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Comment from Kingsland
I am not much for these ultra short poetic formats, but I really liked this one. You were very clever in your word choices here. This was a very well written ultra short piece of poetic art... John
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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I am not much for these ultra short poetic formats, but I really liked this one. You were very clever in your word choices here. This was a very well written ultra short piece of poetic art... John
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from reconciled
lol....hey buddy....-smile-...wooooo spooky one here...with sort a sexy hum to it...all them "L" sounds...lurking...lusting all liquored up...Lord have mercy....lol....love Michael
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lol....hey buddy....-smile-...wooooo spooky one here...with sort a sexy hum to it...all them "L" sounds...lurking...lusting all liquored up...Lord have mercy....lol....love Michael
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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That wasn't supposed to be funny..hehe..a weird review..lol..just kidding.
Thanks for your funny words and excellent review:-)
Comment from Debra White
Hi Anupam :) Nice to see another of yours!
I love the alliteration in this 5-7-5. Your presentation is superb - I love the red text on the dark artwork - very classy (and symbolic of blood).
You did a wonderful job with this... I love the vampires being referred to as 'leeches' and blood as 'life liquor'. 'lurk' is also appropriate as the vampire is predatory. Excellent choice of words :D
I think that if you jiggled the first line slightly to read 'lusty leeches lurk' it would read even better, but that's just my opinion!
I loved it, very well done and good luck in the contest, Debra :)
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Hi Anupam :) Nice to see another of yours!
I love the alliteration in this 5-7-5. Your presentation is superb - I love the red text on the dark artwork - very classy (and symbolic of blood).
You did a wonderful job with this... I love the vampires being referred to as 'leeches' and blood as 'life liquor'. 'lurk' is also appropriate as the vampire is predatory. Excellent choice of words :D
I think that if you jiggled the first line slightly to read 'lusty leeches lurk' it would read even better, but that's just my opinion!
I loved it, very well done and good luck in the contest, Debra :)
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Hi:-)
i am glad you liked it.you are one of those,for whose reviews i was waiting.and you are here....
The suggestion you made is really nice and a few said the same.but
"lurk lusty leeches
love ..."
here 'leeches' and 'love' are in a linkage,not seperate lines i intended.i will like to know how you see it now.
Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
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You're welcome Anupam :)
Yes, I see how you meant it to be read and it does make perfect sense (both ways!) LOL
I really like it ;) Hugs, Debra :)
Comment from JM daSilva
You were able to express you were talking about vampires clearly. I knew that before I read the author's not. Congratulations on a clear poem.
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You were able to express you were talking about vampires clearly. I knew that before I read the author's not. Congratulations on a clear poem.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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That is a really big compliment.i appreciate your words.Thanks for your kind words and exceptional review:-)
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Very glad to do it. Great poem.
Comment from LadyCasmir
This short piece captures much in the way of color and emotion. Leeches as vampires. Life-liquor as blood. Kudos for the imagery and packing so much in so few words.
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This short piece captures much in the way of color and emotion. Leeches as vampires. Life-liquor as blood. Kudos for the imagery and packing so much in so few words.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Anupam,
The first thing that jumps out at me when, I read this poem, is the outstanding alliteration. Vampires have always gotten a bad break. I don't know if living forever would be so great if one has to sleep in a casket. You have penned a fine 5/7/5 poem for the contest. With expressive words and perfect count. Well done and good luck in the contest....chey
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Hi Anupam,
The first thing that jumps out at me when, I read this poem, is the outstanding alliteration. Vampires have always gotten a bad break. I don't know if living forever would be so great if one has to sleep in a casket. You have penned a fine 5/7/5 poem for the contest. With expressive words and perfect count. Well done and good luck in the contest....chey
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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I appreciate your thorough analysis.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from barleygirl
I have to confess, I do not understand your poem totally becuz I do not know anything about the subject of vampires. I'm not used to reading spooky stories and poems. But I just love the alliteration thru-out and your word choice is very unusual (not like many other poems that use the same words again and again). Each word carries so much more meaning, becuz it's unusual & not over-used. Good poem. Good luck!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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I have to confess, I do not understand your poem totally becuz I do not know anything about the subject of vampires. I'm not used to reading spooky stories and poems. But I just love the alliteration thru-out and your word choice is very unusual (not like many other poems that use the same words again and again). Each word carries so much more meaning, becuz it's unusual & not over-used. Good poem. Good luck!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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I appreciate your words and i knew not everyone knows that well about them.so added the notes.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from zeldasmith
okay, now I understand the poem. Good thing you added notes to this poem because I was somewhat befuttled! I'm not into vampires so I wasn't up to par with them. Good Job. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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okay, now I understand the poem. Good thing you added notes to this poem because I was somewhat befuttled! I'm not into vampires so I wasn't up to par with them. Good Job. Keep writing.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Yes,i knew that not all are up to vampires..hehe..so added notes.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from Sagnik Das
Ah ! - Anupam, dear friend, here I find you again ! - God knows alone, as to what has befallen my confounded sanity today, in being unable to get myself off this "Poetic Haven" for good ! ...
And ah, by Jove ! - What an alliterative splendour have you this time improvised ! I observe, your literary style reflects today, very much that of Dante, indubitably the first pioneering champion of the alliterative poetic verse. I chanced to read his "Divine Comedy" once, & was absolutely perplexed by the sheer dint of ingenious versatility, wherewith he could wield & improvise to such an unforeseen spectrum, the aesthetic scope & dignity of the mythological verse ......
Indeed, this is wonderful work from you ; even akin, I conjecture, as being deemed a refined masterpiece, in the short-versed poetic genre ...
Hence, ... before I end, I'd like to wish you wholeheartedly, my very best for this impending competetion. May you soar thence, as high as the "Regal Bird", gliding majestically, amid the unbridled literary welkin.
:) Best Wishes !
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Ah ! - Anupam, dear friend, here I find you again ! - God knows alone, as to what has befallen my confounded sanity today, in being unable to get myself off this "Poetic Haven" for good ! ...
And ah, by Jove ! - What an alliterative splendour have you this time improvised ! I observe, your literary style reflects today, very much that of Dante, indubitably the first pioneering champion of the alliterative poetic verse. I chanced to read his "Divine Comedy" once, & was absolutely perplexed by the sheer dint of ingenious versatility, wherewith he could wield & improvise to such an unforeseen spectrum, the aesthetic scope & dignity of the mythological verse ......
Indeed, this is wonderful work from you ; even akin, I conjecture, as being deemed a refined masterpiece, in the short-versed poetic genre ...
Hence, ... before I end, I'd like to wish you wholeheartedly, my very best for this impending competetion. May you soar thence, as high as the "Regal Bird", gliding majestically, amid the unbridled literary welkin.
:) Best Wishes !
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Your review are always so full of positive energy,praise and encouraging.i appreciate it very much.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
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You're more than welcome, my friend .
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, anupam, you did an excellent job writing this alliterative 5 7 5 poem, i think the first line would read better as lusty leeches lurk. i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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this is very well written, anupam, you did an excellent job writing this alliterative 5 7 5 poem, i think the first line would read better as lusty leeches lurk. i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)