Wisdom
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written wisdom story. We do have rules for a reason and when we step over the lines within the rules car can expect to be in trouble and have to answer for not following the rules.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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A very well-written wisdom story. We do have rules for a reason and when we step over the lines within the rules car can expect to be in trouble and have to answer for not following the rules.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Thank you:)
Comment from Y. M. Roger
What a great offering to make the reader think, Iza - great job, my lady!! ;) Thanx so much, as always, for your insightfulness! ;) :) Yvette
we are sooner or later we fall --> we are, sooner or later, we fall
For example when we jump head on in a strange --> An example is when we jump ahead in a strange
Other times we choose the opposite, mmm let's --> Other times, we choose the opposite: hmmm... let's
demoisel in distress --> damsel in distress
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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What a great offering to make the reader think, Iza - great job, my lady!! ;) Thanx so much, as always, for your insightfulness! ;) :) Yvette
we are sooner or later we fall --> we are, sooner or later, we fall
For example when we jump head on in a strange --> An example is when we jump ahead in a strange
Other times we choose the opposite, mmm let's --> Other times, we choose the opposite: hmmm... let's
demoisel in distress --> damsel in distress
Comment Written 12-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Good Evening Ms. Yvette, thank you for your corrections and encouragements:)
Comment from Alchera
Staying between the lines means being mediocre because there will never be a risk or a surge to reach the desired goal. We weren't born to be inefficient, so Lucifer chose to reign at the antipodes, my dear friend!
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Staying between the lines means being mediocre because there will never be a risk or a surge to reach the desired goal. We weren't born to be inefficient, so Lucifer chose to reign at the antipodes, my dear friend!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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You are so right, Mr. Toni:)
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Blessings! Tony
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great artwork, Iza,
she is a very talented artist.
-It does go well with your story.
-I like the topic you chose
because there is a lot that
goes between the lines, like
things that are left unsaid,
feelings that aren't directly shared.
-I like your contrast of hope and despair.
-I think you came up with the
right solution, too.
-Well done!
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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-Great artwork, Iza,
she is a very talented artist.
-It does go well with your story.
-I like the topic you chose
because there is a lot that
goes between the lines, like
things that are left unsaid,
feelings that aren't directly shared.
-I like your contrast of hope and despair.
-I think you came up with the
right solution, too.
-Well done!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much, Ms. Pam your encouragements are appreciated.
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You are very welcome, Iza.
Comment from Colin John
Hi Iza, I like the meaning behind your poem and confess I am very happy with the life that nature has given us and cherish each day till the end which will be sad but know that I did enjoy and helped give more life a chance. Cheers Colin xx
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Hi Iza, I like the meaning behind your poem and confess I am very happy with the life that nature has given us and cherish each day till the end which will be sad but know that I did enjoy and helped give more life a chance. Cheers Colin xx
Comment Written 12-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Amen, to that, Mr. Colin:)
Comment from robyn corum
Iza,
Very interesting piece of commentary and philosophy. I thought you did a fine job of discovering a metaphor for this life we live. *smile* But I do think you might have extended it/drawn it out a bit more so that the idea was more fully developed. Which is weird because I'm usually the one saying use LESS words. haha
Perhaps you wanted to have a lot of mystery left in here? It's always great to leave room for the reader, for sure - to allow them to interject their own thoughts and experiences to create something new and different. More than just you OR just the reader. Something bigger together.
There are just (to me) too many gaps here - and the reader (this one, anyway) is having to fill in a LOT.
Other notes:
1.) let's play a little bit of demoisel in distress
--> demoiselle
2.) All is fair in love and ...square...
--> Not sure what this means. Do you mean like 'all is fair and square in love'? (Because it's not, really, is it?) haha
3.) So why not try our best between the lines.
--> I liked this call to action at the end. Very inspiring, but do you think you need a period or a question mark? IMO, a question mark tosses the line straight at the reader so that he is encouraged to become MORE involved. To answer the question him/herself.
Just a few thoughts. Yours to use or toss. Thanks so much~
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Iza,
Very interesting piece of commentary and philosophy. I thought you did a fine job of discovering a metaphor for this life we live. *smile* But I do think you might have extended it/drawn it out a bit more so that the idea was more fully developed. Which is weird because I'm usually the one saying use LESS words. haha
Perhaps you wanted to have a lot of mystery left in here? It's always great to leave room for the reader, for sure - to allow them to interject their own thoughts and experiences to create something new and different. More than just you OR just the reader. Something bigger together.
There are just (to me) too many gaps here - and the reader (this one, anyway) is having to fill in a LOT.
Other notes:
1.) let's play a little bit of demoisel in distress
--> demoiselle
2.) All is fair in love and ...square...
--> Not sure what this means. Do you mean like 'all is fair and square in love'? (Because it's not, really, is it?) haha
3.) So why not try our best between the lines.
--> I liked this call to action at the end. Very inspiring, but do you think you need a period or a question mark? IMO, a question mark tosses the line straight at the reader so that he is encouraged to become MORE involved. To answer the question him/herself.
Just a few thoughts. Yours to use or toss. Thanks so much~
Comment Written 10-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much Ms. Robyn:) for your great review, corrections and suggestions.
Comment from Brad Bennett
Nicely done Iza. I can identify a bit. Usually it's despair, leading to anger, or vice versa, then charge onward! The line always says, this way, and I charge down it, past habits rule. Soon I find myself in the same plot line, and I have to patch up the aftermath. Then I look back and think, why did I fall into that same trap? I won't do that again. But I do.
At least getting older has softened the blows.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Nicely done Iza. I can identify a bit. Usually it's despair, leading to anger, or vice versa, then charge onward! The line always says, this way, and I charge down it, past habits rule. Soon I find myself in the same plot line, and I have to patch up the aftermath. Then I look back and think, why did I fall into that same trap? I won't do that again. But I do.
At least getting older has softened the blows.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Very funny review, Mr. Brad, I think I was in a negative space when I wrote this:) once I put the story on paper, the feeling ... gone.
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Sometimes writing is good therapy me thinks. :>)
Comment from estory
Interesting little play on the idea of reading and living between the lines. What is out in front and covered up. What is real and imagined. The between the lines metaphor is great for that. Simple, clean but to the point and oblique enough to invite lots of interpretation from readers. estory
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Interesting little play on the idea of reading and living between the lines. What is out in front and covered up. What is real and imagined. The between the lines metaphor is great for that. Simple, clean but to the point and oblique enough to invite lots of interpretation from readers. estory
Comment Written 10-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for your beautiful review:)
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Very clever imagery! Navigating life between the lines of hope and despair, sometimes falling other times choosing--I can relate. A very fine -- and concise! -- piece of work, Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Very clever imagery! Navigating life between the lines of hope and despair, sometimes falling other times choosing--I can relate. A very fine -- and concise! -- piece of work, Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 09-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for your beautiful review:)
Comment from lyenochka
A nice reflection of how life can have us waver between hope and despair. But thanks to the Lord, He remains our Hope no matter what we're going through.
Other time we choose the (times,)
So why not trying our best (try)
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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A nice reflection of how life can have us waver between hope and despair. But thanks to the Lord, He remains our Hope no matter what we're going through.
Other time we choose the (times,)
So why not trying our best (try)
Comment Written 09-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much my friend, and you are so right without God we are not anything.
