The Inn at Blackpool
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Bootsie and Nigel"These are free-verse poems.
12 total reviews
Comment from Aiona
Heh! I had to read it twice, and after reading the author's notes, I finally understood what it was about. I was thinking it was some kind of weird metaphor, but no.... it's just literally a popcorn suit. Iambic meter and rhyming structure is well done.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Heh! I had to read it twice, and after reading the author's notes, I finally understood what it was about. I was thinking it was some kind of weird metaphor, but no.... it's just literally a popcorn suit. Iambic meter and rhyming structure is well done.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Thanks again.....the monikers here were for a competitive trip to the Blackpool England pro-am contest....I was fair...my partner...Bootsie..was dazzling..popcorn came later...Best Wishes......Stu Harrell
Comment from Bobby Cunningham
What an adorable little poem. It's short, but it still captivated me. The rhyming is pretty good though the last verse caused me to stumble a little because of "forever" the 3 syllables interrupted the flow a little bit. This doesn't hurt the poem in any way. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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What an adorable little poem. It's short, but it still captivated me. The rhyming is pretty good though the last verse caused me to stumble a little because of "forever" the 3 syllables interrupted the flow a little bit. This doesn't hurt the poem in any way. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Bootsie and Nigel were our fun monikers for the Blackpool England pro am showcase..popcorn came later..these little verses are done for the neighbor kids and lots of fun.....Thanks for your thoughts....Best Wishes....Stu Harrell
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
It is tragic that both of you were practicing for a silly dance showcase and Nigel got hurt and is now in rehab; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thank you for sharing this; keep writing. Wish you good luck in the Contest. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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It is tragic that both of you were practicing for a silly dance showcase and Nigel got hurt and is now in rehab; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thank you for sharing this; keep writing. Wish you good luck in the Contest. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 23-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Thanks so very much for your kind thoughts...I am not really a contender for these....but I love little silly verses.....Godspeed.....Stu Harrell
Comment from Bill Schott
This twenty-line poem, Bootsie and Nigel, is apparently based on a true story. One must remember that tripping the light fantastic doesn't require falling.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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This twenty-line poem, Bootsie and Nigel, is apparently based on a true story. One must remember that tripping the light fantastic doesn't require falling.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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How right you are....we used the monikers for the Ballroom Pro Am at Blackpool England.....thus some of the London street tone.....Thanks again for your thoughts....Best Wishes and Godspeed......Stu Harrell
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the dance move practice that was going wrong and one of the dancers end up in hospital with their broken body when one dance move goes wrong.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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A very well-written poem about the dance move practice that was going wrong and one of the dancers end up in hospital with their broken body when one dance move goes wrong.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Thank you so very much......All the best to you.....Godspeed.....Stu Harrell
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Bootsie and Nigel
by stuart Harrell
Hello my friend
Dancing at home can be dangerous. Cool entry for the 20 Line Poem contest. Fun read.... Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Bootsie and Nigel
by stuart Harrell
Hello my friend
Dancing at home can be dangerous. Cool entry for the 20 Line Poem contest. Fun read.... Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Thanks so much...I love gibberish....compliments of the Inn of Penny Poets.....Godspeed and Best Wishes......Stu Harrell
Comment from oliver818
I like the way you worded this poem, it's fast paced and feels more like a song. You hunt at a lot with this but do a great job of creating an image of your characters without stating directly who they are and what they want from
Each other. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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I like the way you worded this poem, it's fast paced and feels more like a song. You hunt at a lot with this but do a great job of creating an image of your characters without stating directly who they are and what they want from
Each other. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Thanks so very much ....you are right...it is a little slap dash...But I like a little bounce....Thanks again and Godspeed.....Stu Harrell
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A unique offering for the contest with rhyming quatrains in abcb format. Your use of the wrong verb tense on purpose makes it a bit tough to follow, especially with such a very personal theme... but your author notes give the reader a smile when they look back over it... :) ;) Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
was a wonderin' --> was a-wonderin'
What become of --> What became of
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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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A unique offering for the contest with rhyming quatrains in abcb format. Your use of the wrong verb tense on purpose makes it a bit tough to follow, especially with such a very personal theme... but your author notes give the reader a smile when they look back over it... :) ;) Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
was a wonderin' --> was a-wonderin'
What become of --> What became of
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Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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You are right ...it is purposely a little sloppy in the dialect...to me..it gave it bounce....Thanks so much for your thoughts and Godspeed.....Stu Harrell
Comment from papa55mike
Don't you hate it when that happens? I hope you were all right. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Don't you hate it when that happens? I hope you were all right. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Yikes....it was awful but we are bouncing back....Thanks so much for your input....Godspeed and Best Wishes.....Stu Harrell
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I don't know if your intention was to make this poem funny, but you actually did a pretty amazing job: "
We was a wonderin' Bootsie
What become of Nigel Dear
Was he busted up a dancin'?
With his tummy full of beer"
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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I don't know if your intention was to make this poem funny, but you actually did a pretty amazing job: "
We was a wonderin' Bootsie
What become of Nigel Dear
Was he busted up a dancin'?
With his tummy full of beer"
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Thank you so very much for your kind thoughts....Godspeed and Best Wishes.....Stu Harrell