Lore of the West
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "The Days of Gunsmoke"A collection of western stories and poems.
4 total reviews
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I like how the rhyme flows in this portion of the poem it gives it a certain alert cadence :"He traveled throughout parts of the old west,
staying in a town no longer than needed,
as he went on his never ending quest;
for his treasury from banks he seeded. " Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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I like how the rhyme flows in this portion of the poem it gives it a certain alert cadence :"He traveled throughout parts of the old west,
staying in a town no longer than needed,
as he went on his never ending quest;
for his treasury from banks he seeded. " Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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Thank you ever so much. I greatly appreciate your review and your comments.
Comment from RodG
I'm one who relishes tales of the Old West, and your tale is a novel approach to the Ottava Rima challenge. Like so many outlaws, this one could not resist robbing banks in small towns, but one day he met a sheriff he could not outdraw. But the last two words in this line confuse me: for his treasure from banks he seeded. Rod
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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I'm one who relishes tales of the Old West, and your tale is a novel approach to the Ottava Rima challenge. Like so many outlaws, this one could not resist robbing banks in small towns, but one day he met a sheriff he could not outdraw. But the last two words in this line confuse me: for his treasure from banks he seeded. Rod
Comment Written 04-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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It should have been treasury-meaning he got the his monetary start from bank money. Thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a technically sound Ottava Rima with correct rhyme scheme and syllable counts per line. The meter is a bit rough, but since it's not mentioned in the rules I disregarded it. The content is a clever approach as I doubt anyone else would apply this style of writing to the Old West. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a technically sound Ottava Rima with correct rhyme scheme and syllable counts per line. The meter is a bit rough, but since it's not mentioned in the rules I disregarded it. The content is a clever approach as I doubt anyone else would apply this style of writing to the Old West. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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Thank you ever so much for your review and comments. Greatly appreciate them.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A fun 'old west' story in the form of an Ottava Rima... giving the reader the fabled wandering villain and the quick-draw lawman that brings him down! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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A fun 'old west' story in the form of an Ottava Rima... giving the reader the fabled wandering villain and the quick-draw lawman that brings him down! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
Comment Written 04-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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Thank you so much. As always, I am grateful for your reviews and comments. Really appreciate the poll wish.