The Roots of My Poet-Tree
Club entry for Gypsy's Finding Your Muse, Forms of Art44 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Like your nature poem about a tree. If there were no trees, we would not have paper to even write on. And we also need trees so we can breathe, so trees are important. Beautiful poetry.
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Like your nature poem about a tree. If there were no trees, we would not have paper to even write on. And we also need trees so we can breathe, so trees are important. Beautiful poetry.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
Comment from Brenda Strauser
Hi Debi, Love this poem. It was beautiful. The tree is so colorful and awesome. The colors of the tree go well with the different colors in your words. You are so talented. Great job!! Love, Brenda
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Hi Debi, Love this poem. It was beautiful. The tree is so colorful and awesome. The colors of the tree go well with the different colors in your words. You are so talented. Great job!! Love, Brenda
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Dearest Brenda, I thank you so very much for the lovely review for my Trees poem. I was happy when Gypsy used this as a club event. It was fun going all the way back to third grade for the Trees poem. (Big Smile!) I appreciate all of your kind words and your very generous six stars. You are such a Sweetheart!!!. Thanks again, my very dear friend. (Hugs!)
Love, Debi
Comment from Helvi2
Hi Debi, I like your "Roots of Poet-tree. It tells where you came from and why you write. I'm glad the child that used to be found a new joy in writing. When we imagine joy we feel it! There is no better joy than finding serenity and what we write and how it sends us on joyful journeys. It even helps when the strife of life hits us. I think it loosens the pain so we can set it free. Love the way you compared this to the poem Trees! very Nicely Done! :o) Nancy
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Hi Debi, I like your "Roots of Poet-tree. It tells where you came from and why you write. I'm glad the child that used to be found a new joy in writing. When we imagine joy we feel it! There is no better joy than finding serenity and what we write and how it sends us on joyful journeys. It even helps when the strife of life hits us. I think it loosens the pain so we can set it free. Love the way you compared this to the poem Trees! very Nicely Done! :o) Nancy
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Hi Nancy, I thank you so very much for the lovely review for my Trees poem. I was happy when Gypsy used this as a club event. It was fun going all the way back to third grade for the Trees poem. (Big Smile!) I appreciate all of your kind words and your very generous six stars. You are such a Sweetheart!!!. Thanks again, my very dear friend. (Hugs!)
Love, Debi {
Comment from estory
This is certainly reminiscent of her style, I like the ringing rhyme scheme, and the repetitions of the phrasing are nice and somnambulistic. It's also a great celebration of the craft of poetry and our little site here estory
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This is certainly reminiscent of her style, I like the ringing rhyme scheme, and the repetitions of the phrasing are nice and somnambulistic. It's also a great celebration of the craft of poetry and our little site here estory
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
Comment from Lisasview
I am sure you know this about me Debi, but I am crazy about metaphors... this fabulous!!! Your font and color choices are perfect.
Loved every single word.
Lisa
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I am sure you know this about me Debi, but I am crazy about metaphors... this fabulous!!! Your font and color choices are perfect.
Loved every single word.
