Syllable Counts ...
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "A Star is Born"Anything to do with syllables
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Comment from BeasPeas
I think you will find that newcomers to the site are the ones who award few stars. As they become more experienced in reviewing and in getting threes themselves they will think better of giving them. We have to write for ourselves nevertheless. Marilyn
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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I think you will find that newcomers to the site are the ones who award few stars. As they become more experienced in reviewing and in getting threes themselves they will think better of giving them. We have to write for ourselves nevertheless. Marilyn
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Well when a star is born it remains so till it dies ... the three is a below average remark and tells individuals that they need to work on the piece as for others just maliciously and indirectly giving low remarks they need their heads examined. Im afraid four is the new five in my reviews until I can settle the piece doesn't or is not needing a fulfilled enhancement or something to excel it from good to excellent let alone exceptional ...
Comment from lyenochka
It's great that you used Yvette's Even the Odds poetic form. It feels like a meta-poem and even perhaps writing a poem as a metaphor for life. Although it was not clear to me what it was about "three" that "crucified."
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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It's great that you used Yvette's Even the Odds poetic form. It feels like a meta-poem and even perhaps writing a poem as a metaphor for life. Although it was not clear to me what it was about "three" that "crucified."
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Its actually taken from another poem and is a further development of the idea in that original called ... whats your view? It was to do with the star rating system with the four becoming the new five because when everyone gets a five the five becomes zero kind of defeats the purpose of the thing ... from now only good honest reflection ...I cant recall the number of times I got pissed with someone calling my work great or exception when I knew it was actually a pile of shit ... and get this just because ive rated someone a four and given good reason with a chance to explain and change the rating if necessary I get muted how pathetic and petty is all that and as for all the cathartic bullshit that passes for some remark on someone who has spent hard work on a piece thats just a piss take not to mention spending good money ...
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I can understand your frustration about the rating. Personally, I think they can do away with the rating system and make it more an option. The real value is sharing how the poem affects the reader.
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Well generally thats whats its about ... with a fairer rating on my feeling of a poem I hope to be able to look back at the reviews and see where the good writers are so i can actually look them up and read more of them ... when you got all fives it just a mockery and what people tend to do is deny people their own intellect ...
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That's where the rating fails. People are subjective. We'll rate something a six because it resonates with us. After getting to know people, it's not the work that's as important - we can help with the grammar and spelling but we can exchange ideas and fives amicably.
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... well to me if we read peoples work we'll get plenty of ideas the subjective quality is a personal evaluation ... there has to be some negativity to the balance and thats where the review rating are useful it's all designed to give a gauge of someones work not to make fools and deride people ... once you get to know someone it should not really be a matter whether they get a three a four a five or even a six friendship is not a fan-story review star lol.
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You're certain entitled to your perspective. I've learned from my first year here that anything less than a five is insulting and potentially hurtful so I just avoid potential offense. It's what I observe and the critique and suggestions I make that should matter.
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Your quite true but I just get fed up of every one being equivalent ... imagine a young aspiring poet who happens to be a child who cant decipher my all fives comments would it not be easier to put the correct star with your critique and reasoning so they could look through your reviews and spot the differences ... I mean as far as hurtful ... why protect the reader ...
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and
presentation, Bicpen.
-A well written even the
odds with a good syllable
count and imagery.
-I like the lines about
the reward and "lifting rhyme..."
-Good concluding lines, too.
-Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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-Nice artwork and
presentation, Bicpen.
-A well written even the
odds with a good syllable
count and imagery.
-I like the lines about
the reward and "lifting rhyme..."
-Good concluding lines, too.
-Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Many thanks my friend ...
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You are welcome.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
I like the format of this one and the bold presentation. I think you have also captured to a degree why we all write and how fulfilling it is to finally get the words onto paper. Great work here. Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
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I like the format of this one and the bold presentation. I think you have also captured to a degree why we all write and how fulfilling it is to finally get the words onto paper. Great work here. Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Thank you much appreciated ...
Comment from Gloria ....
