haiku (frosted panes)
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Comment from royowen
This is is an excellent entry in this world's shortest haiku, I don't think this is the shortest I've seen, but it's certainly one of the best ones I've read, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
This is is an excellent entry in this world's shortest haiku, I don't think this is the shortest I've seen, but it's certainly one of the best ones I've read, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 22-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Is the winning supposed to be based solely and exclusively on "shortest," though? Because, if that's the case, then maybe I should shorten mine to: Frost
Icy
Cold.
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Nah I don't think so,
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Nah, me neither.
I did double-check with the sponsor, and she has indicated that the voters should cast their ballots based on preference, NOT whose is shortest. In summary, size does not matter...
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I thought so
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Not sure if it's the shortest haiku but it's one of the most interesting. I too think of lace when. I see Winter windows like that. Excellent writing! Best wishes! Alexandra
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
Not sure if it's the shortest haiku but it's one of the most interesting. I too think of lace when. I see Winter windows like that. Excellent writing! Best wishes! Alexandra
Comment Written 22-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Oy! You're now the second reviewer who's mentioned the "shortest" aspect. I think I'm going to go on the contest thread and ask if it's "all about the short," or if it's got to be haiku quality, as well!!
Anyway, thank you for the very nice review. I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
Hi poet!
This is quite lovely as well as quite true. So beautiful with great imagery.
Being the sponsor of this contest I'm a little
confused as to how your lines play out. It looks like you have a 3-3-3 syllable count. The prompt requirements say that the poem must follow a long-short-long pattern.
Please believe that I HATE giving out 4 star ratings but as the sponsor of this contest I feel I have to review everyone.
This is easily fixed I'm sure without compromising the essence of your poem. Message me when you've edited and I'll upgrade your rating.
Luv&stuff,
Katiemaedead
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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
Hi poet!
This is quite lovely as well as quite true. So beautiful with great imagery.
Being the sponsor of this contest I'm a little
confused as to how your lines play out. It looks like you have a 3-3-3 syllable count. The prompt requirements say that the poem must follow a long-short-long pattern.
Please believe that I HATE giving out 4 star ratings but as the sponsor of this contest I feel I have to review everyone.
This is easily fixed I'm sure without compromising the essence of your poem. Message me when you've edited and I'll upgrade your rating.
Luv&stuff,
Katiemaedead
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Comment Written 22-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Oh, I am SOOO very grateful for this!!! Thank you times a million zillion. I will get right on repairing this!! xoxoxo
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Very evocative post and that actually makes me feel cold just looking at it! Your 9 syllable haiku (how's that for shortest haiku!) fits the brief nicely and is well presented with its image. Well done and good luck! Debbie
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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
Very evocative post and that actually makes me feel cold just looking at it! Your 9 syllable haiku (how's that for shortest haiku!) fits the brief nicely and is well presented with its image. Well done and good luck! Debbie
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Comment Written 22-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Thanks, but I was just advised by the sponsor (gawd bless that woman!) that I didn't follow the long-short-long requirements. So...please check in again in a few minutes!
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I have no idea what long-short-long requirements mean! But your verse looks now enlarged to 11 syllable and great. Can't see what the issue was because it said 'less than 17'
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I think, because it was to follow a haiku style, they couldn't all be the same length. I'm an obedient little apple-polisher of a contestant, you see. I always do what the Powers That Be tell me to do!!
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Oh I see! One day we'll find out exactly who those powers that be are. Keep your ear to the ground....:)
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Will do!!