Lisa
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was so cool, Debi. I loved the rhyme. I love that you bid each author that has helped shape you their own verse. I do love Fanstory, as well. This was a lovely poem. Gretchen
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This was so cool, Debi. I loved the rhyme. I love that you bid each author that has helped shape you their own verse. I do love Fanstory, as well. This was a lovely poem. Gretchen
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
Comment from Carol Clark2
A very interesting poem in the style of Joyce Kilmer's poem, "Trees." (Note: He wrote, "A poem lovely as a tree." with no 'as' before lovely, which would mess up the iambic rhythm.) I like the way you included some of your writing history in the poem, and especially the ending lines about lifelong friends on FanStory. I hope you're having a good week health=wise. Carol
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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A very interesting poem in the style of Joyce Kilmer's poem, "Trees." (Note: He wrote, "A poem lovely as a tree." with no 'as' before lovely, which would mess up the iambic rhythm.) I like the way you included some of your writing history in the poem, and especially the ending lines about lifelong friends on FanStory. I hope you're having a good week health=wise. Carol
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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LOL, Carol, that is the one thing that has always driven me crazy about this poem is that it seems like a sore thumb to me. I'm surprised I love it so much because I feel it's screwed up as it is. Where almost every other line is 8 syllables and reads smoothly and the first line is out of place without the as. Especially after I starting learning more about poetry, the more I learned the more it drove me crazy. When you do the duh dum test you get stuck on the first line. I even asked one of my college professors and he just laughed and didn't say if he thought it did or not since it was Kilmer's to do what he wanted, but I didn't like it, so I figured as long as I was doing my own take on this I would do it my way. Please don't take that wrong. I mean no disrespect. Honest! & just needed to express that. Thanks for listening to my feeling about it. Love you and thanks my dear friend. Debi
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Carol, I apologize, as I just had a memory of what was bothering me about this. Poem here has always been pronounced with one syllable. That is why I thought it was off an now I remember my college teacher saying that some pronounce it with two syllable. I don't know why I forgot that, but it makes sense. So I was trying to make sense out of it with one syllable and that is where I was coming from. I will correct it and make a note of it in my authors notes. Thanks so much.
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I guess I noticed it because I've seen it written that way so often, and I memorized the poem as a child. The song version of the poem was also quite popular. No offense taken, my friend.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Now we know where it all began - third grade with a classic poem we've all heard. And, yes, you used writing to cope with the hardships of life - to take you away. How many of us can say that.
My children had every Dr. Seuss book written, and for their high school graduations, they both received, "Oh, the Place You'll Go".
Friends for life, indeed. FanStory is a special place because of the members.
This is beautiful, Debi. Thanks for sharing with us.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Now we know where it all began - third grade with a classic poem we've all heard. And, yes, you used writing to cope with the hardships of life - to take you away. How many of us can say that.
My children had every Dr. Seuss book written, and for their high school graduations, they both received, "Oh, the Place You'll Go".
Friends for life, indeed. FanStory is a special place because of the members.
This is beautiful, Debi. Thanks for sharing with us.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Hi Sweetie, and thank you so very much. I actually came over your way last night. I read your story about the fire. However, I was so wiped that I wanted to read it again today before I reviewed. I can get so much more out of it when I am not over-tired. So I was lurking around,, going through the ruins looking for cigarette butts with you. LOL.. there was a time if I ran out of cigarettes I would do exactly that, thru the car ashtrays, etc... yuck...
Thanks again for the kind comments about my Trees poem. I truly appreciated everyone of them. Love you a whole bunch, sis!! Debi
Comment from jaded831
A beautiful poem and tribute to this site. I also fell in love with writing at a young age. I wrote a short play for a school project and was one of the characters, it won third place. Your poem makes me appreciate this site even more than I do.
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A beautiful poem and tribute to this site. I also fell in love with writing at a young age. I wrote a short play for a school project and was one of the characters, it won third place. Your poem makes me appreciate this site even more than I do.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
Comment from lyenochka
I love your allusion to Kilmer's famous poem. I always liked his poem (and why would a man have a first name of Joyce?) I like how you showed your journey of poetry reading and writing and ended with a tribute to Fanstory where we meet lifelong friends who love to write!
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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I love your allusion to Kilmer's famous poem. I always liked his poem (and why would a man have a first name of Joyce?) I like how you showed your journey of poetry reading and writing and ended with a tribute to Fanstory where we meet lifelong friends who love to write!
Comment Written 10-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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Gosh, Helen, this is so very sweet of you. I thank you so very much for the awesome review for my Trees poem. I was happy when Gypsy used this as a club event. It was fun going all the way back to third grade for the Trees poem. (Big Smile!) I appreciate all of your kind words and the generous six stars too. Thanks again, my very dear friend and sis. (Hugs!)
Much Love, Debi