The Coyote Boys
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Questions"Story about two brothers who change their destiny.
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A great finish to a tragic story and expect the sheriff is glad to see the back of their Dad, he was nothing but trouble. This murderous deed might rear its ugly head in the future, but for now it is dormant. Another fine chapter in this tale and I enjoyed the journey Gretchen. We were well and truly entertained by your vivid imagination, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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A great finish to a tragic story and expect the sheriff is glad to see the back of their Dad, he was nothing but trouble. This murderous deed might rear its ugly head in the future, but for now it is dormant. Another fine chapter in this tale and I enjoyed the journey Gretchen. We were well and truly entertained by your vivid imagination, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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I think the whole town was willing to sweep his disappearance under the rug. Thank you for this and for sticking with me. Gretchen
Comment from Ric Myworld
I'm still off traveling but I'm glad I was able to stop in for a few minutes and catch this chapter. I enjoy everything you write, and although much of this one is deep, it is right in there with the best of them. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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I'm still off traveling but I'm glad I was able to stop in for a few minutes and catch this chapter. I enjoy everything you write, and although much of this one is deep, it is right in there with the best of them. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Thanks very much for saying that, Ric. I really appreciate it. Gretchen
Comment from Wendy G
An excellent ending for this dark and sad story. Appropriate that it should end with the howl of coyotes. It was written with great realism and that very authenticity made it both disturbing and compelling. While murder is never good, and usually not a solution, the fact that Matthew's cruelty and abuse and degradation were unending made his demise justifiable and necessary. He would have killed his own family and the little girl. Tragic story but very well written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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An excellent ending for this dark and sad story. Appropriate that it should end with the howl of coyotes. It was written with great realism and that very authenticity made it both disturbing and compelling. While murder is never good, and usually not a solution, the fact that Matthew's cruelty and abuse and degradation were unending made his demise justifiable and necessary. He would have killed his own family and the little girl. Tragic story but very well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much. I'm glad it's done. I really appreciate this awesome review, kind words and the fact that you stuck with it. Gretchen
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Wish I'd had a six. This was a lovely and moving story. Suffering is not unique. In all my many many years I have learned one thing.
We all have both bad stuff and good stuff in our lives. How we choose to react determines the quality of our life. Being in love is easy, sustaining the love is not. You and you alone make the difference. No one can do it for you. :-)
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Wish I'd had a six. This was a lovely and moving story. Suffering is not unique. In all my many many years I have learned one thing.
We all have both bad stuff and good stuff in our lives. How we choose to react determines the quality of our life. Being in love is easy, sustaining the love is not. You and you alone make the difference. No one can do it for you. :-)
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Very true, Karen. I appreciate this excellent review. Gretchen
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I love the way you write sweetie. Karen
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Gretchen,
I'm all out of sixes, but this is certainly worthy of one. This was an outstanding story gal, and I thoroughly enjoyed each chapter. You've got a talent for telling a story. Well done. I hate to see it end, which I think is the sign of a good story. Thanks so much for sharing this gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Hello Gretchen,
I'm all out of sixes, but this is certainly worthy of one. This was an outstanding story gal, and I thoroughly enjoyed each chapter. You've got a talent for telling a story. Well done. I hate to see it end, which I think is the sign of a good story. Thanks so much for sharing this gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Tom. No six necessary. Just happy you enjoyed this enough to stick around from beginning to end. Gretchen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I wish I had a sixth star. This is a very good story, a rather heartbreaking story. The boys shouldn't have to carry the knowledge of what they had to do for the rest of their lives. Without ending their daddy, there would be an unending story of misery for all three of them.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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I wish I had a sixth star. This is a very good story, a rather heartbreaking story. The boys shouldn't have to carry the knowledge of what they had to do for the rest of their lives. Without ending their daddy, there would be an unending story of misery for all three of them.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much. I'm so happy you liked this. It was a tad dark. Gretchen
