The Assassins Day Off
Even Assassins need a day off27 total reviews
Comment from amahra
Poor Jude, little did he know that another writer, not far from you, penned that Enrico and Olivia's boss called and offer them "Over Time" and they accepted. LOL! But I like your ending better. :))
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Poor Jude, little did he know that another writer, not far from you, penned that Enrico and Olivia's boss called and offer them "Over Time" and they accepted. LOL! But I like your ending better. :))
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Ha Ha like your little twist. Thanks for taking the time to review. I can now tell you that the story ran in second.
Take care.
Comment from LJbutterfly
this story is truly a horror, thriller with building suspense from beginning to end. Jude had no real way out, unless he could call his daughter and tell her to meet him elsewhere. Your ending was very creative...a day off for assassins.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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this story is truly a horror, thriller with building suspense from beginning to end. Jude had no real way out, unless he could call his daughter and tell her to meet him elsewhere. Your ending was very creative...a day off for assassins.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thanks for taking the time to review my story. Glad you enjoyed the read and the ending.
Take Care
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Very good job of getting lots of necessary information into your story and making the meeting with his daughter work out. I would suggest you use an apostrophe in title (Assassin(')s. As you have written it, I suspected all assassins were having a day off, which kind of messed with your hook. Also, this site suggests you leave a blank line between paragraphs and it does make it easier to read.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Very good job of getting lots of necessary information into your story and making the meeting with his daughter work out. I would suggest you use an apostrophe in title (Assassin(')s. As you have written it, I suspected all assassins were having a day off, which kind of messed with your hook. Also, this site suggests you leave a blank line between paragraphs and it does make it easier to read.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thanks Carol for taking the time to review my story. Also thanks for the suggestions. I will also ensure I get that blank line between the paragraphs.
Take Care.
Comment from Ric Myworld
I'm guessing that even killers need a day off, but I'm not sure I want to hang around long enough to find out if they are on duty or not. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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I'm guessing that even killers need a day off, but I'm not sure I want to hang around long enough to find out if they are on duty or not. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thanks Ric for taking the time to review my story. I am with you and wouldn't hang around waiting to find out.
Take Care
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, The Assassin's Day Off, was full of tension and built the thrill to the unexpected and humorous conclusion (until the next time).
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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This story, The Assassin's Day Off, was full of tension and built the thrill to the unexpected and humorous conclusion (until the next time).
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Thanks for taking the time to read my story. Look after yourself and until the next time Take Care.
Comment from Paul McFarland
Nicely done. I was expecting fireworks, but no, you finished things off in a quiet pleasant manner. Jude should really change to a gun that is capable of more than one shot.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Nicely done. I was expecting fireworks, but no, you finished things off in a quiet pleasant manner. Jude should really change to a gun that is capable of more than one shot.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Ha Ha. Yes I agree about the change of gun. Thanks for taking time to review my story. Take care.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is really a great little story. Totally unexpected that everyone is taking a day off on the same day, never saw it coming. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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This is really a great little story. Totally unexpected that everyone is taking a day off on the same day, never saw it coming. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Wow. Thank you Katherine for liking my story to the extent of 6 stars. Now that the contest is over I can reveal the story came in Second. I am very happy with the result. Please have a good day and take care.
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congratulations on your placing! not bad!
Comment from Wendy G
You had me holding my breath throughout! A very cleverly written story, well planned and written with skill and care. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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You had me holding my breath throughout! A very cleverly written story, well planned and written with skill and care. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 05-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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Wendy thanks for reviewing my story . I am glad that you liked it lLets see how it goes. Take care.
Comment from writer723
I very much enjoyed reading your excellent story. It really drew me in and captured my attention from start to finish. I found myself rooting for the main character all the way and wishing the best for the individual. Your depiction of this situation was quite emotional and touching to me. Your descriptive skills are exceptional and you express yourself very well.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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I very much enjoyed reading your excellent story. It really drew me in and captured my attention from start to finish. I found myself rooting for the main character all the way and wishing the best for the individual. Your depiction of this situation was quite emotional and touching to me. Your descriptive skills are exceptional and you express yourself very well.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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Thanks for taking time to review my story. I am glad you enjoyed it . Have a great day and take care.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your contest entry. You told an entire story, with characters, plot, setting, problem, and solution, using only a few words. My only suggestion is to divide your entry into paragraphs. On this site you need to physically put in a space. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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I enjoyed reading your contest entry. You told an entire story, with characters, plot, setting, problem, and solution, using only a few words. My only suggestion is to divide your entry into paragraphs. On this site you need to physically put in a space. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thanks for reviewing my story and it is great that you enjoyed it. Also thanks for the hint on dividing it into paragraphs . Will make sure to check that next time. Take Care.