You did a really good job with your odds/evens. Not only with perfectly chosen words, but also form. Love the sentiment, and the power of three.
Great job with this and many thanks for sharing. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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You did a really good job with your odds/evens. Not only with perfectly chosen words, but also form. Love the sentiment, and the power of three.
Great job with this and many thanks for sharing. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 07-Feb-2020
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Excellent thank you ...
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A wonderful tribute to the understanding of the rating system, my friend.... but be careful, folks get their toes stepped on oh-so-easily round here bout them threes (and fours, too!) - LOL! ;) ;) ;) Your syllable count on the ETO is correct, but you've missed one of its nuances: the first and last words must be synonyms. :) ;) Thanx for sharing, my friend -- a wonderful evening to you! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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A wonderful tribute to the understanding of the rating system, my friend.... but be careful, folks get their toes stepped on oh-so-easily round here bout them threes (and fours, too!) - LOL! ;) ;) ;) Your syllable count on the ETO is correct, but you've missed one of its nuances: the first and last words must be synonyms. :) ;) Thanx for sharing, my friend -- a wonderful evening to you! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 07-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Excellent I took a wee look at it and addressed the issue and used the word "now" then I found someone already told me to use it .... was this you that created this piece ... its a classic form and it has a great format any thing else I need to know about it ...
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Yep! This one's mine. (wink) I've made a note to send you a quick copy of the format definition when I get back to my computer... on the phone away from my desk right now. ;) Take care, George, and Happy Sunday! Cheers! ;) Yvette
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Excellent much appreciated ... could do with some more.
Comment from juliaSjames
Hello Bicpen
I have to confess that I don't know this poetic form. But according to the syllable count in your author notes, the poem is correctly written. I'm quite fond of symmetrical shape poems and this one pleases me.
I do enjoy the process of writing. The act of creation is challenging but always uplifting, even when the results disappoint.
And then I am inspired to start again. Always hopeful that this time ...
Thank you for sharing. Did I mention that the optics are great? That star is stunning.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Hello Bicpen
I have to confess that I don't know this poetic form. But according to the syllable count in your author notes, the poem is correctly written. I'm quite fond of symmetrical shape poems and this one pleases me.
I do enjoy the process of writing. The act of creation is challenging but always uplifting, even when the results disappoint.
And then I am inspired to start again. Always hopeful that this time ...
Thank you for sharing. Did I mention that the optics are great? That star is stunning.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 07-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Thank you much appreciated you should try writing one ...
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Yes, I have a little more time at my disposal so I should experiment. I've written a rictameter which is somewhat similar. All even numbers though, and the first and last lines are the same.
Enjoy your day, my friend.
Julia
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Excellent that sounds intriguing ... it a bit like the crown or something sonnets that take the line from every sonnet to make the last one ... thats cool ...
Enjoy.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem you have penned using the odds and evens syllable count. You used very good words and very nice imagery. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. I did not see any error or spag. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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This is a very well written poem you have penned using the odds and evens syllable count. You used very good words and very nice imagery. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. I did not see any error or spag. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 07-Feb-2020
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Excellent thank you ...
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Bicpen,
I enjoyed reading your poem and pondering the thoughts within.
If I may, fellow Fanstorian Yvette created this form. You syllabic count is "spot-on;" however, the other stipulation is the first word and the last word are to be synonyms. "Today" and "stays" are not synonyms. However, I would suggest "now" to replace "stays." Synonym and integrity of poem remain intact.
Hoping I have not offended.
Thank you!
diane
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Hello Bicpen,
I enjoyed reading your poem and pondering the thoughts within.
If I may, fellow Fanstorian Yvette created this form. You syllabic count is "spot-on;" however, the other stipulation is the first word and the last word are to be synonyms. "Today" and "stays" are not synonyms. However, I would suggest "now" to replace "stays." Synonym and integrity of poem remain intact.
Hoping I have not offended.
Thank you!
diane
Comment Written 07-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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no no offence though I think because you've given your explanation with the five stars hoping for it to change ... which it has ... I am not offended.