For Rhonda
a friend killed in Las Vegas12 total reviews
Comment from schatzling
I am so sorry you lost a friend to that unforgiving situation turned massacre in Las Vegas. Can you believe there have been over 200 of these mass killings this year. Lord have mercy.
I read your poem and it does say a lot but for me the last line just does not seem right.....have you ever heard of a dangling modifier? Well, this is NOT that but it seems out of order.....Could it perhaps....Would it perhaps sound better as
Dad and a motherless child cry every night.....maybe it is just me.....Please take my comment with a grain of salt....and I meant no ill will.
My main reason for being here at this moment is that I personally wanted to thank you for selecting my painting to accommodate your writing. How fitting in deed. I am truly honored you chose mine.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2017
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I am so sorry you lost a friend to that unforgiving situation turned massacre in Las Vegas. Can you believe there have been over 200 of these mass killings this year. Lord have mercy.
I read your poem and it does say a lot but for me the last line just does not seem right.....have you ever heard of a dangling modifier? Well, this is NOT that but it seems out of order.....Could it perhaps....Would it perhaps sound better as
Dad and a motherless child cry every night.....maybe it is just me.....Please take my comment with a grain of salt....and I meant no ill will.
My main reason for being here at this moment is that I personally wanted to thank you for selecting my painting to accommodate your writing. How fitting in deed. I am truly honored you chose mine.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2017
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You're absolutely right about the grammatical aspect of this piece. But I was writing with my heart and not my mind at that moment. Thank you for the honest comments and the artwork.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello June Sargent
with your words of sincere emotions in so few words are perfect tribute to you friend Rhonda
Tears
Gert
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Hello June Sargent
with your words of sincere emotions in so few words are perfect tribute to you friend Rhonda
Tears
Gert
Comment Written 06-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Thank you for your kind consideration.
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You are welcome June Sargent
Gert
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, my friend,
I like how you personalized the mass massacre in Las Vegas. Poor Rhonda LeRocque, along with all the other victims. It's a shame. Well done.
Senseless 2
taking of life 4
causes ripples 4
A motherless child and dad - cry every night 12.....good syllable count
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017
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Hello, my friend,
I like how you personalized the mass massacre in Las Vegas. Poor Rhonda LeRocque, along with all the other victims. It's a shame. Well done.
Senseless 2
taking of life 4
causes ripples 4
A motherless child and dad - cry every night 12.....good syllable count
Comment Written 04-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017
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Thank you for your kind consideration.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt and sad poem. When we know someone who became a victim of such a senseless killing spree, it makes it more personal and more reason to condemn such actions.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017
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A very well-written heartfelt and sad poem. When we know someone who became a victim of such a senseless killing spree, it makes it more personal and more reason to condemn such actions.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017
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Thank you for your insightful review.
Comment from BeasPeas
It is senseless. We are always shocked by these events and there is no determining when or where they will occur. A timely piece and blessings to all who lost love ones. Marilyn
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017
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It is senseless. We are always shocked by these events and there is no determining when or where they will occur. A timely piece and blessings to all who lost love ones. Marilyn
Comment Written 04-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017
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Thank you for your kind comments.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 2-4-4-12, For Rhonda, has the prescribed syllable alignment and takes a piece of the current tragedy and makes it real for the readers. The immensity of this latest assault on humanity will mark us all with its senseless waste.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017
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This 2-4-4-12, For Rhonda, has the prescribed syllable alignment and takes a piece of the current tragedy and makes it real for the readers. The immensity of this latest assault on humanity will mark us all with its senseless waste.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017
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Thank you for your kind comments and insights.
Comment from angel123
Thank you for sharing your feelings in your poem about the recent shooting in Los Vegas. Your poem is well-written and emotional. Your artwork choice goes well with your message.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017
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Thank you for sharing your feelings in your poem about the recent shooting in Los Vegas. Your poem is well-written and emotional. Your artwork choice goes well with your message.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017
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Thank you for your kind comments.
Comment from RodG
This tribute to your friend summarizes the senselessness of this crime very well while focusing on a single victim and the family and friends left behind wondering WHY?
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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This tribute to your friend summarizes the senselessness of this crime very well while focusing on a single victim and the family and friends left behind wondering WHY?
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Comment from Teri7
This is just so sad that it had to happen! I am so sorry your friend had to die. You did a great job with this type of memorial poem for her. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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This is just so sad that it had to happen! I am so sorry your friend had to die. You did a great job with this type of memorial poem for her. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Thank for you for review and kind comments.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about the state of living, manmade, never fateful status of death and how the act of terrorism causing and enhancing terror in peaceful state of living point blank; I liked.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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This speaks about the state of living, manmade, never fateful status of death and how the act of terrorism causing and enhancing terror in peaceful state of living point blank; I liked.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Thank you for your review and encouraging comments.