Comment from melyuki

Excellent

Hi Annie thanks for sharing this delightful verse about the moon. It's easy flowing lines and simplicity of word structure make it perfect for kids to understand and enjoy. and adults also... I love rhyming verse and the final stanza is a beauty.. finishing with that question ' are those the times you cannot sleep?' what a lovely ending to keep those little minds pondering. thanks for sharing and have a happy day, cheers mel xx

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2016

Thank you so much for the review of my poem. It is amazing how childhood memories pop up into the mind when writing. I was always a daydreamer and think that is how much of my "stuff" has come about. Have a good day.

Comment from TallySally

Excellent

Really nice poem - for children AND for adultst. Can imagine a grandmother and grandchild leaning on a window-jamb looking up at the moon and reciting your words.
Your work reads smoothly. The rhyming is effortless (seamless and doesn't draw attention tothe rhyme itself).
Very nice.
God bless and my best,
Relda

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016

Thank you for your kind review. I have always been fascinated by the moon, and the changes day by day in it's appearance.

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

Love the - cloudy mist of angel lace - great description. This is a lovely children's poem with each verse telling its own little story. A delightful read.

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2016

Thank you so much. I always loved the moon and finding the face when it was full. We lose that when we grow up.

Comment from Mary Wakeford

Excellent

So I really loved this. Perhaps because I still retain an early childhood memory of a well loved visiting uncle and all of my family on our driveway with him admiring a full moon. My uncle telling me the story of the man in the moon and pointing his features out to one rapt five year old child. That would be me. Lovely.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2016

Thank you for the review. I always enjoyed the moon as a child; trying to find the face when it was full.

Comment from F. Wehr3

Excellent

Nice work! I really enjoyed this, and I 'm not even a child, lol. Really descriptive imagery with a child-like fantasy and wonder.

Take care,
Russell

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016

Thank you for the review. I always enjoyed the moon as a child; trying to find the face when it was full.

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

Yes this is a more grown up poem for children than most and it will make a good bridge from the nursery to the schoolroom. The last verse interest me as an ex teacher as it could lead to a discussion as to why the moon is sometime visible by day and other features of the waxing and waning moon.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016

A very interesting review. I thank you for your input. I can remember wondering why the moon was visible during the day. My first child's poem so I appreciate your time in review.

reply by Pantygynt on 01-Feb-2016

I am an ex teacher of younger kids so I think my slipis showing. Lol.

Comment from scd41

Excellent

Children have always been fascinated by moon. They love to hear mythological stories of moon which grannies love to share with them. Your poem has been written nicely keeping children in mind. It is simple and rhymes well. Good luck to you in the contest.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016

I always liked finding the face when the moon was full when I was a child. Thanks for reviewing.

Comment from nancyjam

Excellent

This is a lovely poem for children.
Children seem to be fascinated by the moon so
this is very appealing.
Beautifully rhymed with smooth meter
and lovely images.
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016

I always loved the moon and finding the face when it was full. Thank you for your kind comments.

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

I love your moon poem for children. I have difficulty writing a children's poem, because I'm not sure how to write for young minds? Any hints?

Best wishes in this contest.

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2016

Thanks for your review and kind comments. Wish I had something to offer but this is the first poem for children that I have done.

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Good artwork.
-Good imagery and use of rhyme.
-You tell a good story about the moon.
-Many questions about the moon that children would like:
"Oh moon why do you ring your face
With cloudy mist of angel lace?"
-Other lines I line are:
* "And then I watch as you erase
Your round shape down to crescent face."

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2016

Thanks for your review and kind comments.

reply by Pam (respa) on 31-Jan-2016

You are welcome.