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The Longing

It begs to question.

71 total reviews 
Comment from kleck140
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It takes but a few words by your poetry
to describe the yearning that goes along with
lost love. Thanks for sharing your talent.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020

Comment from juliaSjames
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Congratulations on your contest win. It's an interesting introspective write. Interesting and powerful. Your word choice is stunning. "ravenous" is fantastic as a depiction of the yearning that devours good sense and takes over one's heart and mind.

Love the structure. That plaintive, despairing "why" is the perfect way to end.

Welcome to the site. I get the impression that although you're new you're not a novice.

Stay safe and healthy

Blessings Julia

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2020

Comment from evesayshi
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In my opinion a sterling write in introspective analysis - stunningly presented in both verse and imagery - congratulations for your contest win and best wishes for future successes...

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2020

Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
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Beautiful poem with yearning that pulls at emotions. You created a mood and accomplished your goal in just three short lines. I love the way you internally rhymed yearning with returning. It work really well!
Excellent work!

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2020

Comment from SeanFox16
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A huge big congratulations on your contest win with this fantastic little poem. And welcome to the forum. We've all been there when a memory gets stuck in our head; an old flame, an opportunity missed....and all we can think of is this one single memory. Why indeed....

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2020

Comment from kiwisteveh
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Congratulations on your contest win with this lovely piece. I particularly liked the effect of the rhyming words yearning/returning - one at the end of a line and one at the beginning of the next. Ending with the simple one-word question 'Why? is also strong.

Steve

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2020

Comment from Ben B.
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This is a very cute poem. That one single word, your punchline, was extremely powerful. We all tend to yearn for something but we don't always know what. It is random sometimes.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2020

Comment from Eternal Muse
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It was a very interesting poem and congratulations on your win! Great creative and descriptive imagery and visuals; good choice of vocabulary for the topic; I also enjoyed your artistic presentation and artwork.

Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2020

Comment from Reese Turner
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Wow! Certainly a thought provoking presentation. If I were not married, I'd ask for a phone number! Anyway, great picture to go with the enticing words. Good luck on the long version.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2020

Comment from CrystieCookie999
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This seems to have a strong, romantic quality about it. It looks like this adheres to the syllabic count of a 5-7-5. One can find internal rhyme here, but there is "yearning" and "returning" and later (as a stretch) 'my' and 'why' -- but I see the author notes point out that ah ha, it really is part of a larger composition elsewhere.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2020