Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

These tiny tales of terror are terrifying! I have never seen a tornado, except in films, we don't get the extremes in weather here in the UK, thank goodness! I loved the twist in the end, poor girl didn't stand a chance and the fortune teller got it all wrong! Excellent! xsx Sandra

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015

Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from Jumbo J

Excellent

Hi Debbie,
wonder what it is with the tornado dreams?

I know one thing for sure... won't be looking into any crystal balls... just in case... great read... but I don't know where the knife came from and why didn't the crystal ball reveal that? Hmmmmmmm, was it all a nasty ruse about the tornado to get the girl to run out and into the knife? Yeah, no gypsy looking-crystal ball rubbing for me.

Don't know if I would have added the Dean part into the story... probably would have added that in the authors notes.

No matter, still enjoyed your tiny tales of terror... well done!

With our thoughts we create,
tarot cards readings,
James vx's.

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015

See my post late today. Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from EMB

Excellent

Well, well, well. From a tornado to a knife. I must admit, I did not see that one coming. Are you referring to Dean Kuch? That part didn't seem to be part of the story.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015

Yes, Dean Kuch started this multi-author book. Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Well, dear friend, with respect, this time I have some suggestions to offer because this is a clever story idea you've had and you missed a couple of edits.The first two are grammar-related, and the last one is an example of how that sentence could be re-written without having to use "etcetera" - it's not done in creative writing (though I know most of what you write is poetry or important, nonfiction articles.)

1) "Alice had been afraid of tornadoes since she (had) watched..." - omit "had" that second time
2) "Then she saw herself (being) sucked up and dropped a mile away(,) her limp, lifeless body left in a muddy cornfield."
3) "She wanted to know her fortune, her potential for romance, anything but what she'd seen."

LOL, Deb, Dean will love it! :))

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015

Thanks, Dawn. I appreciate your suggestions and have made the changes. Thank you, my friend~Debbie

reply by Dawn Munro on 02-Sep-2015

I'm just glad I had something to offer. Deb. :)

Comment from barkingdog

Excellent

She saw her death and ran directly into it.
So many people fear storms--hurricane, tornadoes, etc.
Again, you always pace these stories so well. Slow and steady you led us down the path and then snap the trap.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015

Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

I didn't expect that ending. Ugh. Poor thing. She did die, but not by a tornado. So many horror stories end wiht someone dying. I wonder if you could write one that's scary, but doesn't include death. :)

heart-racing << Remove hyphen.

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015

Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

In first grade, we are discussing weather and the immediate response to weather is tornados. It's not surpising. I enjoyed reading your post. It's well written and purely honest.

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015

Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

That wasn't very knife ...sorry my muse has taken over . Rick O Shea is a mischievous one celled creature bouncing madding ly in my brain
Great twist at the end....twist...now that's funny, I don't care you are
Well penned
Dean will approve
God bless

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015

Too funny again. Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from Lovinia

Excellent

Hi Debbie

You have nightmares about tornadoes? Better avoid the fortune tellers then ... and watch out for that knife. :))

YIKES! Another creepy tale to add to your collection. You do these so well. I guess we can spend all our time worrying about what might happen and it never comes to fruition. My mother is a life-long worrier, a bit paranoid. I always tell her to worry about it WHEN it happens. :)) Poor mum, I'm not very helpful am I? Hahahaha!. Great work, I've enjoyed very much. Yes, better not to know ... maybe? lol Hugs - Lovi xoxo

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015

Thanks, Lovi. I'm having fun with these. Good advice, but hard to follow I hope you are well. Sue is going to teach a tanka and tanka prose class soon. I'm hoping I can afford it. Take care, my friend~Debbie

reply by Lovinia on 03-Sep-2015

You are good at them. Thanks for advise about Sue's class, I'd love to do it. I'm pretty much locked in (in the real world), for Sept, Oct, Nov ... then it's Christmas. I might make it. I hope you can. Hugs - Lovi xoxo

Comment from royowen

Excellent

An interesting one this one, it didn't turn out quite the way I thought it would, seeing her own demise, she rushes out of the tent right into a knife, well done, Debbie, nice surprising ending, who would have thought....nicely written, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015

Thank you, my friend~Debbie

reply by royowen on 02-Sep-2015

Most welcome Debbie