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Poems By AnnieDawn

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My book of poems and stories

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Comment from mermaids
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Your ABC form captures clearly the barrenness of the heat wave. The displaced bee and butterfly show the lack of greenery and a garden. I hope next year brings rain and a flourishing garden for you.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
    Thank you so much for your review. I finally have seen one homey bee in a squash flower. The first this year. I may have a late small crop after all.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Heat Wave
by AnnieDawn

Hello, Annie,

Great entry for the ABC Poetry Contest. You did a good job including a, b, c, d. Good luck in the contest.

Gypsy


 Comment Written 21-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
    Thank you so much for reviewing and your thoughtful comments.
Comment from harmony13
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The author's words are alarming, clear and creative. I pondered on the
theme of this poem. Thank you for the author's notes - they explain even more about the hear. The poem flows and connects.
Hope you are having a great day!

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
    Thank you so much for reviewing and your thoughtful comments.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
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We often wax poetic about the beauties of nature; there's that other, not-so-lovely side: the blistering heat, sub-zero temps, floods, tsunamis--the list goes on and on. Your poem vividly describes that garden-murdering side of nature.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
    Thank you so much for reviewing and your thoughtful comments.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Same here. Weeks of 100+ temps--no rain. The only plants growing are those that people spend major $$$$$ on the keep alive. I enjoyed your poem although it is poignant, Annie. Good job on the requirements of the contest. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
    Thank you for reviewing. Out of hundreds of blossoms there is only one squash in my garden. Ne bees to pollinate. They have disappeared. Yet I see many bee hives in the area. Just no bees aaround. Have not had to set one jellow jacket trap. They are gone too.
Comment from LisaMay
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Your ABC poem tells of a troubling situation that is becoming more prevalent. At first i thought i might enjoy your poem, because it is wintry down in the southern hemisphere where i live and a touch of heat would be nice, but not to the detriment of bees and butterflies. The cycles of nature are so important.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
    Thank you for reviewing. Out of hundreds of blossoms there is only one squash in my garden. No bees to pollinate. They have disappeared. Yet I see many bee hives in the area. Just no bees around. Have not had to set one yellow jacket trap. They are gone too.
Comment from Mastery
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You're right Annie, I have not seen any bees either. Hmm. Funny how we take things for granted, eh? We have had more 90 degree days this year than anytime I can ever remember. I liked these lines in particular:

"Both bee and butterfly have been dispelled
Cheating both lawn and garden, which are gone."

Good job, Annie. :) Bob

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
    Thank you for reviewing. Out of hundreds of blossoms there is only one squash in my garden. No bees to pollinate. They have disappeared. Yet I see many bee hives in the area. Just no bees around. Have not had to set one yellow jacket trap. They are gone too.
reply by Mastery on 21-Aug-2020
    Wow! that is strange isn't it? Bob
Comment from Colin John
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Hi A very good and very hot ABC contest entry, I have no observational points of change and would not want to suggest anything as it is spot on. Cheers Colin

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
    Thank you for reviewing. Out of hundreds of blossoms there is only one squash in my garden. No bees to pollinate. They have disappeared. Yet I see many bee hives in the area. Just no bees around. Have not had to set one yellow jacket trap. They are gone too.
reply by Colin John on 21-Aug-2020
    Interesting and sad as they have done the same over here in England, hardly any, I believe the airwaves being transmitted from the 5G is the only answer.I have a bees nest in my garden and not hardly any to be seen.
Comment from royowen
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The troubling thing is where have all the bees gone, which is quite terrifying as it is, and the heatwaves are getting worse, insects seem to be missing too. A beautifully written ABC poem Annie. Well done, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
    Thank you for reviewing. Out of hundreds of blossoms there is only one squash in my garden. No bees to pollinate. They have disappeared. Yet I see many bee hives in the area. Just no bees around. Have not had to set one yellow jacket trap. They are gone too.
reply by royowen on 21-Aug-2020
    It?s a worry
Comment from Lulube
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you have given great imagery for this heat wave and it's destruction on the plants. It's hard to watch those that were a luscious green foliage in Spring turn to more brown than green. I'm putting in more succulents next year!!

lulube

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
    Thank you for reviewing. Out of hundreds of blossoms there is only one squash in my garden. No bees to pollinate. They have disappeared. Yet I see many bee hives in the area. Just no bees around. Have not had to set one yellow jacket trap. They are gone too.
reply by Lulube on 24-Aug-2020
    well I'll tell ya a little secret, you find a little soft feather, not a long coarse feather and you become the bee. You go in middle of day 12-3pm, better that no kids are home to disrupt you, and you start tickling the center of the blossom, better when the petals are extended backwards and pistol and stamens are in full view. the pollen will stick . to the feather, so make sure there is some on it before you go to another blossom, then tickle the next one but make sure you are transferring pollen, and so on and so on. It .actually works
    lulube