estate is two, and thrives is one syllable. I've had this discussion with many regarding this poem. Please, look it up? None the less, thank you for the review.
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I'm so sorry Val, I was wrong. I looked up estate and thrives to double check their syllable count but never thought that 'real' could have two syllables. Ya learn something new every day! I humbly apologize for my error. Please forgive me. livelylinda
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I'm so sorry Val, I was wrong. I looked up estate and thrives to double check their syllable count but never thought that 'real' could have two syllables. Ya learn something new every day! I humbly apologize for my error. Please forgive me. livelylinda
Comment from whubbard7
Awesome! I love poems with a message like this. I was picturing your poem, and the last line caught me kinda off guard, and I started thinking, "what does that mean?" Then I read the author notes and learned a very important message. Greed affects everything, and everyone. And no matter how much you fight to save something, there will always be too much greed and lack of caring to keep everything in balance. One poem might not do much, but hey, it affected and informed me. Good job, a lot of tightly packed information in three lines. And a good poem by itself, too.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014
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Awesome! I love poems with a message like this. I was picturing your poem, and the last line caught me kinda off guard, and I started thinking, "what does that mean?" Then I read the author notes and learned a very important message. Greed affects everything, and everyone. And no matter how much you fight to save something, there will always be too much greed and lack of caring to keep everything in balance. One poem might not do much, but hey, it affected and informed me. Good job, a lot of tightly packed information in three lines. And a good poem by itself, too.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014
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What a fabulous review! I'm so glad my author's notes helped, as I very rarely use them. I just had a friend have this happen on a property right next to her home, and even after she specifically told the contractor that the eagles came back every year to nest there, he still took the tree down. And the tree was no where near where he was building.
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Hmm... interesting story. I wonder what was going through that contractor's mind as he did that. Besides, of course, money.
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Agree, I think the eagles coming back year after year might have caused problems. Eagles are preditors, so their existence could cause problems. Yet, they were there first. Also, it's against the law to take the nests down. And this out in the woods in Washington State. So much more, but I don't want to bore you
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No, no, no. Not bored at all. I'm a detail-oriented type of person, anyway. And yes, eagles are predators, but... well... in essence, so are humans.
Comment from Patti R.
Your poem meets the contest requirements of 5-7-5 syllable count perfectly. Good luck to you in this contest. What you have described about the Bald Eagle is indicative of what happens to so many species of wild life as the planet continues to take over natural habitats.
Patti
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014
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Your poem meets the contest requirements of 5-7-5 syllable count perfectly. Good luck to you in this contest. What you have described about the Bald Eagle is indicative of what happens to so many species of wild life as the planet continues to take over natural habitats.
Patti
Comment Written 30-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014
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Thank you, Patti
Comment from nelliesellie
Greed and a I come first kind of attitude. Animals were on this earth first. Animals help create a balance. We don't If we don't do something soon, where will be no more animals or plants to help. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014
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Greed and a I come first kind of attitude. Animals were on this earth first. Animals help create a balance. We don't If we don't do something soon, where will be no more animals or plants to help. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014
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Agree, with your observations, and thank you for the wonderful review.