Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Teddy Bear"A collection of my children's poems
194 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is very good imagery. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is very good imagery. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
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Thanks for the review and the kind words.
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You're welcome, Steve. Charlie
Comment from mermaids
You have a smooth flow here and great rhyming. The bear had a busy day and your words make his life come alive. You also tell a story here, one that adults and children can relate to.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
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You have a smooth flow here and great rhyming. The bear had a busy day and your words make his life come alive. You also tell a story here, one that adults and children can relate to.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed my foray into children's verse.
Comment from Minglement
Very clever take on the contest for a poem on 'The Life of...". Course I'm a Teddy bear creator and lover so of course I loved every line. Great imagination, with nice rhythm and flow. This could almost be a children's book! Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest. Marcia
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
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Very clever take on the contest for a poem on 'The Life of...". Course I'm a Teddy bear creator and lover so of course I loved every line. Great imagination, with nice rhythm and flow. This could almost be a children's book! Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest. Marcia
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
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Thanks, Marcia.
I guess this was a home run with you!
I actually patched this together in haste with the deadline only minutes away, so the outcome was pleasing!
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Patched, or not - great job. Good luck. Marcia :)
Comment from azwildrosa
what a great and fun beginning. i loev the image of the child and her teddy bear. i tea party is great you've made this come come to life beautiful caputuring the true essance of child and her toys. the ending i thought was perfect. a suttle ending settling in bed. you have a great and fun porm for this promt. thank you for sharing and best wishes to you in the booths.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
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what a great and fun beginning. i loev the image of the child and her teddy bear. i tea party is great you've made this come come to life beautiful caputuring the true essance of child and her toys. the ending i thought was perfect. a suttle ending settling in bed. you have a great and fun porm for this promt. thank you for sharing and best wishes to you in the booths.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
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Thank you for your review and the kind words.
I actually patched this together in haste with the deadline only minutes away, so the outcome was pleasing!
Comment from Sweet Anita
What fun to read! Molly and Teddy had an exciting day. This is a great poem for any child to read, or have read to them. The flow of words is great! You should do exceptionally well in the contest. Good luck!
Nita
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
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What fun to read! Molly and Teddy had an exciting day. This is a great poem for any child to read, or have read to them. The flow of words is great! You should do exceptionally well in the contest. Good luck!
Nita
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
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Thanks, Nita, for the kind words.
I actually patched this together in haste with the deadline only minutes away, so the outcome was pleasing!
Comment from poetparman
A delightful story/poem. It could be a children's book. Shows great imagination. Good composition. Good at getting in a child's head.And after a busy day of child's play they are snuggled into bed. Just a lovely story. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
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A delightful story/poem. It could be a children's book. Shows great imagination. Good composition. Good at getting in a child's head.And after a busy day of child's play they are snuggled into bed. Just a lovely story. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
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Thank you.
I actually patched this together in haste with the deadline only minutes away, so the outcome was pleasing!
Comment from pickthorn
A really cute and entertaining poem of a child at play, battling Blackbeard and the pirates then off to bed with Teddy your faithful companion. Great work.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
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A really cute and entertaining poem of a child at play, battling Blackbeard and the pirates then off to bed with Teddy your faithful companion. Great work.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
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Thank you.
I actually patched this together in haste with the deadline only minutes away, so the outcome was pleasing!
Comment from Aussie
A little fun poem that lifted my spirits. Loved the 'pirate on a rope.' This is such a good poem I would love to see you write a series, maybe for children - you certainly have the expertise and the knack. Thank you for sharing your Teddy bear poem. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
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A little fun poem that lifted my spirits. Loved the 'pirate on a rope.' This is such a good poem I would love to see you write a series, maybe for children - you certainly have the expertise and the knack. Thank you for sharing your Teddy bear poem. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
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Thanks, Aussie, for the review and the six stars.
Maybe poor old one-eyed Jemima deserves a chance at her own poem - what do you think?
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I think you need to write a series; everyone needs a Jemima, any age, we all need love. 'The adventures of Jemima' - love, Kay.
Comment from JW
This is a very well written and cute poem. In reading it and mentally seeing the days activities, one cannot not but smile. There's nothing like the innocence of youth.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
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This is a very well written and cute poem. In reading it and mentally seeing the days activities, one cannot not but smile. There's nothing like the innocence of youth.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
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Thanks, JW
I actually patched this together in haste with the deadline only minutes away, so the outcome was pleasing!
Comment from gazzagodbod
what a lovely and cute poem love the picture presentation is great and great feel about the work good luck my friend in the contest gazza
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
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what a lovely and cute poem love the picture presentation is great and great feel about the work good luck my friend in the contest gazza
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
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Thanks, Gazza
Maybe you should try your rhyming skills in a children's poem...
I actually patched this together in haste with the deadline only minutes away, so the outcome was pleasing!