DUEL with the DEVIL
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is not at all good. I can see how this is starting to play out. Brian's guilt and Julia's pain. It really couldn't get any worse for addicts. I can't wait to read more.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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This is not at all good. I can see how this is starting to play out. Brian's guilt and Julia's pain. It really couldn't get any worse for addicts. I can't wait to read more.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Let's see if they have the strength in this budding relationship to withstand this first real challenge and see how they deal with it.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Oyyy. It's one of those moments that make those who love those afflicted with this disease hold our collective breath. They always hold the possibility of being a "trigger" that will undo all the great work and accomplishments that have preceded it. You set it up wonderfully and made the accident feel totally authentic and believable.
Excellent chapter, Jim. I'll look forward to seeing what happens next. xoxo
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Oyyy. It's one of those moments that make those who love those afflicted with this disease hold our collective breath. They always hold the possibility of being a "trigger" that will undo all the great work and accomplishments that have preceded it. You set it up wonderfully and made the accident feel totally authentic and believable.
Excellent chapter, Jim. I'll look forward to seeing what happens next. xoxo
Comment Written 25-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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We'll see if these two young lovers have the ability to withstand this first real challenge.
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Yep!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Oh dear:( I didn't expect this. My mind was racing ahead thinking she would be off to college and wanting a break from Brian. But this is a cleverly crafted disaster for both of them. And, just as Julia was growing in confidence, she's now going to feel beholden to her mother again. This is a thoroughly engaging chapter as it opens the door to a whole lot of potential ahead. A very sweet confession of love at the end. But will it be enough to keep these two bonded?
"Never missing (a?) one except one month.." it sounds a bit awkward but not an error on your part, I believe.
Well d one, Jim! Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Oh dear:( I didn't expect this. My mind was racing ahead thinking she would be off to college and wanting a break from Brian. But this is a cleverly crafted disaster for both of them. And, just as Julia was growing in confidence, she's now going to feel beholden to her mother again. This is a thoroughly engaging chapter as it opens the door to a whole lot of potential ahead. A very sweet confession of love at the end. But will it be enough to keep these two bonded?
"Never missing (a?) one except one month.." it sounds a bit awkward but not an error on your part, I believe.
Well d one, Jim! Take care Debbie
Comment Written 25-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Thanks so much, Debbie. I agree with you about the awkwardness of that sentence and have modified it. Thanks for that. Let's see if these two can withstand the first challenge to their new resolve.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
This one caused me differing concerns here and there... like her leaving for the Big Apple, where I felt she would find another spark leaving Briamn pining in Raleigh, and then when she got de-nailed I seen her staying home like a dog without a bone unable to play her stringed instrument.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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This one caused me differing concerns here and there... like her leaving for the Big Apple, where I felt she would find another spark leaving Briamn pining in Raleigh, and then when she got de-nailed I seen her staying home like a dog without a bone unable to play her stringed instrument.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Yep, lots of possibilities here for the way this might go. It will be their first real challenge following their rehab experience.
Comment from Wendy G
What a frightful accident for her. It would be excruciatingly painful, and it seems that she probably won't be able to perform well enough. Her mother is heartless. Beautifully written. Always a great pleasure to read your vivid and insightful stories.
Wendy
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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What a frightful accident for her. It would be excruciatingly painful, and it seems that she probably won't be able to perform well enough. Her mother is heartless. Beautifully written. Always a great pleasure to read your vivid and insightful stories.
Wendy
Comment Written 25-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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This same thing happened to me as a child when I was trying out a new see-saw made by a neighbor in his wood shop. He had neglected to put handles on, so with nothing to hold onto, I grabbed onto the rear of the seat for stability, and when my side came down it crushed my fingers against the driveway it was on and one of my fingernails popped up from the base. Needless to say, he added handles to the see-saw.
Comment from iDri.Luv.Jesus
Bravos, I like your idea of recap chapter 18 before going to new chapter. It helps reader(s) like me for the first time to do the review. Your brief background helped too. Love your big font, very easy to read. Your story line is intriguing, and it moves me, not boring at all. Great writing over all, and a 5star rate, and I do not have a 6 star option. Best of luck to you!
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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Bravos, I like your idea of recap chapter 18 before going to new chapter. It helps reader(s) like me for the first time to do the review. Your brief background helped too. Love your big font, very easy to read. Your story line is intriguing, and it moves me, not boring at all. Great writing over all, and a 5star rate, and I do not have a 6 star option. Best of luck to you!
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Comment Written 25-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Thank you very much for this great review. So glad you found the story, and I hope you keep reading. If you're interested in catching up, each chapter begins with a brief recap of the previous one, so that's a quick way to catch up without having to read the entire book.
Comment from BethShelby
The injury you describe had to be extremely painful. It takes a long time for a finger injury to heal. especially if the nail is involved. Both of my thumb nails were damaged in my twenties and they never grew back normally.
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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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The injury you describe had to be extremely painful. It takes a long time for a finger injury to heal. especially if the nail is involved. Both of my thumb nails were damaged in my twenties and they never grew back normally.
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Comment Written 25-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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This same thing happened to me as a child when I was trying out a new see-saw made by a neighbor in his wood shop. He had neglected to put handles on, so with nothing to hold onto, I grabbed onto the rear of the seat for stability, and when my side came down it crushed my fingers against the driveway it was on and one of my fingernails popped up from the base. Needless to say, he added handles to the see-saw after that.