I Have Life?
An entry for the club challenge16 total reviews
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is wonderfully poetic and flows elegantly across the screen. I sense someone close has left your life. Your reassurance to him/her that you have moved on and you're suggesting he/she do the same make this a strong piece.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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This is wonderfully poetic and flows elegantly across the screen. I sense someone close has left your life. Your reassurance to him/her that you have moved on and you're suggesting he/she do the same make this a strong piece.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much, your sense is so very close, losing one's memory is about losing everyone, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Lucy 2
Ummm.... Living in the 'now'?
Refusing a past? Or moving on with hope and determination leaving behind the 'seed' which caused pain... This poem held a sadness for me, I felt loss... It is moving. Nicely done x
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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Ummm.... Living in the 'now'?
Refusing a past? Or moving on with hope and determination leaving behind the 'seed' which caused pain... This poem held a sadness for me, I felt loss... It is moving. Nicely done x
Comment Written 25-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and review, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Life goes on and we keep our memories safe and face the heartache of loss and hope to plant seeds for new birth as the cycle of life continues, a poignant well rhymed write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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Life goes on and we keep our memories safe and face the heartache of loss and hope to plant seeds for new birth as the cycle of life continues, a poignant well rhymed write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, and yes life must go on, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Kahpot,
What a wonderful poem of love lost.
Your rhyme is perfect in this very strict form of poetry.
Your photo is haunting and accentuates the sad message of your work.
An excellent club challenge poem.
Good luck with all your writing!
Cindy
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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Kahpot,
What a wonderful poem of love lost.
Your rhyme is perfect in this very strict form of poetry.
Your photo is haunting and accentuates the sad message of your work.
An excellent club challenge poem.
Good luck with all your writing!
Cindy
Comment Written 25-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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Thank you so very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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You?re welcome, Kahpot.
Comment from lyenochka
Your repeated line brings up many questions. "I have life, less memories seeds" - does it mean less of the memories are kept or planted? Or perhaps it reflects someone who suffers from dementia and he/she cannot interact with loved ones. The poem urges the reader to keep on living life even though their loved one cannot remember them.
I wonder if you meant:
I have life, less memory's seeds
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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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Your repeated line brings up many questions. "I have life, less memories seeds" - does it mean less of the memories are kept or planted? Or perhaps it reflects someone who suffers from dementia and he/she cannot interact with loved ones. The poem urges the reader to keep on living life even though their loved one cannot remember them.
I wonder if you meant:
I have life, less memory's seeds
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Comment Written 25-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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Gotta love you, of course that is what I meant (smiling now) thank you so very much for your help and understanding, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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Happy I could be of help! Your poem was very touching and shows me how important it is to treasure life. 💞
Comment from Bill Schott
This quatern, I Have Life?, has the proper formatting and shows acceptance that life is long and short, but we have to keep living it.
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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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This quatern, I Have Life?, has the proper formatting and shows acceptance that life is long and short, but we have to keep living it.
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Comment Written 25-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot