Misfire: A Vet's Lament
Feelings after returning from war15 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Congratulations on your win. This is a powerful poem detailing the effects of war on the men and how it continues for a lifetime. Your lines read well. The short lines read at a quick pace and add emphasis to the overall message. What a sad experience. He had no one to turn too in his need after fighting for our freedom. That seems to be a common experience for so many who return changed in ways we will never know. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 12-May-2020
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Congratulations on your win. This is a powerful poem detailing the effects of war on the men and how it continues for a lifetime. Your lines read well. The short lines read at a quick pace and add emphasis to the overall message. What a sad experience. He had no one to turn too in his need after fighting for our freedom. That seems to be a common experience for so many who return changed in ways we will never know. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 12-May-2020
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Thanks for the read and review. Trying to get for recognition. Appreciate that you took the time to read and comment.
Comment from Kermit R. Mullins
Congrats on your winning entry. Best wishes for the future. "Shadows of men I killed," become silhouettes in the minds vision, they never leave, lingering long enough to aid discomfort. Human suffering has no cure, we cannot erase thoughts we can only overwhelm them with better ones. It seems you have. Misfire. Best regards.
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Congrats on your winning entry. Best wishes for the future. "Shadows of men I killed," become silhouettes in the minds vision, they never leave, lingering long enough to aid discomfort. Human suffering has no cure, we cannot erase thoughts we can only overwhelm them with better ones. It seems you have. Misfire. Best regards.
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Thanks much for the read and the comments. Much appreciated.
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
You definitely got the human suffering aspect. This hurt to read, but the point of poetry sometimes is to make you feel things. If this is part of your own feelings, I am so sorry.
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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You definitely got the human suffering aspect. This hurt to read, but the point of poetry sometimes is to make you feel things. If this is part of your own feelings, I am so sorry.
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Thanks much for the read and the comments. Much appreciated. Luckily, I did not have to face this trauma.
Comment from January L'Angelle
I can see why this free style poem won. It is excellent. You really captured the essence of a man in pain. You showed the pain of PTSD through the eyes of a soldier that came home. Well done. -January L.
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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I can see why this free style poem won. It is excellent. You really captured the essence of a man in pain. You showed the pain of PTSD through the eyes of a soldier that came home. Well done. -January L.
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Thanks for the read and the comments. Much appreciated.
Comment from Bill Pinder
Excellent writing in terms of expressing unimaginable suffering from war experiences that completely traumatize a person and ruin his life. Hopefully such A person will turn to God for the help that will make a difference to go forward. Bill
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Excellent writing in terms of expressing unimaginable suffering from war experiences that completely traumatize a person and ruin his life. Hopefully such A person will turn to God for the help that will make a difference to go forward. Bill
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Thank you for your read and comments. Prayer and support is needed always when trauma looms.
Comment from HaleyBel
A very moving poem, it must be awful to be a war veteran.
Your poem gave us an outline of what it feels like. God Bless you!
I liked the short sentence style it made it concise and to the point.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-May-2018
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A very moving poem, it must be awful to be a war veteran.
Your poem gave us an outline of what it feels like. God Bless you!
I liked the short sentence style it made it concise and to the point.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-May-2018
reply by the author on 03-May-2018
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Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review. Much appreciated.
Comment from Judvan2
Horribly real beautiful poem. Good job of showing the loss, confusion, hopelessness that is a soldiers. I saw this a lot from men I knew who went to Viet Nam and returned home to blame. Your poem covers all wars, all soldiers. Your words and imagery are perfect.
reply by the author on 03-May-2018
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Horribly real beautiful poem. Good job of showing the loss, confusion, hopelessness that is a soldiers. I saw this a lot from men I knew who went to Viet Nam and returned home to blame. Your poem covers all wars, all soldiers. Your words and imagery are perfect.
Comment Written 03-May-2018
reply by the author on 03-May-2018
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Thank you so much for your read, your rating and your kind words.
Comment from JDRBAR
My heart cries for all our vets. I've known a few from Viet Nam who'll never be the same. It takes a lot of emotion to write the words you've penned. God bless and good luck.
reply by the author on 03-May-2018
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My heart cries for all our vets. I've known a few from Viet Nam who'll never be the same. It takes a lot of emotion to write the words you've penned. God bless and good luck.
Comment Written 03-May-2018
reply by the author on 03-May-2018
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Thank you so much for your read, the rating and your kind words.
Comment from Miriam Collins
Wow, wonderful job in illustrating the immense hardships our military men and women face when they come home. They do so much for all of us and to be mistreated or misunderstood when they come back home is just ridiculous. Your poem is beautifully written, and shares a truth about our world that is difficult to take in. It was also very clever and original to use the word "misfire" like you have. We all need to do more to help these men and women who risk their lives to help keep us safe. Bravo in creating a poem with such depth and purpose!
reply by the author on 03-May-2018
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Wow, wonderful job in illustrating the immense hardships our military men and women face when they come home. They do so much for all of us and to be mistreated or misunderstood when they come back home is just ridiculous. Your poem is beautifully written, and shares a truth about our world that is difficult to take in. It was also very clever and original to use the word "misfire" like you have. We all need to do more to help these men and women who risk their lives to help keep us safe. Bravo in creating a poem with such depth and purpose!
Comment Written 03-May-2018
reply by the author on 03-May-2018
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Thank you for your read and your evaluation. I cannot agree more with you sentiment about our returning soldiers. Much more needs to be done for them in my opinion.
Comment from Air Spirit
Wow. This is such a powerful and poignant poem... it really rips at the core of the heart.. I can feel your pain, vulnerability, denial, anger, and resentment because of all that you had to sacrifice for a war, that seems without end... I honor you. I honor and thank you for your service.. I support you in thought and in spirit.. and to let you know that I "hear you"... you are not alone and I welcome you home..
reply by the author on 03-May-2018
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Wow. This is such a powerful and poignant poem... it really rips at the core of the heart.. I can feel your pain, vulnerability, denial, anger, and resentment because of all that you had to sacrifice for a war, that seems without end... I honor you. I honor and thank you for your service.. I support you in thought and in spirit.. and to let you know that I "hear you"... you are not alone and I welcome you home..
Comment Written 03-May-2018
reply by the author on 03-May-2018
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Thank you for your heartfelt read and review of my work. It is greatly appreciated.