What if,
wondering about a different result.51 total reviews
Comment from Becky Kern-Taylor
Losing a mother at age 7 had to be very hard. I lost my father at 5 1/2 but still had mom, thank God. A girl need a mother for advice and to answer questions that only another female can understand.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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Losing a mother at age 7 had to be very hard. I lost my father at 5 1/2 but still had mom, thank God. A girl need a mother for advice and to answer questions that only another female can understand.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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Thank you Becky. I truly appreciate your review and comments.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello and a happy Thursday to you Mary. Thank you for sharing your poem with us. It was so personal and sad. I've had a pretty rough life and I often wonder how different things could have been. Anyway have a great day.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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Hello and a happy Thursday to you Mary. Thank you for sharing your poem with us. It was so personal and sad. I've had a pretty rough life and I often wonder how different things could have been. Anyway have a great day.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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Happy Thursday to you also. Thank you for your review and comments.
Here is wishing you have good and better days always.
Comment from RodG
I wonder how many other adults who lost parents when they were young have similar "What if" questions. Your poem gives us quite a bit of backstory about you, but perhaps you use the refrain too often.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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I wonder how many other adults who lost parents when they were young have similar "What if" questions. Your poem gives us quite a bit of backstory about you, but perhaps you use the refrain too often.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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Thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from nomi338
When one loses a parent, they lose all of the possibilities. They lose the positive reassurances that a loving mom or dad will gladly give. The lose out on the loving smile that warms the heart to the core of one's being. They lose the vote of confidence when one needs it the most. When a young child loses a parent, they lose a vital piece of themselves and their possible future.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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When one loses a parent, they lose all of the possibilities. They lose the positive reassurances that a loving mom or dad will gladly give. The lose out on the loving smile that warms the heart to the core of one's being. They lose the vote of confidence when one needs it the most. When a young child loses a parent, they lose a vital piece of themselves and their possible future.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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thank you for your review and kind words. I always look forward to your comments.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"What if", is an exceptionally well-written, and heart-wrenching piece. Penned with craft and skill, this talented poet has told it as it is. To me,
this is a six, but sadly I've run out of them. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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"What if", is an exceptionally well-written, and heart-wrenching piece. Penned with craft and skill, this talented poet has told it as it is. To me,
this is a six, but sadly I've run out of them. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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thank you for your review and kind words. It is much appreciated
You're very welcome. God bless, take care and keep safe!
Comment from IndefinitelySmallx
Wow, a very powerful poem. This has everything necessary to be an effective conveyor of emotion. This is what poetry is about. Very well done. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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Wow, a very powerful poem. This has everything necessary to be an effective conveyor of emotion. This is what poetry is about. Very well done. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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Thank you for your review and kind words. I is much appreciated.
Comment from JanPerry
You have put a lot of energy and work into your poem. Your mother only lived for seven years, how sad for you. The repeated line seems unnecessary. 36 years certainly is too young for anyone.
I had a mother for 82 years before she succumbed to cancer. I don't think she wanted to go on anyway. Having her through my childhood was invaluable, but after that I was too independent to bother her.
I hope you are happy in your choices.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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You have put a lot of energy and work into your poem. Your mother only lived for seven years, how sad for you. The repeated line seems unnecessary. 36 years certainly is too young for anyone.
I had a mother for 82 years before she succumbed to cancer. I don't think she wanted to go on anyway. Having her through my childhood was invaluable, but after that I was too independent to bother her.
I hope you are happy in your choices.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the review and kind thoughts.
Comment from RShipp
'I wonder if Ma had lived beyond my seven years...' What a great line for repetition. (You may not usually write poetry, but you did well on this one!)
I could see a young girl, sitting on the stairs-alone- in the hall, and thinking this out.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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'I wonder if Ma had lived beyond my seven years...' What a great line for repetition. (You may not usually write poetry, but you did well on this one!)
I could see a young girl, sitting on the stairs-alone- in the hall, and thinking this out.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Thank you for your review and kind comments
Comment from Patty Palmer
A very intriguing poem! Your sadness for what might have been shows clearly in your words. I'm so sorry that you lost your mother at such a young and tender age. It had to have been devastating!! I'm sure if Ma would have lived passed your seven years, there would have been hugs!!! I give you a six for the content of your poem and they way you presented it. The picture really brings your words to light. Don't stop writing! It's fun! It's theraputic! And you did pretty darn good on this one.
Patty
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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A very intriguing poem! Your sadness for what might have been shows clearly in your words. I'm so sorry that you lost your mother at such a young and tender age. It had to have been devastating!! I'm sure if Ma would have lived passed your seven years, there would have been hugs!!! I give you a six for the content of your poem and they way you presented it. The picture really brings your words to light. Don't stop writing! It's fun! It's theraputic! And you did pretty darn good on this one.
Patty
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Patty Palmer, I much appreciate not only your rating but your words of encouragement.
Thank you for the review.
Comment from Sally Law
I wish my first poem looked this good. Maybe you should reconsider. Prose came first for me as well.
Excellent offering and the well-chosen illustration crowns your fine work.
I'm sorry your childhood was so traumatic, but I have found that writing about my childhood has brought me much healing. Keep at it.
Sending my best today as always, and blessings for your wedding endeavors,
Sally xo
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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I wish my first poem looked this good. Maybe you should reconsider. Prose came first for me as well.
Excellent offering and the well-chosen illustration crowns your fine work.
I'm sorry your childhood was so traumatic, but I have found that writing about my childhood has brought me much healing. Keep at it.
Sending my best today as always, and blessings for your wedding endeavors,
Sally xo
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Thank you for your review and caring comments