Comment from kathleenspalding

Excellent

Wow! The ending lines.really make this a great poem. Excellent choice of artwork. Flows well. I would recommend this poem to anyone.

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2016

Glad it was enjoyed. Thank you for the kind review.

reply by kathleenspalding on 26-Jan-2016

You're welcome.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Yes, God is omnipresent, and He is everywhere.
Of course, come to think of it, you could just as easily be referring to a lover that passed away, or simply left.
I'm kinda leaning towards God, however. I believe that was your intent.

Whichever it was, this was a sensational and wonderfully presented Nonet.
Good luck in the booth!
~Dean :}

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2016

You are correct on my intent. The word 'Christ' just didn't seem to fit even with the correct syllable count. Thanks for the review.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

What a lovely artwork you selected to establish the mood for your nonet. I especially liked your image of the "sun" waking the "day". Best wishes in the contest- Joan

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2016

Thank you very much for your review and kind comments.

Comment from angel123

Exceptional

I think your poem flows beautifully and I enjoyed reading it. Your message is spiritual, powerful and inspiring. I also like your artwork choice.

Angel123

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2016

Thank you so very much for the review and the stars. I am honored.

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

Very nice and nicely written and a good verse. A great entry in the contest fits well. Good luck in the contest with this. have a wonderful Day.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2016

Thank you. The contest is really a challenge as this is my first attempt at this style. I am enjoying reading others versions. I appreciate your review.

Comment from Sambangi

Excellent

Hi,
This is a very good nonet poem on a beautiful subject. Excellent image goes with it. Please check the syllable count once again. "I always see" has 4 syllables, as per rule this line should have three, if I'm right

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2016

I have noted your suggestion and made changes. It has been hard focusing on the syllables rather than the word count as this has been my first Nonet. Thanks so much for your kind review.

reply by Sambangi on 25-Jan-2016

You are welcome :-)

Comment from Cheryl9359

Excellent

Very nice poem. I myself just tried this type of poetry today. It was something new and fun to try. You did a great job describing the dawn. Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2016

Glad you have tried it too. This was my first and I made many mistakes as it was difficult focusing on the syllable count which made the sentences different lengths rather than the word count which would have been easier. But this is not easy. Go for it . Thanks for your kind review.

Comment from Alexaq

Good

The imagery in this poem is very vivid and beautiful. The last two lines are a little confusing since they don't really seem to fit with the rest of the poem or with each other. As a whole, this poem was a short yet powerful read.

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 Comment Written 24-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2016

I did make some adjustments as you suggested in the last two lines.Thanks so much for your kind review.

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

I like the metaphor of Jesus' face in the first light of dawn, as it suggests the idea of new beginnings. However,I found your line breaks somewhat arbitrary, a bit like prose that had been chopped up into lines just to satisfy the syllable count. I think that there is more to the nonet form than that. I enjoyed your imagery in "the soft, shimmering / Moonbeams that bathe the / Dark face of night; "

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2016

Thanks so much for your kind review.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

We were singing something in church about seeing Jesus face in the sunrise and in the sunset tester day, although it went beyond that, I remember somebody asking me how I knew the existence, it's quite hard when one knows within one's self of His existence, I simply said what you said here. But .beautifully written in simple but profound words. Great.entry in this nonet contest, well done, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2016

Thanks so much for your kind review.

reply by royowen on 25-Jan-2016

Most welcome