Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

Great perspective presented. We can't change the past with all the reflection in this world. Well thought out and clearly written. Creative. Optimistic. Good visual imagery. Nice work. Good luck in the contest :)

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2017

Thank you for your kind review. Have a great weekend.

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Good rhyming and flow in this entry for the contest. A smile does help us get through lots of situations. It's good to reflect on things, I think, but too much reflection may cripple us from moving on. If we do the best we can each day, that's all we can do. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2017

Thank you so much for your kind review. I don't think anyone picked up on the wavering back and fort emotional balance that was the actual imperfection. I guess I was not able to portray that very well after all.

Comment from smileycloud

Excellent

great rhyme scheme
the meter cadence flow and all the poetic form is very well done
the storyline is well represented and very interesting
does not waver off the theme at all at any time
good entry
have a smiley day

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017

Thank you so very much for your encouraging review. My last review was so negative that I was thinking I should not have entered at all but ditched the poem. Thank you for the vote of confidence.

reply by smileycloud on 25-Aug-2017

I would hope you do not lose faith in your poem
it is good
there are many writers who give me advice on my learning curve
but to give up is not an option if it is writing that you love
you have a smiley day
blessings
lorraine

reply by smileycloud on 25-Aug-2017

I went back and read it yet again
I still believe that it is just fine work
the meter of 9 even stays true with the rhyme as well
I know that keeping strict meter is more difficult but worth it
I did write a few free verse in between strict poem just to give my brain a break for a while but the more formal styles are classics and yiu are doing just fine

Comment from loismddavis

Good

the contest was to write a poem about not being perfect--your poem made you sound human to me. I liked the presentation and am always surprised at where people find the perfect picture. You have written a rhyming poem --some times I felt that you wrote the line just to get the rhyme and the line did not fit. Free verse mi8ght let you express your feelings more clearly.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017

I appreciate your comments and review. I couldn't have said it better if I had written in free form but I don't write in free form I write in rhyme. This probably does not make sense to you as you are probably skilled at writing free form but that is not one of my gifts. Rhyme just flows from my inner being and I have been able to do that from a very early age. I am sorry that it did not appeal to you but not all poetry appeals to everyone. I do thank you for your time and kindness in reviewing my entry.

reply by loismddavis on 25-Aug-2017

I understand

Comment from Poetic Friend

Excellent

So, your flaw is the smile that you maintain. If so, I think we all should have such a flaw. To maintain positivity, even when things seem negative. This poem definitely allows the reader to reflect.

Great usage of rhyme and meter.

I like the imagery in the second stanza.

Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017

Thank you so much for your kind review. I do appreciate your time.