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was a lovely ending, Gretchen, perfect. Murder is wrong, a sin, but sometimes it's a case of getting rid of rot that has settled in the midst of the town, to allow the good things see the light of day. Dewey, and Huck, just did some 'spring cleaning' and got rid of all the sickness that had pulled everyone down. Now life is good. Excellent ending. Well done, my friend, I really enjoyed your story. :)) Warmest hugs, Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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That was a lovely ending, Gretchen, perfect. Murder is wrong, a sin, but sometimes it's a case of getting rid of rot that has settled in the midst of the town, to allow the good things see the light of day. Dewey, and Huck, just did some 'spring cleaning' and got rid of all the sickness that had pulled everyone down. Now life is good. Excellent ending. Well done, my friend, I really enjoyed your story. :)) Warmest hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment Written 16-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Sandra. I'm so thankful you stayed with this one. Like I said in the beginning, there's no happy ending to this. Thank you for the sixth star. Your encouragement week after week has meant the world to me. Gretchen
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A wonderful ending, Gretchen! I'm so glad you rounded it off in this last chapter as I wasn't quite ready to see the finishing line. It's been a totally immersive read which seems to have flowed effortlessly from you. All the characters have been skilfully delineated and the story, although a poignant one, has a very satisfying and cathartic conclusion. You deserve to be very proud. Well done! Debbie
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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A wonderful ending, Gretchen! I'm so glad you rounded it off in this last chapter as I wasn't quite ready to see the finishing line. It's been a totally immersive read which seems to have flowed effortlessly from you. All the characters have been skilfully delineated and the story, although a poignant one, has a very satisfying and cathartic conclusion. You deserve to be very proud. Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 16-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Debbie. I'm definitely glad this one is done. I appreciate the support and continued encouragement on this. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
I sure like happy endings, but this ending, among a couple of others was inevitable, as long as Matthew Strait there was going to be much unhappiness, his demise was inevitable for the localised company to survive, beautifully written great story, it sounds a little Billie Joe, the Tallahachee bridge, song by Bobbie Gentry, well done Gretchen, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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I sure like happy endings, but this ending, among a couple of others was inevitable, as long as Matthew Strait there was going to be much unhappiness, his demise was inevitable for the localised company to survive, beautifully written great story, it sounds a little Billie Joe, the Tallahachee bridge, song by Bobbie Gentry, well done Gretchen, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Roy. I'm glad this one is over. The story was intense. I appreciate you hanging in there with it. Gretchen
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A fitting end.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Gretchen
Well, your trip to the fan story convention is really funny too. Did you finish that one?
The last I read you and Rachelle were in Amish country on your way to the convention. And you had some hilarious scenes there
I have missed most of this book, but I did read one chapter where the father was very abusive The kids and one of them took a shovel and hit him over the head. I don't know if he died from that or not. Our weather, he was killed at a different time. But they had to bury him somewhere, and that probably was covered in the previous chapter.
Huck and Dewey. Obviously, Huck is the leader. Perhaps he's the older brother. That would make sense.
It sounds like momma knows, but is not going to say anything. She told him he's going to change the world and he's already changed her world for the better
The only thing is in those days how she gonna replace his income? That's the reason women stay with abusive men it's because they wouldn't be able to survive on their own
Here it should be kisses. Everything else is present tense
""About you changing the world," she leans down and kissed the top of my head. "You ain't never gonna "
I enjoyed reading your book chapter
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Hi, Gretchen
Well, your trip to the fan story convention is really funny too. Did you finish that one?
The last I read you and Rachelle were in Amish country on your way to the convention. And you had some hilarious scenes there
I have missed most of this book, but I did read one chapter where the father was very abusive The kids and one of them took a shovel and hit him over the head. I don't know if he died from that or not. Our weather, he was killed at a different time. But they had to bury him somewhere, and that probably was covered in the previous chapter.
Huck and Dewey. Obviously, Huck is the leader. Perhaps he's the older brother. That would make sense.
It sounds like momma knows, but is not going to say anything. She told him he's going to change the world and he's already changed her world for the better
The only thing is in those days how she gonna replace his income? That's the reason women stay with abusive men it's because they wouldn't be able to survive on their own
Here it should be kisses. Everything else is present tense
""About you changing the world," she leans down and kissed the top of my head. "You ain't never gonna "
I enjoyed reading your book chapter
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Thank you for catching that edit. Rachelle and inare still working on the Amish adventure of Detour. I appreciate you reading and critiquing this story. Gretchen