Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Teddy Bear"A collection of my children's poems
194 total reviews
Comment from S.Yocom
I really enjoyed this cute children's poem, Steve. Your rhymes and meter are perfect, except for the meter in the last line of the fourth stanza. Maybe the word "biddy" could be "hen" or "thing." Anyway, this is a great poem. I see that it won the contest. Congratulations.
Sally
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2011
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I really enjoyed this cute children's poem, Steve. Your rhymes and meter are perfect, except for the meter in the last line of the fourth stanza. Maybe the word "biddy" could be "hen" or "thing." Anyway, this is a great poem. I see that it won the contest. Congratulations.
Sally
Comment Written 26-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2011
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Thnks, Sally
I actually patched this together in haste with the deadline only minutes away, so the outcome was pleasing and the odd hiccup understandable! I will take a look at that line...
Steve
Comment from Helvi2
Hi kiwisteveh
I can see why you won the contest, this poem is fun and adorable. I know little kids would absolutely love this! I do and I'm a big one! Love the adventures and beautiful flowing rhymes. There is so much charm in ths delightful rhymed story. I couldn't give you anything less than a six.
You most definitely deserve it!
Congratulations on winning the contest! :o) Helvi
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2011
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Hi kiwisteveh
I can see why you won the contest, this poem is fun and adorable. I know little kids would absolutely love this! I do and I'm a big one! Love the adventures and beautiful flowing rhymes. There is so much charm in ths delightful rhymed story. I couldn't give you anything less than a six.
You most definitely deserve it!
Congratulations on winning the contest! :o) Helvi
Comment Written 26-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2011
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Thanks, Helvi - haven't seen you around for a while...
I have been delighted to hear from a few reviewers that they have kid-tested this successfully - my own grand-daughter is too far away, alas!
Steve
Comment from OklahomaDreamer
So cute. I really liked this, and can imagine having read this type of verse to my kids when they were growing up.
Guess I will have to save it for the grandkids ears.
Nicely done.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2011
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So cute. I really liked this, and can imagine having read this type of verse to my kids when they were growing up.
Guess I will have to save it for the grandkids ears.
Nicely done.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2011
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Thank you so much for the review and the kind words.
Steve
Comment from cercie
What a beautifully written piece. I could see my grandson telling me these very same things this is perfectly delightful. Thank you for sharing.
Cercie
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2011
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What a beautifully written piece. I could see my grandson telling me these very same things this is perfectly delightful. Thank you for sharing.
Cercie
Comment Written 26-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2011
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Thanks, Cercie.
Guess I'm just a big kid at heart!
Steve
Comment from leesm
Congratulations on winning this contest. I can see why you won. It's a delightful romp through the day's thoughts of Molly's teddy bear. Very nice cadence, easy to read with pleasant rhymes.
A winner, for sure!
-Lee
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2011
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Congratulations on winning this contest. I can see why you won. It's a delightful romp through the day's thoughts of Molly's teddy bear. Very nice cadence, easy to read with pleasant rhymes.
A winner, for sure!
-Lee
Comment Written 26-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2011
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Thanks, lee, for the nice review.
Glad you enjoyed my swashbuckling Teddy
Steve
Comment from bulbul
Superb! Perfect flow in a poem reporting a day in the life of a teddy bear. Children's world of play, their fantasy worlds, the humour in the overall poem, and especially in some lines, the affection of the poet for his subject, the love between Molly and her Ted, inseparable in their 'daydreams' as also through the night - all these make the poem a special treat. Beautiful ending.Loved it.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2011
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Superb! Perfect flow in a poem reporting a day in the life of a teddy bear. Children's world of play, their fantasy worlds, the humour in the overall poem, and especially in some lines, the affection of the poet for his subject, the love between Molly and her Ted, inseparable in their 'daydreams' as also through the night - all these make the poem a special treat. Beautiful ending.Loved it.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the review and the generous words and, of course, the six stars - much appreciated. I am glad you got so much pleasure out of my whimsical little piece.
Steve
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You're welcome, Steve. bulbul
Comment from Joan E.
Congratulations for winning the contest with this fine entry. I thoroughly enjoyed your rhyming couplets and the cute bear picture, along with your use of alliteration and echoing sounds. Thanks for the smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Congratulations for winning the contest with this fine entry. I thoroughly enjoyed your rhyming couplets and the cute bear picture, along with your use of alliteration and echoing sounds. Thanks for the smiles- Joan
Comment Written 26-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you, Joan, for the review and the kind words...
Steve
Comment from Espresso momma
Congradulations on your win! This is cute and any child would love the reading. Your photo was perfect for your verse with good flow, perfect rhyme and meter.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Congradulations on your win! This is cute and any child would love the reading. Your photo was perfect for your verse with good flow, perfect rhyme and meter.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you!
I had no available children to try it out on so went with my gut. I will write a special version for my grand-daughter next time I see her...
Steve
Comment from Tonulak
This is such a cute poem! It sounds so much like some of the adventures I had as a child! Congratulations on the win. It was a well deserved one.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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This is such a cute poem! It sounds so much like some of the adventures I had as a child! Congratulations on the win. It was a well deserved one.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thanks for the review and the kind words.
Steve
Comment from WilliamDeen
What a sweet sweet poem of Molly and Ted! Don't you just love little girls! We have a granddaughter and she is so much fun to play with. They pretend very well. Your poem has a very nice rhyming scheme and the cadence is superb!
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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What a sweet sweet poem of Molly and Ted! Don't you just love little girls! We have a granddaughter and she is so much fun to play with. They pretend very well. Your poem has a very nice rhyming scheme and the cadence is superb!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you.
I have one beautiful grand-daughter too - unfortunately she lives far away...
Steve