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Steve's Poems for Kids

Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Teddy Bear"
A collection of my children's poems

194 total reviews 
Comment from Marie666
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This is a beautiful piece of writing, well written.
It has passion and rhythm written in it and I absolutely love it.
I advise you to keep it up and write more poetry.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
    Thanks, Marie for your kind words.
Comment from sgalletti
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Absolutely lovely! Incredible meter and rhyme, beautiful imagery, and, lots of fun message. Very upbeat. I loved it! Best of luck in the contest. Sue

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
    Thanks, Sue. I seem to have struck a chord with a few teddy -lovers. I actually patched this together in haste with the deadline only minutes away, so the outcome was pleasing!
Comment from missy98writer
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Mystery Poet.
Your poem is delightful and creative poem you cleverly  scribed and your words are rich in imagery painting  a picture in the readers head.  Flows great down the page. Your writing packs a fanciful narrative from a child's view point about playing pirate with his or her Teddy bear.   The art work you used is adorable and priceless. You excellently used rhyme, imagination, alliteration  and metaphor in your poem.  I enjoyed the lines: ""Mummy, my Teddy and I will be playing Outside in the garden," I hear Molly saying. "We'll prob'ly be busy; I hope you don't mind.  There's pirates to battle and treasure to find." $"Blackbeard again!" I think with a chuckle.  "Oh where is my swash? Oh, where is my buckle?" The morning flies past in the blink of an eye."  I love your poem and its fun message about childhood and using imagination. Your poem to me was like a breath of refresh air for a weary soul. I'd recommend your whimsical poem to other reviewers. Thanks for sharing and have a fabulous day. Missy.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
    Thanks, Missy. So glad you enjoyed the adventures of Ted.
Comment from sibhus
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What agreat poem. This was so much fun, and I could really see Ted and Molly out on the seas. Your rhymes work very well portraying the adventures of your swashbuckleing crew. Great rhythm too, that bounces along like a happy little tune. Again great poem, and good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
    Thank you - glad you enjoyed this fanciful little piece.
Comment from Piccalily Potter
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I like the a-a-b-b-c-c rhyme scheme and this is a sweet poem. I like the way you have written it through the eyes of a teddy bear. Thank you for sharing this with us and good luck in your contest entry.

Piccalily Potter

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
    Thank you - and welcome to FanStory. I have just read your 'Evil is...' story - great work - look forward to more.
Comment from robyn corum
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This is precious, in all the way a little girl's poem is supposed to be precious and many more. The rhyming is spot-on in every way and the imagination in off the charts. I love it!

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
    Thanks so much for the kind words and the six stars! Glad you enjoyed it.
    Is it a worry that a grumpy old man can produce a cute little girls' poem?
Comment from Akarva
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A cute nice poem on the life of a Teddy bear. It was interesting and I thoroughly enjoyed reading about it's adventures during the day.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
    Thank you.
    I actually patched this together in haste with the deadline only minutes away, so the outcome was pleasing!
Comment from Eleanor Buron
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I really like this story poem and particularly like the human emotion of a little bit of jealousy that the teddy bear feels towrds Jemima, the one-eyed doll. Cute and well done.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
    Thank you - you are the first to comment on that line...
    I am thinking of a sequel - Jemima's story...
reply by Eleanor Buron on 26-Sep-2011
    I hope there is a sequel. Good poem.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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This is a very clever little poem. It was cute to tell of it from the viewpoint of the teddy bear. Well written with good use of personalzition!!! DEbbie

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
    Thank you, Debbie.
    I actually patched this together in haste with the deadline only minutes away, so the outcome was pleasing!
Comment from volunteer angel
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This is so cute! The imagination of children can't be beat. Your poem showed such action and excitement. I laughed over the line "There's jam on my jacket and mud on my nose".. I voted for you in the contest. Hugs and good luck! V.A.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
    Thank you, Angel, for the kind words and the vote - it has obviously struck a chord with all the teddy-lovers out there.
    I actually patched this together in haste with the deadline only minutes away, so the outcome was pleasing!