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A loop poem for the contest13 total reviews
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is beautiful. I enjoyed reviewing this. It is displayed nicely, and it is thought provoking and relatable, too. Excellent work!
I just have one note for you:
Can you add an s to force(s)? That would make best sense- care forces, not care force.
Best wishes,
Alex
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This is beautiful. I enjoyed reviewing this. It is displayed nicely, and it is thought provoking and relatable, too. Excellent work!
I just have one note for you:
Can you add an s to force(s)? That would make best sense- care forces, not care force.
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 30-Mar-2024
Comment from Dr. Nad
This is a lovely poem that reminds us of the juxtaposition that exists between family members when those who are supposed to be our greatest allies drive us to the darkest alleys.
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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2024
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This is a lovely poem that reminds us of the juxtaposition that exists between family members when those who are supposed to be our greatest allies drive us to the darkest alleys.
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Comment Written 30-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2024
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I?m glad this poem resonated with you. Abuse of any sort is unacceptable. Thank you for sharing your thoughts. Much appreciated.
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You are most welcome!
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I?m glad this poem resonated with you. Abuse of any sort is unacceptable. Thank you for sharing your thoughts. Much appreciated.
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I?m glad this poem resonated with you. Abuse of any sort is unacceptable. Thank you for sharing your thoughts. Much appreciated.
Comment from 20hrockwell
I appreciate that the poem builds on itself. The short stanzas are visually pleasing. The repetition makes it more profound. There is a lot of power in the last line. Thank you for the share. Have a happy Easter.
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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2024
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I appreciate that the poem builds on itself. The short stanzas are visually pleasing. The repetition makes it more profound. There is a lot of power in the last line. Thank you for the share. Have a happy Easter.
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Comment Written 30-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2024
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I?m glad this poem resonated with you. Abuse of any sort is unacceptable. Thank you for sharing your thoughts. Much appreciated.
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I?m glad this poem resonated with you. Abuse of any sort is unacceptable. Thank you for sharing your thoughts. Much appreciated.
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I?m glad this poem resonated with you. Abuse of any sort is unacceptable. Thank you for sharing your thoughts. Much appreciated.
