Hot Dogs, French Fries, Lemonade!
An ode to a hot dog stand.130 total reviews
Comment from LIJ Red
From a region too rural for hot dog stands, and a town too small for more than one
restaurant, a sharecropper's only son, your memories are an alien world I always wanted to visit. Excellent images...
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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From a region too rural for hot dog stands, and a town too small for more than one
restaurant, a sharecropper's only son, your memories are an alien world I always wanted to visit. Excellent images...
Comment Written 26-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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Ah, I am the son of a sharecropper's daughter who came out to California during World War II. Hollywood is an alien world to many on this planet, but it is a place many aspire to visit. For me, I want to visit Texas to look up my roots. Thanks for your review.
Comment from Sandisan
Its a good, rambling poem. One that takes you on a journey back through your memories. You took me along for the trip too and I enjoyed reading it. There is nothing that I would change.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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Its a good, rambling poem. One that takes you on a journey back through your memories. You took me along for the trip too and I enjoyed reading it. There is nothing that I would change.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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Thank you, Sandisan, for your kind review. I am glad my poem took you on a trip down memory lane.
Comment from GregoryCody
I really like your flow in this. It was an interesting take on an ode. A fun one with descriptive and Fun words. The entire poem like I said flows amazingly, really, but the rhymes are perfectly placed.
which fed us meringue pies
and chiffon cakes
baked by our mother
who called herself "Yeller Gal."
Ha. Love it. Good luck!
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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I really like your flow in this. It was an interesting take on an ode. A fun one with descriptive and Fun words. The entire poem like I said flows amazingly, really, but the rhymes are perfectly placed.
which fed us meringue pies
and chiffon cakes
baked by our mother
who called herself "Yeller Gal."
Ha. Love it. Good luck!
Comment Written 26-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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Thank you, GregoryCody, for your kind review and contest well wishes. This was originally a spoken word poem. I adapted it to the screen/page so that the words would flow in the way I performed them. I am glad you noticed.
Comment from AvL
This author serves up a very tasty dish of free-verse in this "nostalgic nosh" of a poem. The 1950s musical references add spice and savor to the delicious foods that are described. Finally, this poet can make ice-cubes melt like no other. Well-done, like the fries and hot dogs.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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This author serves up a very tasty dish of free-verse in this "nostalgic nosh" of a poem. The 1950s musical references add spice and savor to the delicious foods that are described. Finally, this poet can make ice-cubes melt like no other. Well-done, like the fries and hot dogs.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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Yes, Haiku-guy, I made those ice cubes mmmelt. I am glad you enjoyed this "nostalgic nosh" of a poem. Thanks for your review.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully. I really enjoyed this as you made a visit to the hot dog stand into an indelible memory filled with the pure joy of living and savoring all the flavors life has to offer. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully. I really enjoyed this as you made a visit to the hot dog stand into an indelible memory filled with the pure joy of living and savoring all the flavors life has to offer. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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Thank you, Mystic Angel7777, for your encouraging review and contest well wishes. Yes, savor all of the flavors life has to offer.
Comment from nomi338
This is a wonderful poem paying homage to a small business that has become a staple that adds to the mystique of LA. As far competing with Pinks or any other establishment, just being true to who you are and intended to be will keep your loyal customers coming back and may very well win many more in future.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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This is a wonderful poem paying homage to a small business that has become a staple that adds to the mystique of LA. As far competing with Pinks or any other establishment, just being true to who you are and intended to be will keep your loyal customers coming back and may very well win many more in future.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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Being true to who I am, I hope to keep readers coming back to my poetry. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Jacob Collins
I liked this Ode Poem, especially the reference of remembering old times, even those at hot dog stands. I thought that you wrote the piece well and I couldn't find any faults. Good luck in the contest...Jacob
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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I liked this Ode Poem, especially the reference of remembering old times, even those at hot dog stands. I thought that you wrote the piece well and I couldn't find any faults. Good luck in the contest...Jacob
Comment Written 26-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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Thank you, Jacob, for your kind review and contest well wishes. We must not only remember the big moments, but the mundane ones as well.
Comment from Glasstruth
You've beautifully captured what a hotdog can mean to someone. Sounds silly, but memories are like that. Very spontaneous, and like how you distanced this line: "one at a time" Superb. Les
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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You've beautifully captured what a hotdog can mean to someone. Sounds silly, but memories are like that. Very spontaneous, and like how you distanced this line: "one at a time" Superb. Les
Comment Written 26-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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Yes, Les, memories are like this--spontaneous. I am glad you enjoyed my "one at a time" line. I prolonged the pauses when I perform it. Thanks again.
Comment from jmdg1954
Quite an enormous amount of information post poem. All sounded interesting. Best of luck my friend.
I enjoyed the nuances your poem brought to the table. Very well planned out, John
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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Quite an enormous amount of information post poem. All sounded interesting. Best of luck my friend.
I enjoyed the nuances your poem brought to the table. Very well planned out, John
Comment Written 26-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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Thank you, John, for your kind review. My poem "Hot Dogs, French Fries, Lemonade" brought a lot to the table. Thanks for the contest well wishes.
Comment from misscookie
I enjoyed reading your write. Looking at the picture I had to smile those were the days when things were simple a nice and fun.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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I enjoyed reading your write. Looking at the picture I had to smile those were the days when things were simple a nice and fun.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 26-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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Yes, misscookie, this hot dog stand is still there on Hollywood Boulevard. You can enjoy the simple, nice, and fun pleasure of hot dogs, French fries, and lemonade today. Thank you for your review.
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You're very welcome.
Have a blessed day.
Cookie