Comment from jfmorgan

Excellent

Nicely done Anupam. Yes, I see what you mean, life is a vexing thing at times. It is often disappointing if one tries to live it perfectly. I find it best to live the best I can while trusting in a perfect God to see me through the daily grind.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013

I liked your sweet message and happy you could connect to it.thanks for positive and kind views

Comment from Roblac

Excellent

A nice piece of poetry, the image sets the tone .

The cocoon being our Childhood and memories is a truth.

All the best for your future poetry.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013

Thanks for your wishes and nice views:-)

Comment from Patti R.

Excellent

Even without your extensive author notes, this poem would make perfect sense! You have hit the syllable count exactly, you'd be surprised how many don't put 5-7-5 into effect...

Wishing you luck in the contest, Anupam.

Patti

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013

Good to know that it appealed to you even without notes.a hearty thanks for generous review

Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

So very true. Life to some is a puzzle and to others opportunity. It seems your poem describes the holding of one for the moment. This is a good poem which makes one think. .

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013

Thanks for your encouraging words:-)

Comment from sunset energy

Good

Ahh so true . So innocent and carefree as children ..can't wait to leave home...then exposed to the world at the age of 18 ...reality is a shocker .
at first we run back seeking the cocoon again . perhaps we learned strength afterall while cocooned.
moved by this piece . reminds me that we are all connected . we all have the same temporal needs .

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013

Happy to see you could connect.thanks for such deep and generous review:-)

Comment from JB Lynn

Excellent

The image works well with this poem, as it conjures thoughts of that childlike wonder and innocence. I like the break between the 2nd and 3rd line and the fun little "rhyme" between "moon" and "cocoon".
"not out of cocoon" is a clever metaphor for the "cocoon" of childhood when a person is still shielded from some of the harsh realities of the world. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013

Thanks for your praise and kind review:-)

Comment from bossladyone

Excellent

This is beautiful. It is well written and flows nicely. The picture adds to the impact of the poem. You have completed the challenge with this one, Thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013

Thanks for your generous review:-)

Comment from Rmocruz

Excellent

You have presented a deep profound message in brevity.
An appropriate picture selection as well to add imagery.
A worthy contest entry.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013

I am happy that you think its worthy.i appreciate your views.thank you:-)

reply by Rmocruz on 23-Jun-2013

You're welcome.

Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Very nice entry for the five seven five poetry contest, Anupam. In fact I would go so far as to say, you will win this contest, hands down. Bravo! Bob (Mastery)

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013

I am amazed to see that you think i can win.a hearty thanks for your motivational words and generous feedback:-)

Comment from Curt Winslow

Excellent

This was well written. It is true in life we metamorphis into many different things in life. We have to take many different paths. The hope is that one day we are as beautiful as the butterfly. Great job!

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013

Thanks for your insight review and excellent rating