I'm Not Me
ADULT Erotic Writing Contest27 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
You will definitely have the readers interest with this line. Accompanied with all kinds of speculation: "Tonight, I'm not me." The tie is a main prop in this whole plot. Very clever the way you have put the focus on the tie. The tie becomes animated. So it was his wife all along how clever.
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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You will definitely have the readers interest with this line. Accompanied with all kinds of speculation: "Tonight, I'm not me." The tie is a main prop in this whole plot. Very clever the way you have put the focus on the tie. The tie becomes animated. So it was his wife all along how clever.
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Thank you so much!!
Xoxo
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well done
Comment from estory
I think you accomplished your goal with action packed, mysteriously moody, exciting writing. You set the scene well, the characters are vague enough, and yet sharply rendered enough, to make them interchangeable with the readers, and yet distant enough to allow us to watch them. Details make it all come alive. The dialogue is kind of sparse, but that also empties the scene of emotion and makes it even more poignant, maybe even tragic. estory
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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I think you accomplished your goal with action packed, mysteriously moody, exciting writing. You set the scene well, the characters are vague enough, and yet sharply rendered enough, to make them interchangeable with the readers, and yet distant enough to allow us to watch them. Details make it all come alive. The dialogue is kind of sparse, but that also empties the scene of emotion and makes it even more poignant, maybe even tragic. estory
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Thank you so much, estory!!
Xoxo
Comment from Jim Wile
Wonderful job, Jess. Very sensual. I guessed where it might be going, but it was fun getting there nonetheless. This was tastefully done eroticism in which the descriptions were clear without being overly graphic. Just like the sexiest women's clothing leaves something to the imagination and doesn't just "let it all hang out." Very well done.
I'd like to read more of your prose. You are a talented writer!
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Wonderful job, Jess. Very sensual. I guessed where it might be going, but it was fun getting there nonetheless. This was tastefully done eroticism in which the descriptions were clear without being overly graphic. Just like the sexiest women's clothing leaves something to the imagination and doesn't just "let it all hang out." Very well done.
I'd like to read more of your prose. You are a talented writer!
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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I'm so grateful for your kind words, Jim! Your support means a lot to me, and I'm not at all surprised that you figured out where I was going!!!
I'm really glad you liked it. I sometimes struggle to transition from poetry to prose.
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I tend to get more satisfaction from writing prose these days, especially fiction. My very first attempt at fiction was a 30,000 word novella nine years ago, but I wouldn't advise people to start this way. I think a short story is a better way to start to get your feet wet.
I've found novel writing can be very consuming, and other things in my life can start to slip when I'm really into it. I get far less sleep when writing a novel. But it's also a lot of fun, especially if there is someone to share it with while writing it. I will read each new chapter to Elise after I write it and get her input, which is usually very good. She enjoys being part of the process and never hesitates to criticize things she doesn't like. We debate everything, but the result is better in the end after we discuss it.
Comment from Thesis
You've presented a story that leads the reader to believe the main character is having am extra-maritalrelationship with a call girl. I liked how she saw the photo of the wife and the comments about her, then reading it was his wife. The description was great, the clicking heels, wink to the maintenance guy, etc., were all adding to the scene. Well done, passionate, but nor graphic.
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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You've presented a story that leads the reader to believe the main character is having am extra-maritalrelationship with a call girl. I liked how she saw the photo of the wife and the comments about her, then reading it was his wife. The description was great, the clicking heels, wink to the maintenance guy, etc., were all adding to the scene. Well done, passionate, but nor graphic.
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Thank you so much!!
Xoxo
Comment from GoWiSt
"I'm Not Me" Well, with legs and thighs like that, who cares? Come here!
Wow, the imagery throughout was exquisite, as I was transported sensory perception by sensory perception through each scene.
The end was a good got-ya moment, as I had to re-read the last paragraph to realize that she was his wife, and so they had been role-playing, which they apparently did often, it seems.
A well-crafted erotica that wasn't verbose or cliche. I believe this should do very well in the contest. Good luck!
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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"I'm Not Me" Well, with legs and thighs like that, who cares? Come here!
Wow, the imagery throughout was exquisite, as I was transported sensory perception by sensory perception through each scene.
The end was a good got-ya moment, as I had to re-read the last paragraph to realize that she was his wife, and so they had been role-playing, which they apparently did often, it seems.
A well-crafted erotica that wasn't verbose or cliche. I believe this should do very well in the contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Thank you so much!! That means the world.
Xoxo
Comment from Ricky1024
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing and have a pleasant day.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing and have a pleasant day.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Thank you so much!!
Xoxo
Comment from Ric Myworld
As we've all been told so many times that we get tired of hearing it, "Write what you know" comes to mind. And you certainly seem to have a handle on what you're writing. And what little of your work I've read, I was sure it was going to turn out innocent and the man would be your husband. Fun read. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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As we've all been told so many times that we get tired of hearing it, "Write what you know" comes to mind. And you certainly seem to have a handle on what you're writing. And what little of your work I've read, I was sure it was going to turn out innocent and the man would be your husband. Fun read. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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;) Thank you so much!!
Xoxo
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I am very happy with the ending. I was afraid she was a prostitute he'd hired. I was happy that it was his wife. I enjoyed reading and wish you luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I am very happy with the ending. I was afraid she was a prostitute he'd hired. I was happy that it was his wife. I enjoyed reading and wish you luck with the contest.
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Thank you so much!!
Xoxo
Comment from Bill Schott
This was a dynamite erotic tale which tastefully bypassed the salacious use of body parts and cheap "activity" descriptions until we get to the completion and find -- the missus has narrated the whole affair. Neat.
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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This was a dynamite erotic tale which tastefully bypassed the salacious use of body parts and cheap "activity" descriptions until we get to the completion and find -- the missus has narrated the whole affair. Neat.
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Thank you so much, Bill!!
Xoxo
Comment from Jodi Ann Anderson
I really enjoyed reading this erotic story, and I could visualize every detail. The ending was a surprise! It was so perfectly written!
Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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I really enjoyed reading this erotic story, and I could visualize every detail. The ending was a surprise! It was so perfectly written!
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Thank you, Jodi! I appreciate the feedback very much. :)
Xo
Jess