Fishing Buddies
A Sedoka contest entry10 total reviews
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
What a lovely sentimental poem about the old man and a boy, who is "gramps." I love the detail of how the fishing line is explained in the second stanza. A nicely written sedoka poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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What a lovely sentimental poem about the old man and a boy, who is "gramps." I love the detail of how the fishing line is explained in the second stanza. A nicely written sedoka poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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I am delighted you like this little bit of nostalgia. Many thanks for sharing and your kind praise.
Comment from BeasPeas
The image combined with your Sedoka make a nostalgic and well composed entry for the contest. I like the word "mosey" which reinforces the lazy summer day feeling. Good luck with this fine entry. Marilyn
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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The image combined with your Sedoka make a nostalgic and well composed entry for the contest. I like the word "mosey" which reinforces the lazy summer day feeling. Good luck with this fine entry. Marilyn
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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I really enjoyed writing this one because the picture made it easy. I am so pleased you like ?mosey? as it was my intent to convey a lazy, hazy summer mood. Many thanks for your kind praise, Marilyn.
Comment from Bill Schott
This Sedoka poem, Fishing Buddies, has the correct formatting and transitions from the indefinite to the specific. The characters of the poem are personalized by switching from a third person observation to a first person identification. Nice.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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This Sedoka poem, Fishing Buddies, has the correct formatting and transitions from the indefinite to the specific. The characters of the poem are personalized by switching from a third person observation to a first person identification. Nice.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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Thank you so much, Bill, for your comments on specific elements of my Sedoka.
Comment from Tina Crute
I am new on here, so I am really enjoying learning about new styles of poems. This is a beautiful poem about time together with a loved one. My first thought after reading it was, that it would be nice, in an art museum, if poems like this would be accompany each painting. I guess that shows how well your poem and picture go together :-) great job all around!
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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I am new on here, so I am really enjoying learning about new styles of poems. This is a beautiful poem about time together with a loved one. My first thought after reading it was, that it would be nice, in an art museum, if poems like this would be accompany each painting. I guess that shows how well your poem and picture go together :-) great job all around!
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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I am truly flattered to think this shortie might accompany the painting in a gallery. Thank you for your very kind comments.
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You know how some paintings are pretty but you would like to know the meaning behind them? That's what made me think of your poem. Have a great day!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A knowledgeable fishing write with few words that tickle the imagination and take you to the fishing scene of this boy and his Grandpa, a warm and sentimental write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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A knowledgeable fishing write with few words that tickle the imagination and take you to the fishing scene of this boy and his Grandpa, a warm and sentimental write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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I love that phrase ?warm and sentimental write,? Dolly. Thank you so much for your kind praise of ?Fishing Buddies.?
Comment from meeshu
I enjoyed reading this work a great deal. The imagery is fantastic even in this short form. Well done, Mystery-Fisherman. a poem with a great feel..
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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I enjoyed reading this work a great deal. The imagery is fantastic even in this short form. Well done, Mystery-Fisherman. a poem with a great feel..
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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Thank you so much, meeshu, for your kind praise of ?Fishing Buddies.?
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and presentation.
-Syllable count is good.
-You create a good picture of
the grandfather fishing with
his grandson.
-I like the alliteration in
"shimmering summer day"
-The second verse is a good
description of the grandpa's joy.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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-Very nice image and presentation.
-Syllable count is good.
-You create a good picture of
the grandfather fishing with
his grandson.
-I like the alliteration in
"shimmering summer day"
-The second verse is a good
description of the grandpa's joy.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thank you for your praise and very specific comments about ?Fishing Buddies,?Pam.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from oorwull
Memories of fishing days with my Dad. Where to cast. Feel the line. Always fish upstream or you will be seen. Let them play before you set the hook.
Trout for Sunday breakfast, rolled in oatmeal and fried with bacon.
Those were the days.
Willie
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Memories of fishing days with my Dad. Where to cast. Feel the line. Always fish upstream or you will be seen. Let them play before you set the hook.
Trout for Sunday breakfast, rolled in oatmeal and fried with bacon.
Those were the days.
Willie
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thanks for sharing my poem.
Comment from country ranch writer
Love this work up for this poem it is so precious of them fishing and just hanging out together. A great way to spend the day.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Love this work up for this poem it is so precious of them fishing and just hanging out together. A great way to spend the day.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Indeed it was a wonderful way experience for both ?Buddies.? Many thanks for sharing, CRW, and your kind praise.
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hope they caught some fish
Comment from Rickie1
Cute and very emotional. At least for me. I fished with my grandfather a few times. I'm sure I tested his patience, He said I was scaring away the fish.
Rickie
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Cute and very emotional. At least for me. I fished with my grandfather a few times. I'm sure I tested his patience, He said I was scaring away the fish.
Rickie
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thank you for sharing ?Fisjhing Buddies,? Ricky. I am pleased it brought back good memories.