One moment at a time
A rhyming poem42 total reviews
Comment from estory
I think you did a good job of articulating the tension, the anxiety and uncertainty we feel when we are confronted with a situation like this when a loved one is facing dangerous surgery. I know I felt the same way when my dad had colon surgery. I think the short lines and the tight meter almost caught that tick tock of the clock that we feel as the time seems to take forever until we hear that all is well. The rhyme scheme also hammers that home. Glad to hear he is OK. estory
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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I think you did a good job of articulating the tension, the anxiety and uncertainty we feel when we are confronted with a situation like this when a loved one is facing dangerous surgery. I know I felt the same way when my dad had colon surgery. I think the short lines and the tight meter almost caught that tick tock of the clock that we feel as the time seems to take forever until we hear that all is well. The rhyme scheme also hammers that home. Glad to hear he is OK. estory
Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Wow, what a great review. You nailed it. You mostly chose to review the poem instead of the content, and I thank you so much.
Thank you from the bottom of my heart.
Jesse
Comment from Barry Penfold
Well clearly heartfelt and a good job to boot. Yes, always difficult to wait the outcome of serious surgery such as this. Been there myself. Your brother is a lucky man to have you as a younger brother. Thanks for sharing. All the best in the contest.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Well clearly heartfelt and a good job to boot. Yes, always difficult to wait the outcome of serious surgery such as this. Been there myself. Your brother is a lucky man to have you as a younger brother. Thanks for sharing. All the best in the contest.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Thanks, Barry, for your supportive review. I am the lucky one to have him as an older brother.
This poem is not in a contest but thanks for the luck wishes.
Take care, and have a wonderful day.
Jesse
Comment from Aussie
Jesse, the waiting is the worst. The outcome was wonderful. I liked your sparse poem telling about your wait time for your precious brother. And yes, I'm no stranger to narrow operating beds, I think because the surgeons need to be closer to the patient. K xx
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Jesse, the waiting is the worst. The outcome was wonderful. I liked your sparse poem telling about your wait time for your precious brother. And yes, I'm no stranger to narrow operating beds, I think because the surgeons need to be closer to the patient. K xx
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Thanks, Kay, for your supportive review. I appreciate your kind words.
Like all good people, yes he is precious.
Thanks for your positive feedback.
Jesse
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
A feeling of dreaded anticipation in this poem. You can almost feel the time creeping. I'm glad the ending was happy and that he is doing well now. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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A feeling of dreaded anticipation in this poem. You can almost feel the time creeping. I'm glad the ending was happy and that he is doing well now. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Thanks for your positive feedback. I love your description of the time creeping. Yes, this has a happy ending but he is not out of the woods yet. Today he developed a lung infection. He is on antibiotics.
Let's hope and pray that he recovers well with each day.
Enjoy the rest of the week.
Jesse
Comment from Pam (respa)
-I am glad to hear your brother came out of the surgery okay.
-It is always a big relief to hear that news.
-You did a good job with your poem,
highlighting the feelings most people have
when waiting to hear news of a surgical procedure.
-It's like your life stops; you're not hungry; you
just think a lot and try to focus on other things.
-And do all of that while "the minutes crawl."
-How is your brother doing and does he live near you?
-Thanks for sharing, Jesse, I hope it has helped
you deal with this difficult situation.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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-I am glad to hear your brother came out of the surgery okay.
-It is always a big relief to hear that news.
-You did a good job with your poem,
highlighting the feelings most people have
when waiting to hear news of a surgical procedure.
-It's like your life stops; you're not hungry; you
just think a lot and try to focus on other things.
-And do all of that while "the minutes crawl."
-How is your brother doing and does he live near you?
-Thanks for sharing, Jesse, I hope it has helped
you deal with this difficult situation.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Thanks, Pam, for your lovely detailed review.
I'm glad I represented others when they wait for someone who is in surgery. It takes up all our strength to wait and wonder.
My brother does live near me. But, he went by plane to a hospital far away to have his surgery.
Yesterday, he caught an infection in his lungs. He is currently on antibiotics. I am still worried about him. He is not out of the woods yet.
Yes, writing this has helped me immensely.
Thanks for letting me share.
Take care, my friend.
Jesse
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You are very welcome, Jesse, and thanks for sharing in your reply. I'm sorry to hear he has an infection, but hope he is better soon. You take care, as well.
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Thanks for your sympathy, Pam.
Yes, we all hope he will recover soon.
Jesse
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You are more than welcome, Jesse.
Comment from lyenochka
Thank you for posting this poem of waiting. We join you and pray for a full and healthy recovery for your brother. Waiting for a surgery outcome is one of the hardest things. Sending hugs and prayers!
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Thank you for posting this poem of waiting. We join you and pray for a full and healthy recovery for your brother. Waiting for a surgery outcome is one of the hardest things. Sending hugs and prayers!
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Thanks for your hugs and prayers.
Take care,
Jesse
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How is your brother doing today?
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He still has a long infection. I'm waiting until his daughter gets back before I call him. I hope he is progressively getting stronger.
Comment from LJbutterfly
Yay! So far the news sounds good. Your brother had a very serious surgery, and will have to take really good care of himself from this now on. Your poem is succinct and to the point. I hope and pray for a speedy recovery. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Yay! So far the news sounds good. Your brother had a very serious surgery, and will have to take really good care of himself from this now on. Your poem is succinct and to the point. I hope and pray for a speedy recovery. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Thanks for your positive feedback. Yep, he will have to watch what he eats and exercise to keep his health improving.
I appreciate your kind words. Succinct and to the point is a good way to describe my poem.
My brother will have a speedy recovery. Thanks for your prayers.
Take care,
Jesse
Comment from gansach
This is a heartfelt wish for your brother's successful surgical procedure, a show of love and care. I am so happy he came through it well and is on his way to recovered health. I will send good healing vibes. Nicely done!
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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This is a heartfelt wish for your brother's successful surgical procedure, a show of love and care. I am so happy he came through it well and is on his way to recovered health. I will send good healing vibes. Nicely done!
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Thanks for sending the good healing vibes. Yes, we are all happy he is on to a speedy recovery.
Enjoy the rest of the week.
Jesse
Comment from Dr. Nad
This is a wonderful poem that commemorates the open heart surgery your brother had to endure. All of us stand in line and wait for both good and bad. There's a part of us that would like all of life to be like the microwave but it is not. I'm glad your brother is doing well. God bless!
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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This is a wonderful poem that commemorates the open heart surgery your brother had to endure. All of us stand in line and wait for both good and bad. There's a part of us that would like all of life to be like the microwave but it is not. I'm glad your brother is doing well. God bless!
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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I've never heard of life being compared to a microwave before. Clever analogy. Thanks for the blessings.
Take care,
Jesse
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You are most welcome Jesse!
Comment from jessizero
I am so glad your brother is okay and is recovering! Your poem was well-written, as well. I liked your rhymes. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you and your brother.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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I am so glad your brother is okay and is recovering! Your poem was well-written, as well. I liked your rhymes. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you and your brother.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Thanks for your kind review, Jessi.
I am happy you liked my rhymes.
Thanks for your good wishes.
Jesse