Spirited Justice
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Comment from Jacob1395
I really hope Naomi survives, I could feel how special she is to Angelo. This was a really intense, well told chapter. You maintain the tension really well and I was definitely kept gripped. Another excellent chapter. I can't wait for the next one.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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I really hope Naomi survives, I could feel how special she is to Angelo. This was a really intense, well told chapter. You maintain the tension really well and I was definitely kept gripped. Another excellent chapter. I can't wait for the next one.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Thanks Jaco...I've been asked to slow the pace a bit so the next chapters will be reflection on the past and also some humor, but then we'll ramp up the crime scene once again. I appreciate the review and your comments.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Harry Craft
Well, Carol. Another masterpiece I see. Is this a chapter for a whole book that you are doing? It should be. This would be a great book if you put it all together. It really kept me interested. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Well, Carol. Another masterpiece I see. Is this a chapter for a whole book that you are doing? It should be. This would be a great book if you put it all together. It really kept me interested. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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It is a novel I am writing, Harry. It started with a prologue and has 13 chapters so far. Most of the characters are from the book "Unfinished Brushstrokes" that I wrote prior to this one. I hope you will continue to follow and enjoy.
Smiles, Carol
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Oh, I see. I guess I got in too late for the beginning Lol! It sounds like a great book!
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It's never too late, Harry. There's a lot more to unfold. Right now it's a pageant with murders and accidents happening throughout the years. And they are discovering it has sometehing to do with research papers, but the experts haven't put the pieces together yet. There's plenty more to happen.
Smiles, Carol
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LOL! Well, I guess only Carol knows at this point?
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an excellent chapter that essentially slows things down a bit. Apart from the initial trashing of the apartment and the attack on naomi it is reflective, a welcome break from the high-paced scenario. Much enjoyed, kay
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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This is an excellent chapter that essentially slows things down a bit. Apart from the initial trashing of the apartment and the attack on naomi it is reflective, a welcome break from the high-paced scenario. Much enjoyed, kay
Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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The next few chapters will be at a slower pace, adding some humor and reflection into the past with some of the characters. I hope you will continue to enjoy it. Thanks for the review, Kay.
smiles, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Thank goodness Angelo got there in time. At least, at least I hope he has. Now Eleanor is going to help things will start moving. I wish she would come here and make my breakfast! Lol. There is still lots to sort out before Naomi is safe, but I'm sure Angelo will do the best he can for her. Love is a powerful thing. The story is moving along nicely, my clever friend. Well done, and bring on the next part! Love you lots. Sandra xxxxx
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Thank goodness Angelo got there in time. At least, at least I hope he has. Now Eleanor is going to help things will start moving. I wish she would come here and make my breakfast! Lol. There is still lots to sort out before Naomi is safe, but I'm sure Angelo will do the best he can for her. Love is a powerful thing. The story is moving along nicely, my clever friend. Well done, and bring on the next part! Love you lots. Sandra xxxxx
Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Good morning, Sandra. Naomi is teetering on the edge, but hopefully she will survive. We are about to bring in a few old friends who also have a lot of baggage to deal with. Some thought we needed a little breathing time before the action pumped up again. I think the faithful followers will love the next few chapters...or at least I hope so. Thank you as always.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
Well, Angelo to the rescue! There are some coincidences here which probably would not happen in real life eg a doctor friend, who is both available and has both a secluded cottage plus a supply of blood - but let's suspend disbelief. After all there are helpful ghosts who can produce food at the snap of a finger. It remains an exciting and dranatic story, and anenjoyable read. Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Well, Angelo to the rescue! There are some coincidences here which probably would not happen in real life eg a doctor friend, who is both available and has both a secluded cottage plus a supply of blood - but let's suspend disbelief. After all there are helpful ghosts who can produce food at the snap of a finger. It remains an exciting and dranatic story, and anenjoyable read. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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the secluded cabin belongs to Angelo's dad but the two men shared it as fishing buddies after being in the military together. And Angelo told him how bad Naomi was so the good doctor, familiar with improvising on the battle field, knew what to bring. And Eleanor...well, she's a special lady.
Thanks so much for the review and comments.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
Hooray for Eleanor who's always ready to come to the rescue and comes with motherly care to feed the one in distress! It's good that Angelo came exactly when he did and has a doctor friend he can trust!
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Hooray for Eleanor who's always ready to come to the rescue and comes with motherly care to feed the one in distress! It's good that Angelo came exactly when he did and has a doctor friend he can trust!
Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Yes, this author can wait till the last second, but she just can't let it be too late. LOL And Eleanor...she's a very special lady... a crime fighter with a heart.
Smiles, Carol
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Sounds a lot like you 💓
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Smiles!!!
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Thank goodness, Naomi was found and is being helped. thanks for taking the stress level down a bit from the last chapter. i expect it will go back up soon enough :-) i wish I had a ghost advisor who could snap her fingers and get me a burger and fries whenever. cool chapter, Carol.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Thank goodness, Naomi was found and is being helped. thanks for taking the stress level down a bit from the last chapter. i expect it will go back up soon enough :-) i wish I had a ghost advisor who could snap her fingers and get me a burger and fries whenever. cool chapter, Carol.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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The next chapters will be a little slower with some reflection by a few characters before we go charging back into the crime scene. Thanks for following and enjoying.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I just finished your chapter and it completely drew me in! The tension made every moment feel so real. Your ability to craft such an engaging and suspenseful story is truly impressive. I was on the edge of my seat the entire time, and I can't wait to see what happens next!
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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I just finished your chapter and it completely drew me in! The tension made every moment feel so real. Your ability to craft such an engaging and suspenseful story is truly impressive. I was on the edge of my seat the entire time, and I can't wait to see what happens next!
Comment Written 22-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much, Michael. I've been asked to slow the pace a little so the next few chapters will be a bit of reflection of the past by a few characters before they dive back into chasing the criminals. I hope you enjoy.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, a well written chapter. I would look at the usage of the word: had, to check if it is really needed, or redundant in many instances. Also, I would have Angelo, check her injuries before, deciding against the hospital, after that, things get a bit stretched with the doctor, and blood in the frig.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Hmm, a well written chapter. I would look at the usage of the word: had, to check if it is really needed, or redundant in many instances. Also, I would have Angelo, check her injuries before, deciding against the hospital, after that, things get a bit stretched with the doctor, and blood in the frig.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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I have a bad habit of using "had" and I try to watch it, but you know how habits are. Thanks for pointing it out. Angelo knew that if he went to a hospital either Jose or the police would get to Naomi and neither was a good choice. As for the blood and the doctor... He was a military doctor on the battlefield with Angelo's dad so I thought he might come more prepared than most considering he knew what to expect. Thanks for the comments and suggestions.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
Very good. It looks like Naomi is going to make it. I get chills thinging about a knife twisting in her body. I'm glad Angelo was there to rescue her. Eleanor was there when he needed her as well. I look forware to more.
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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Very good. It looks like Naomi is going to make it. I get chills thinging about a knife twisting in her body. I'm glad Angelo was there to rescue her. Eleanor was there when he needed her as well. I look forware to more.
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Comment Written 22-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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I think the next few chapters might be a little slower as a few characters take time to reflect on the past before diving into some more crime fighting. I hope you enjoy them.
Smiles, Carol