At Home in Mississippi
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Making a Grand Entrance"Growing up in the 40 and 50 in MIssissippi
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Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This was a well-written chapter for your memoir. You used dialogue well to move the story along, and the recital kept pace with this. kay
SPAG: I finally a grandchild > I finally had a grandchild
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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This was a well-written chapter for your memoir. You used dialogue well to move the story along, and the recital kept pace with this. kay
SPAG: I finally a grandchild > I finally had a grandchild
Comment Written 28-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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Thank you Katherine. I really appreciate the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A grand entrance indeed! Quite a weight and testament to the labour struggles beforehand. The build up of weather intensifies the anxiety and sense of being alone experienced by your mother. But a very satisfying ending to your piece. Last but one sentence: I can't believe I finally have (a) grandchild. There's also some ambiguity in the description of Alma Simmons - Glover's mother and your paternal grand(father)? Otherwise an excellent piece, not quite as flowing as your usual stories but an enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing, Debbie
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2024
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A grand entrance indeed! Quite a weight and testament to the labour struggles beforehand. The build up of weather intensifies the anxiety and sense of being alone experienced by your mother. But a very satisfying ending to your piece. Last but one sentence: I can't believe I finally have (a) grandchild. There's also some ambiguity in the description of Alma Simmons - Glover's mother and your paternal grand(father)? Otherwise an excellent piece, not quite as flowing as your usual stories but an enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing, Debbie
Comment Written 28-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Debbie, I'm pleased you liked my story and that you always so helpful with suggestions to make my stories read better.
I appreciate you.
Beth
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You brought back the memories of childbirth here Beth and I have never experiences pain like it since! But the consolation prize is the baby and if we are completely crazy we even give birth again and again. A fine post about the expanding family here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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You brought back the memories of childbirth here Beth and I have never experiences pain like it since! But the consolation prize is the baby and if we are completely crazy we even give birth again and again. A fine post about the expanding family here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 28-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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Thank you, I think we have amnesia the whole nine because when It all happens again, were surprised by the intensity of the pain once again.
Beth
Comment from Wendy G
A very nice story about your entry into the world. Ten pounds - goodness, no wonder poor Lucille was finding it hard! I am glad there were no complications. A beautiful photo - is that you?
Wendy
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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A very nice story about your entry into the world. Ten pounds - goodness, no wonder poor Lucille was finding it hard! I am glad there were no complications. A beautiful photo - is that you?
Wendy
Comment Written 28-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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Thank you Wendy. It isn't me but I believe I looked just like that. I had a very round face and head full of black hair. I have a picture of me at three and still lookedf like that.
Beth
Comment from Tom Horonzy
So many things have changed since then, like hospital visits to have a kid versus home birthing. Then there are the visitors which I recall having early in my years when all gathered to celebrate the vent. Now it's another day.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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So many things have changed since then, like hospital visits to have a kid versus home birthing. Then there are the visitors which I recall having early in my years when all gathered to celebrate the vent. Now it's another day.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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Thank you for the review. You might be surprised to know that home birth using a midwife making a comeback. My three grandchildren were born at home. However I don't know of any doctors who still make house calls. I was delivered with the doctor having some kind of battery light on his head and the nurse holding a flash light. If we'd even had electricity, it would likely have been out with the storm. We had kerocene lamps for three more years.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very interesting story that you have written about your own birth and I enjoyed listening to it very much. It is very well written your paragraph in your sent structure. Your whole presentation is wonderful. Patricia .
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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This is a very interesting story that you have written about your own birth and I enjoyed listening to it very much. It is very well written your paragraph in your sent structure. Your whole presentation is wonderful. Patricia .
Comment Written 27-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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Thank you Patricia. I'm glad you liked my story.
Beth
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well written.
It's a wonder that your mother let your father 'get to her' ever again! Sounds like she mighta been done with babies after that birth.
They don't make doctors like that anymore.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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Well written.
It's a wonder that your mother let your father 'get to her' ever again! Sounds like she mighta been done with babies after that birth.
They don't make doctors like that anymore.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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Thank you Wayne. All my labors were painful too. Probably a lot of us think once is enough but the memory fades. Mom never had another child but she did have a miscarriage.
Comment from Glena Jessee-King
The story is getting attention, and it is very interesting. Everyone should learn something about childbirth at a time when it is done at home. Of course, many mothers-to-be have natural birth at home. I learned more about childbirth. The first child I was put to sleep with a long labor; the second, labor was enabled faster. You really bring out beautifully another time frame so that the reader can feel that they are actually there. Ah! This is beautifully written and in such an appropriate sequence with correct tenses of the verbs. Next to the last sentence, a verb was inadvertently left out.
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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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The story is getting attention, and it is very interesting. Everyone should learn something about childbirth at a time when it is done at home. Of course, many mothers-to-be have natural birth at home. I learned more about childbirth. The first child I was put to sleep with a long labor; the second, labor was enabled faster. You really bring out beautifully another time frame so that the reader can feel that they are actually there. Ah! This is beautifully written and in such an appropriate sequence with correct tenses of the verbs. Next to the last sentence, a verb was inadvertently left out.
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Comment Written 27-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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Thank you Glena. I appreciate the review. I had to be born at home by a doctor because a hospital was being built wasn't completed. The bad part was we lived out for town and electricity hadn't come out the far. The had lamps and flash light. I think if we had electricity, it would have been out because of the storm.
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You are welcome. You are probably right, wouldn't you know! Witty you are. I enjoyed your commentary also.
Comment from Mrs. KT
about eight O'clock (o'clock) tonight
Hello, Beth,
Goodness! A 10lb baby girl!
Well, I can certainly relate: I, too, weighed 10lbs, and I was born during a storm! Hah!
I don't know if I could have survived giving birth at home = both of our children were C-sections...
Below, please find some needed edits:
*lightening (lightning)
*a quick peak (peek) at the baby
*lets (let's) see if we can get
*I can.t(can't) believe I findly (finally) have a grandchild. It's been a good day after all."
Thank you for sharing,
diane
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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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about eight O'clock (o'clock) tonight
Hello, Beth,
Goodness! A 10lb baby girl!
Well, I can certainly relate: I, too, weighed 10lbs, and I was born during a storm! Hah!
I don't know if I could have survived giving birth at home = both of our children were C-sections...
Below, please find some needed edits:
*lightening (lightning)
*a quick peak (peek) at the baby
*lets (let's) see if we can get
*I can.t(can't) believe I findly (finally) have a grandchild. It's been a good day after all."
Thank you for sharing,
diane
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Comment Written 27-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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Thank you Dolly. I really appreciate you commenting and telling me about my spags. Part of the reason I make errors is Three fingers are numb and I getting them on the home keys.
Brth
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Hello, Beth,
Goodness! That sounds terrible!
Glad to help!
Take care, Beth,
Fondly,
diane