Poems By AnnieDawn
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Lost In A Snowstorm"My book of poems and stories
30 total reviews
Comment from Bichon
Very well written poem. I was very interested in this topic, and I was anxious to find out the ending whilst I was reading. It is very creative to base it off a true story. I am glad the girl was found.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017
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Very well written poem. I was very interested in this topic, and I was anxious to find out the ending whilst I was reading. It is very creative to base it off a true story. I am glad the girl was found.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017
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Thank you. I was glad she was found also because I live to write another day...lol
Comment from jaded831
What heart wrenching story, your poem ended sad, but I am glad the true story ended on a happy note. Your poem makes for a great entry, I can't find anything negate to say. From me you get a thumbs up. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017
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What heart wrenching story, your poem ended sad, but I am glad the true story ended on a happy note. Your poem makes for a great entry, I can't find anything negate to say. From me you get a thumbs up. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017
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Thanks so much for your kind words and honest review.
Comment from Ogden
Your post shows you to be a talented poet, and an even better storyteller. What I expected to be a routine read, turned out to be a moving narrative.
Don (aka Ogden)
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017
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Your post shows you to be a talented poet, and an even better storyteller. What I expected to be a routine read, turned out to be a moving narrative.
Don (aka Ogden)
Comment Written 08-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your kind remarks and thoughtful review. I am so honored and really at a loss for words.
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You earned the rating. You'd better be able to come up with more words, just in case you decide to write another poem.
Comment from LindaJWolff
I've been in this place before, but it was in a car stranded in a snow storm. Very challenging upon the mind. Wonderful depiction of how one would feel in this piece of poetry! Awesome write!
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017
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I've been in this place before, but it was in a car stranded in a snow storm. Very challenging upon the mind. Wonderful depiction of how one would feel in this piece of poetry! Awesome write!
Comment Written 08-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017
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I am sorry to hear you had to feel the hopelessness that this event was so apparent in this little girls life. It is a tragedy but , unfortunately, does happen. Thanks for your kind review.
Comment from nbonner
Such a sad ending but nicely written. The poem flowed really well and the imagery used made the poem come alive. Thank you for sharing and best wishes in the contest. N.B
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017
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Such a sad ending but nicely written. The poem flowed really well and the imagery used made the poem come alive. Thank you for sharing and best wishes in the contest. N.B
Comment Written 08-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017
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Thank you for making this a positive addition to the contest. I hesitated a bit before I entered it.
Comment from Pullmanspb
When I read your author's comments, I sent my wishes to you that you would consider the fact that this young girl was found in a graveyard. That could add even more rear and trepidation to your quite descriptive poem.
Nice job and quite and interesting story.
Steven
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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When I read your author's comments, I sent my wishes to you that you would consider the fact that this young girl was found in a graveyard. That could add even more rear and trepidation to your quite descriptive poem.
Nice job and quite and interesting story.
Steven
Comment Written 07-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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Thanks for your kind review. Someday I may write about the event in story form. It is still so vivid in my memory. Mom found me huddled by a gravestone, and I have no idea how as you couldn't see your hand in front of your face.
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"more rear?" When am I going to do a better job of proof reading. It should have been "...more fear."
Comment from Kerry Foley
Oh my goodness what a sad story. Did she die? It was unclear if she just fell asleep, or fwll asleep to die:(( You did a terrific job writing this into an ABC poem. Wonderfully done. Good luck in the contest. ~Kerry
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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Oh my goodness what a sad story. Did she die? It was unclear if she just fell asleep, or fwll asleep to die:(( You did a terrific job writing this into an ABC poem. Wonderfully done. Good luck in the contest. ~Kerry
Comment Written 07-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your kind review and yes she did die in the poem.
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Ohhh, how very sad. and, you are very welcome.
Comment from loismddavis
you have fulfilled the prompt by sharing a complete story in your poem--not such a happy ending. the rhyme scheme is a little odd and I would have liked some poetic elements--I did recognize some alliteration
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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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you have fulfilled the prompt by sharing a complete story in your poem--not such a happy ending. the rhyme scheme is a little odd and I would have liked some poetic elements--I did recognize some alliteration
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Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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I am sorry that this poem did not meet your expectations. I am not sure how I would have improved on it to make changes that would have pleased your rating senses. I am a novice so not skilled in this and still learning. I did change the ending. I know it is sad but not all events are happy. I thank you for your honesty and for taking the time to review this poem.
Comment from humpwhistle
I like this poem, and the story it tells.
But I'm at odds with your decision to use the last two lines to 'solicit' emotion.
That rings 'commercial' to me.
Perhaps you could elicit similar emotion, without being so blatant?
Just a thought.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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I like this poem, and the story it tells.
But I'm at odds with your decision to use the last two lines to 'solicit' emotion.
That rings 'commercial' to me.
Perhaps you could elicit similar emotion, without being so blatant?
Just a thought.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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The paragraph was blatant as you said, and I took it out. I also changed a bit of the wording in the last sentence. I thank you for reviewing and for your honest opinions I value them.
Comment from tfawcus
Graphic intensity achieved here through your use of language. One can feel the terror and despair. The final lines give your poem very much the same emotional grip as is found in stories such as Hans Christian Andersen's The Little Matchgirl.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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Graphic intensity achieved here through your use of language. One can feel the terror and despair. The final lines give your poem very much the same emotional grip as is found in stories such as Hans Christian Andersen's The Little Matchgirl.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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Thank you for reviewing and your honesty. I have received some comments about the sadness but not all events are happy. I have an old book that is full of sad childhood events that were popular in the 1800's. Anyway thanks again.