After the French Man
A humorous post break up in Paris14 total reviews
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
LOL! This meets the contest requirements beautifully as the end is certainly a well executed and unexpected twist to the build up. The rhyme and meter are solid throughout and the use of couplets makes it stand out from the others. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2016
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LOL! This meets the contest requirements beautifully as the end is certainly a well executed and unexpected twist to the build up. The rhyme and meter are solid throughout and the use of couplets makes it stand out from the others. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2016
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Thank you! Tied with a bunch for 2nd place, but it is my first contest ever, so I am excited!
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CONGRATULATIONS!!!! may it be the first of many more to come.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. We here in South Africa also have a little town named after the very popular Paris in France. They named the town 'Parys' because it reminded a German surveyor Schilbach of the River Seine in Paris France.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
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A very well-written poem. We here in South Africa also have a little town named after the very popular Paris in France. They named the town 'Parys' because it reminded a German surveyor Schilbach of the River Seine in Paris France.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
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That is very interesting. We all have a little Paris close to us. :)
Comment from Grasshopper2
Rules of engagement: Twist a poem with at least one twist about any subject Blind entries. Good lead up to the twist. Well done. Good luck.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
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Rules of engagement: Twist a poem with at least one twist about any subject Blind entries. Good lead up to the twist. Well done. Good luck.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
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Thank you. It was a fun one!
Comment from winnona
A well-written contest entry. Your words flow nicely together line to line combining and sending the message of the poem to the reader. I think you have done well completing the challenge of the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
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A well-written contest entry. Your words flow nicely together line to line combining and sending the message of the poem to the reader. I think you have done well completing the challenge of the contest.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
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Thank you! I appreciate your words. I am excited to be in a contest, as I am new here, but enjoying the fast feedback.
Comment from oliver818
Funny poem, and Goodyear! I am also guilty of putting on French accents in French sounding places. Thanks for sharing, good luck with the contest and have a great day
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
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Funny poem, and Goodyear! I am also guilty of putting on French accents in French sounding places. Thanks for sharing, good luck with the contest and have a great day
Comment Written 15-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
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Driving around, alone in my car, speaking about things in a fake French accent is one of my guilty pleasures! Thank you for your review.
Comment from BeasPeas
I enjoyed the premise of your poem which brought a smile. I've not been to Paris, Kentucky, but it sounds like a fun place. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
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I enjoyed the premise of your poem which brought a smile. I've not been to Paris, Kentucky, but it sounds like a fun place. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 14-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
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Thank you! I knew the end as soon as I read the contest. . .
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Hello, I was born and raised in the greatest state in the union, Kentucky. The dancing there was just fine. Maybe we didn't have fancy pastries and champaign, but possum and moonshine are better.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
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Hello, I was born and raised in the greatest state in the union, Kentucky. The dancing there was just fine. Maybe we didn't have fancy pastries and champaign, but possum and moonshine are better.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
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I sincerely have regrets for not working in possum and moonshine!!
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing. I believe there is a Paris, Texas, as well. It was on one of the Travelocity commercials. The rhymes on the couplets work; if you smoothed out the meter, I bet you'd be pleased with the result. This should do well in the contest. Good luck with your contest entry!
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
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Thank you for sharing. I believe there is a Paris, Texas, as well. It was on one of the Travelocity commercials. The rhymes on the couplets work; if you smoothed out the meter, I bet you'd be pleased with the result. This should do well in the contest. Good luck with your contest entry!
Comment Written 14-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
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Thank you for taking the time to read it and I have been reading up on meter and some other things, I like general fiction writing better, but trying to do these poems makes my mind seem to open up. I aim to improve and appreciate helpful feedback!
Comment from June Sargent
What a fun poem! Loved the twist in the end. Didn't see that one coming! Trading in stinky cheese for sassy boots! Enjoyed it. Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
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What a fun poem! Loved the twist in the end. Didn't see that one coming! Trading in stinky cheese for sassy boots! Enjoyed it. Well done.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
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Thank you! I thought it was fun, think of it in the voting booth soon! :)
Comment from Bollie
Now that is a very clever and creative twist that made me smile. The photo really makes the twist punch you in the mouth at the end because as you read this poem your mind keeps bringing up the image of the Eiffel Tower. The rhyming is really good and unforced which makes the poem flow effortlessly. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
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Now that is a very clever and creative twist that made me smile. The photo really makes the twist punch you in the mouth at the end because as you read this poem your mind keeps bringing up the image of the Eiffel Tower. The rhyming is really good and unforced which makes the poem flow effortlessly. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
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Thank you! It was fun to write, but scary to be in a contest!