Comment from Karen B.

Excellent

You've expressed your sentiments extremely well and with passion. To me, it doesn't read as poetry, but I love it for the message it sends. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014

thanks

Comment from Visheshta Dahiya

Excellent

superb poem..!!!
very well composed. the message is beautiful. the words used are really awesome.
your thinking is great.i respect it.
best wishes
Visheshta

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014

thanks for reading

reply by Visheshta Dahiya on 17-Mar-2014

welcome :)

Comment from emrpoems

Excellent

I loved the writing skills and the message in this write . Thought it was in prose though. I still graded it five because I think it can be considered poetic prose technically.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014

thank you

Comment from Patrick G Cox

Excellent

Hi deepwater,

A deeply insightful offering, which speaks of having been inspired by a deep personal loss. That said, it also speaks to the spoon of human experience through life whether it be short or long.

Well done.

Patrick

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014

thanks Patrick

Comment from Norbanus

Excellent

Compassion is of course a two-way sword.
If one demands submission they will fail.
Make no mind to assumption in the words,
when used to claim compassion or to rail.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014

thanks

Comment from Maltese Falcon

Excellent

I can really relate to this well written poem. you have a good message here. its sad but there are people in this world who only think/ care for themselves.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014

thankyou

Comment from ccto12

Excellent

This short piece of writing says so much. The content's message is fantastic and I enjoyed reading. I particularly like what you say about the "in-between" part of life. Spot-on. Curious as to what GW at the end meant...

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014

my sign thanks for reading

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

I found this an interesting piece of writing. However, it is not really poetry. I feel it should be in the Prose category. Nevertheless I enjoyed the read. Regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014

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Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

There is food for thought throughout this entire poem.

We [try] to surround ourselves with people with integrity, flexibility and ethics, friends that make you laugh and focus on life, but if you fall will always hold out a hand to help you back up,

The key word is in [...] but we must also have those same qualities as well...

Nicely written, smooth and a good flow with the words. John

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014

thanks John

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

What great sentiments and wisdom on display here. You've collected enough food for thought in your tiny poem, to feed people's hunger for happiness and love on this earth, for a long time.
We try to surround ourselves with people with integrity, flexibility and ethics: this is such a wonderful, idealistic notion in that this would be the best to achieve for trust and good relationships. But, most of us find less, and sometimes it's our integrity, flexibility and ethics that they need.

Great thoughts. I hope you get fine reviews.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2014