haiku (ancient bonsai tree)
Haiku contest entry31 total reviews
Comment from Jacob1395
This is a beautiful piece and I thought your choice of words were cleverly thought out and made your poem flow really well. I really enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
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This is a beautiful piece and I thought your choice of words were cleverly thought out and made your poem flow really well. I really enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
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Thanks so very much Jacob for your lovely comments and review! Thanks for the good luck wishes too
Katiemae1977
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Katiemae,
This haiku is a good description of any bonsai tree. You made a good choice of artwork to illustrate your words.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great day.
Joan
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
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Hi Katiemae,
This haiku is a good description of any bonsai tree. You made a good choice of artwork to illustrate your words.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great day.
Joan
Comment Written 07-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
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Hi Joan Thanks for stopping by to review! I'm holed up in a nursing home now and not too particularly healthy but nothing serious thank goodness.
Thanks again
Katiemae1977
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My pleasure, Katiemae.
Hope things clear up for you and you have a lot of friends there.
Joan
Comment from Colorado Owl
Your poem and picture struck something in me that made me pause and think about the "twists and turns" of my life and that these twists and turns have not been wasted, but have added more beauty. Thank you!
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
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Your poem and picture struck something in me that made me pause and think about the "twists and turns" of my life and that these twists and turns have not been wasted, but have added more beauty. Thank you!
Comment Written 07-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
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Thanks so very much Colorado for your lovely comments and review! I'm glad it touched you personally. I was hoping it would touch people.
Katiemae1977
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Your haiku beautifully captures the essence of resilience and the journey of life. The imagery of the "ancient bonsai tree" suggests a deep, enduring strength and the "twists and turns" evoke the challenges and complexities faced along the way.
The phrase "a road less traveled" complements the bonsai's unique path, suggesting that this journey is both rare and meaningful.
Overall, your haiku is concise and evocative, effectively using the bonsai as a metaphor for life's winding path.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
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Your haiku beautifully captures the essence of resilience and the journey of life. The imagery of the "ancient bonsai tree" suggests a deep, enduring strength and the "twists and turns" evoke the challenges and complexities faced along the way.
The phrase "a road less traveled" complements the bonsai's unique path, suggesting that this journey is both rare and meaningful.
Overall, your haiku is concise and evocative, effectively using the bonsai as a metaphor for life's winding path.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
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Thanks so very much for your lovely comments and review!
Katiemae1977
Comment from harmony13
The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line
says it all! I pondered on these words and yes, as the author states, twists and turns its a way through life. Thinking of the a road less traveled I often find difficult to take! The poem is thought provoking. The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem well.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line
says it all! I pondered on these words and yes, as the author states, twists and turns its a way through life. Thinking of the a road less traveled I often find difficult to take! The poem is thought provoking. The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem well.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thanks so much harmony13 for your lovely comments and review!
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
You will find most of us on here decrepit in one way or another. But your brain was certainly not affected.
This is an excellent example of haiku. But, I would have said for the last line" Mostly standing still."
My viewpoint only. I find this place helps with my pain. I wish more painless health for you. Karen
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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You will find most of us on here decrepit in one way or another. But your brain was certainly not affected.
This is an excellent example of haiku. But, I would have said for the last line" Mostly standing still."
My viewpoint only. I find this place helps with my pain. I wish more painless health for you. Karen
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thanks so very much Karen for your comments and. review. This site gives me something to do thank goodness.
Thanks again!
Katiemae1977
Comment from Dr. Nad
I love the beautiful picture you have and the wonderful presentation for this poem. The fonts are nice and they are large, you've learned the fan story lesson well: "Take care of your readers eyes!" You have really addressed some pertinent aspects of life in these three well-placed lines. The bonsai tree looks so bedraggled and tossed and turned by Life's austere treatment but it is such a beautiful creation and you are right, it is a road less traveled that brings out the best in each one of us. It's not, as the Bible would say, the broad road.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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I love the beautiful picture you have and the wonderful presentation for this poem. The fonts are nice and they are large, you've learned the fan story lesson well: "Take care of your readers eyes!" You have really addressed some pertinent aspects of life in these three well-placed lines. The bonsai tree looks so bedraggled and tossed and turned by Life's austere treatment but it is such a beautiful creation and you are right, it is a road less traveled that brings out the best in each one of us. It's not, as the Bible would say, the broad road.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thanks so very much for your lovely comments and review!
Katiemae1977
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You are most welcome my friend!
Comment from Barry Penfold
Yes, I enjoyed this Haiku contest entry. Love the image as well. The words describe the journey of a bonsai tree very well. Thanks for sharing and all the best in the contest.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Yes, I enjoyed this Haiku contest entry. Love the image as well. The words describe the journey of a bonsai tree very well. Thanks for sharing and all the best in the contest.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thanks so very much Barry for your lovely comments and review!
Katiemae1977
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
What a perfect subject for a Haiku poem. I like how you applied the twists and turns found in a bonsai tree to life. Beautiful post. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest,
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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What a perfect subject for a Haiku poem. I like how you applied the twists and turns found in a bonsai tree to life. Beautiful post. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest,
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thanks so very much for reviewing!
Katiemae1977
Comment from artisart4u
Your poem has the right amount of syllables for each line and also the tree represents what you are going through, you acted independently and freed yourself from the conformity of others- In Wiki under "Taking the Road Less Traveled." A very good comparison.
I see you used a bonsai and a haiku, both Japanese.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Your poem has the right amount of syllables for each line and also the tree represents what you are going through, you acted independently and freed yourself from the conformity of others- In Wiki under "Taking the Road Less Traveled." A very good comparison.
I see you used a bonsai and a haiku, both Japanese.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thanks so much for your lovely comments and review!
Katiemae1977
