Comment from estory

Excellent

Oh my. You have had some bad luck; good luck with the toe and the eye operation. My father had that done and it is pretty routine nowadays. I liked the detail in the storytelling here. You dig into the emotions the girl feels, the frustration, and you show it as she slams shut her laptop. She slams that screen door on the way out of the frustrating place she is in. There is no resolution here, so I don't know if this is the beginning of something, or just a fragment of a larger episode meant to stand on its own. estory

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024

Thank you for reading and reviewing, estory. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it so much. I will be adding a part two soon--I needed to clarify some details with my uncle before starting; there will be more. I'm planning on 3-5 parts. I'm seeing a doctor about my toe today and my eye surgery is next Tuesday. Fingers crossed both go well. Thank you again and take care. :D :D

Comment from Steve Foreman

Excellent

This is a really great piece of writing, and enticing, considering it doesn't have a beginning or an end. I would love to see what she does next! Good job!

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Steve. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it so much. I will be adding a part two soon--I needed to clarify some details with my uncle before starting. Thank you again and take care. :D :D

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

There is a story waiting to be written here, including the backstory of why she can't "go there" to that place in her memories. I hope you will soon be able to write more, and that your toe will heal quickly. Best wishes.
Wendy

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Wendy G. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it so much. I will be adding a part two soon--I needed to clarify some details with my uncle before starting. Thank you. I'm seeing a doctor about my toe today and my eye surgery is next Tuesday. Fingers crossed both go well. Thank you again and take care. :D :D

Comment from Liz O'Neill

Excellent

I admire you for writing the story anyway. I needed to be written. She has the writers attention now:
"'ve never had trouble writing an essay before. Unbidden, a kernel of memory flared, and she squeezed her eyes shut. No, I'm not going there!"
you did very well I'm glad I will look forward to more of your writing. I don't believe we've met My name is Liz i just finished writing my autobiography so now I'm writing about my brother.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Liz. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it so much. I will be adding a part two soon--I needed to clarify some details with my uncle before starting. It's wonderful to meet you. My name is Amber. Thank you again for reading and take care. :D :D

Comment from LJbutterfly

Excellent

Your story, so far, is mysterious and suspenseful. A blinking cursor and inability to write is relatable to many writers. I have only one recommendation...the use of a larger font which will make it easier for older eyes to read your posts.

I pray that your cataract surgeries are successful and your toe is not broken. I also wish you much success with your writing efforts. I look forward to reading your future offerings.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024

Thank you for reading and reviewing, LJbutterfly. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it so much. I will be adding a part two soon--I needed to clarify some details with my uncle before starting. Thank you. I'm seeing a doctor about my toe today and my eye surgery is next Tuesday. Fingers crossed both go well. Good suggestion. I find myself, especially now, needing larger print, so I will try and remember to include that in the next part. Thank you again for reading and take care. :D :D

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

Well I love the opening to this! Your protagonist is so real and I can empathise with this kind of restlessness and indecision, especially when you know you've got a piece of work to do. I wonder why she couldn't look at the pictures. A nice question mark hanging over that. Well structured and narrated, this has certainly left me wanting to know more.
So sorry to hear about your fall and cataracts and hoping that you get some resolution soon. Take care Debbie

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Debbie. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it so much. I will be adding a part two soon--I needed to clarify some details with my uncle before starting. I'm seeing a doctor about my toe today and my eye surgery is next Tuesday. Fingers crossed both go well. Thank you again and take care. :D :D

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I have everything crossed for you and hope your toe isn't broken. Must hurt like hell!!

This is a great start to your parents love story, and I'll be looking out for it. Sometimes writing does become a chore, and it doesn't matter what you do, the page stays blank. All the same, it's lovely to see you posting again, and a story, too. Now you have started, the words will undoubtedly roll. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Sandra. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it so much. I will be adding a part two soon--I needed to clarify some details with my uncle before starting. (I'm glad to be writing again, too. I didn't realized my muse had stayed silence since March--but that's also when life got hectic at school.) I'm seeing a doctor about my toe today and my eye surgery is next Tuesday. Fingers crossed both go well. Thank you again and take care. :D :D

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

Written, and I look forward to the next part of the story. Sometimes the love stories that our family had we do not know I am glad you were trying to tell the story as you remember it. I wish you the best with the toe and may you feel better. Patricia.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Patricia. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it so much. I will be adding a part two soon--I needed to clarify some details with my uncle before starting. Thank you. I'm seeing a doctor about my toe today and my eye surgery is next Tuesday. Fingers crossed both go well. Thank you again and take care. :D :D

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

You have a great start to this story. I can't wait to read more. I understand it fiction but based on a few facts. I couldn't find any way to improve this post. Great job.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Barbara. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it so much. I will be adding a part two soon--I needed to clarify some details with my uncle before starting. Thank you again and take care. :D :D

Comment from Ulla

Exceptional

I found this a fascinating beginning to a new story. As I understand it this is about your parents? I can't wait to be reading more. I hope your toe is not broken. Ulla xcx

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Ulla. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it so much. I will be adding a part two soon--I needed to clarify some details with my uncle before starting. Yes, it's about my parents. This is something that happened the first year they met, and if my memory is correct, this was also when she realized she loved him and had fallen for him. I'm seeing a doctor about my toe today and my eye surgery is next Tuesday. Fingers crossed both go well. Thank you again and take care. :D :D