Finally, Letting Go
Mixed Rhyme & Meter Scheme-Contest Entry-Letting Go8 total reviews
Comment from seaglass
This Letting Go poem for contests reflects on inner struggles rather than the usual letting go of material things , relationships, or loved ones in death. The point is it is a 'letting go" that must be repeated many time over a lifetime. You let yourself go free with writing style, using a bit of various techniques and it turned out great. Good luck.
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This Letting Go poem for contests reflects on inner struggles rather than the usual letting go of material things , relationships, or loved ones in death. The point is it is a 'letting go" that must be repeated many time over a lifetime. You let yourself go free with writing style, using a bit of various techniques and it turned out great. Good luck.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
Comment from Charlene0513
If unforgiveness lurks in the soul the mind permeates the thoughts of that evil deed until the pain in your heart cannot absorb it any more and redemption is all that will save you from the pitfalls of life.
Charlene
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If unforgiveness lurks in the soul the mind permeates the thoughts of that evil deed until the pain in your heart cannot absorb it any more and redemption is all that will save you from the pitfalls of life.
Charlene
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
Comment from suep
I enjoyed the creative and artistic approach and how you incorporated such variety into the writing of this piece. I love how your 'please- anyone... I'm afraid.' was in smaller font and italicized to stress the tentativeness and smallness of one in fear. Beautiful message and the last line 'for with regret, I prayed.' shows the heartfelt sincerity of one who recognizes their need for forgive. Excellent work ... Best wishes in the contest! :)
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I enjoyed the creative and artistic approach and how you incorporated such variety into the writing of this piece. I love how your 'please- anyone... I'm afraid.' was in smaller font and italicized to stress the tentativeness and smallness of one in fear. Beautiful message and the last line 'for with regret, I prayed.' shows the heartfelt sincerity of one who recognizes their need for forgive. Excellent work ... Best wishes in the contest! :)
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
Comment from Sonaleeka
Great writing!!
I liked this lines:"Yet, the price for all my foolish stumbles,
has been paid for me- without me earning.
Though beneath my feet the whole world crumbles,
The Spirit's touch, responds to my yearning."
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Great writing!!
I liked this lines:"Yet, the price for all my foolish stumbles,
has been paid for me- without me earning.
Though beneath my feet the whole world crumbles,
The Spirit's touch, responds to my yearning."
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
Comment from mfowler
This poem takes your voice on a journey from failure to forgiveness, from the verge of 'return from diamond, back to coal.' It is in this blackest moment he calls for help and through spirit is saved by forgiveness. You imply that he's been in the dark place before, and that it is in the letting go and accepting grace that he is saved. Your format is well suited to movements of his moods in this frame of mind. Godd luck in the contestm.!
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This poem takes your voice on a journey from failure to forgiveness, from the verge of 'return from diamond, back to coal.' It is in this blackest moment he calls for help and through spirit is saved by forgiveness. You imply that he's been in the dark place before, and that it is in the letting go and accepting grace that he is saved. Your format is well suited to movements of his moods in this frame of mind. Godd luck in the contestm.!
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
Wow. This is an amazing mix here. It works together to a coherent piece. I so resent pieces that don't show skill. This has content and skill. An awesomesome work
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Wow. This is an amazing mix here. It works together to a coherent piece. I so resent pieces that don't show skill. This has content and skill. An awesomesome work
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
Comment from rouskin
Nice contest entry with good imagery throughout the poem My favorite part:Condemnation permeates this guilty hideous hole, my strangulated faith seeks breath within my wicked soul.
Best of luck in the contest
Blessings, Rouskin
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Nice contest entry with good imagery throughout the poem My favorite part:Condemnation permeates this guilty hideous hole, my strangulated faith seeks breath within my wicked soul.
Best of luck in the contest
Blessings, Rouskin
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
Comment from Andrewajgblue
I really enjoyed the, the message was clear, I thought your rhyming was great some good alliteration and the presentation was very good, and the pace was light, good work,
Andrew
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I really enjoyed the, the message was clear, I thought your rhyming was great some good alliteration and the presentation was very good, and the pace was light, good work,
Andrew
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014