The Longing
It begs to question.71 total reviews
Comment from kleck140
It takes but a few words by your poetry
to describe the yearning that goes along with
lost love. Thanks for sharing your talent.
It takes but a few words by your poetry
to describe the yearning that goes along with
lost love. Thanks for sharing your talent.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2020
Comment from juliaSjames
Congratulations on your contest win. It's an interesting introspective write. Interesting and powerful. Your word choice is stunning. "ravenous" is fantastic as a depiction of the yearning that devours good sense and takes over one's heart and mind.
Love the structure. That plaintive, despairing "why" is the perfect way to end.
Welcome to the site. I get the impression that although you're new you're not a novice.
Stay safe and healthy
Blessings Julia
Congratulations on your contest win. It's an interesting introspective write. Interesting and powerful. Your word choice is stunning. "ravenous" is fantastic as a depiction of the yearning that devours good sense and takes over one's heart and mind.
Love the structure. That plaintive, despairing "why" is the perfect way to end.
Welcome to the site. I get the impression that although you're new you're not a novice.
Stay safe and healthy
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 26-Sep-2020
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion a sterling write in introspective analysis - stunningly presented in both verse and imagery - congratulations for your contest win and best wishes for future successes...
In my opinion a sterling write in introspective analysis - stunningly presented in both verse and imagery - congratulations for your contest win and best wishes for future successes...
Comment Written 26-Sep-2020
Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
Beautiful poem with yearning that pulls at emotions. You created a mood and accomplished your goal in just three short lines. I love the way you internally rhymed yearning with returning. It work really well!
Excellent work!
Beautiful poem with yearning that pulls at emotions. You created a mood and accomplished your goal in just three short lines. I love the way you internally rhymed yearning with returning. It work really well!
Excellent work!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2020
Comment from SeanFox16
A huge big congratulations on your contest win with this fantastic little poem. And welcome to the forum. We've all been there when a memory gets stuck in our head; an old flame, an opportunity missed....and all we can think of is this one single memory. Why indeed....
A huge big congratulations on your contest win with this fantastic little poem. And welcome to the forum. We've all been there when a memory gets stuck in our head; an old flame, an opportunity missed....and all we can think of is this one single memory. Why indeed....
Comment Written 26-Sep-2020
Comment from kiwisteveh
Congratulations on your contest win with this lovely piece. I particularly liked the effect of the rhyming words yearning/returning - one at the end of a line and one at the beginning of the next. Ending with the simple one-word question 'Why? is also strong.
Steve
Congratulations on your contest win with this lovely piece. I particularly liked the effect of the rhyming words yearning/returning - one at the end of a line and one at the beginning of the next. Ending with the simple one-word question 'Why? is also strong.
Steve
Comment Written 25-Sep-2020
Comment from Ben B.
This is a very cute poem. That one single word, your punchline, was extremely powerful. We all tend to yearn for something but we don't always know what. It is random sometimes.
This is a very cute poem. That one single word, your punchline, was extremely powerful. We all tend to yearn for something but we don't always know what. It is random sometimes.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2020
Comment from Eternal Muse
It was a very interesting poem and congratulations on your win! Great creative and descriptive imagery and visuals; good choice of vocabulary for the topic; I also enjoyed your artistic presentation and artwork.
Thank you for sharing.
It was a very interesting poem and congratulations on your win! Great creative and descriptive imagery and visuals; good choice of vocabulary for the topic; I also enjoyed your artistic presentation and artwork.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2020
Comment from Reese Turner
Wow! Certainly a thought provoking presentation. If I were not married, I'd ask for a phone number! Anyway, great picture to go with the enticing words. Good luck on the long version.
Wow! Certainly a thought provoking presentation. If I were not married, I'd ask for a phone number! Anyway, great picture to go with the enticing words. Good luck on the long version.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2020
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This seems to have a strong, romantic quality about it. It looks like this adheres to the syllabic count of a 5-7-5. One can find internal rhyme here, but there is "yearning" and "returning" and later (as a stretch) 'my' and 'why' -- but I see the author notes point out that ah ha, it really is part of a larger composition elsewhere.
This seems to have a strong, romantic quality about it. It looks like this adheres to the syllabic count of a 5-7-5. One can find internal rhyme here, but there is "yearning" and "returning" and later (as a stretch) 'my' and 'why' -- but I see the author notes point out that ah ha, it really is part of a larger composition elsewhere.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2020