Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Five votes thus far and your poem's not even promoted, Mikey.
I'd say that was a pretty good return on your investment, wouldn't you?
Good luck...
~Dean

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018

Ha! Yep, that way if I win 8 bucks I still make a couple. I am beginning to wonder about this whole ANON business.though. lol

reply by Dean Kuch on 29-Nov-2018

Hah, ya think?
The whole idea that a contest could be "blind" is ridiculous, at best.

Comment from Liz O'Neill

Excellent

This feels like ages with different perspectives which effect the skewed memories. The reader also has choices of eras which they would identify with more strongly. It is interesting how depending upon our age we focus on different aspects. The first is the childlike fantasy. It could be that the young person in the 2nd era didn't notice things because they were distracted with beginning adulthood. After maturing and settling down a bit they could notice again. The next wondering is natural as they don't visit much anymore. They are busy about many things.
When they finally revisit the ocean, personification is used to show how much the ocean missed the visitor. And then sadly the whole experience begins to fade. This is a well written poem. It is fodder for a longer story. I voted for this one.

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018

Wow. I can't believe you actually understand what I'm getting at with this. That makes ONE of you. LOL

I can't tell you how pleased I am with your analysis and insights. It truly is enough to keep me writing what I want to write. I'm often discouraged because no one seems to have any idea what I'm getting at. It's tempting to write what I KNOW will do well and honestly I often do. But I'd rather write what I FEEL like writing. You know the rule, if ONE person gets this, than I'm happy.

I'm happy! Thanks a million. :))

Comment from donette1914

Excellent

very talented!!!
you put a lot of time into this piece
and it shows
I thought the words were very smooth
good storyline
thank you for sharing, I hope for the best in the contest
donette1914 11/28 2018

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018

When you say the same thing on every review it gives the impression you don't read the work and that's a drag for the reader.

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks about memories of school days when you had a sandbox, you thought of born and feeling safe and playing in and around sand, nowhere to go; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018

Thanks you. :))