Fall's Farewell
Her beauty slips away30 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a lovely quatern, the repeated line flowing down the page like a leaf drifting from an autumn leaf.
Excellent rhymes and the cadence reads very well.
Wishing you all the best with the voters. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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This is a lovely quatern, the repeated line flowing down the page like a leaf drifting from an autumn leaf.
Excellent rhymes and the cadence reads very well.
Wishing you all the best with the voters. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Gloria. I appreciate your review and kind words. Thanks also for your best wishes for the contest.
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I'm very appreciative of your overly generous sixth star.
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written for the contest and I enjoyed very much listening to it. I wish you very good luck in the contest and may you have a pleasant weekend and may God bless you. Patricia.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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This is very well written for the contest and I enjoyed very much listening to it. I wish you very good luck in the contest and may you have a pleasant weekend and may God bless you. Patricia.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Patricia, for your encouraging review and good luck wish for the contest.
Comment from Katiemae1977
Just beautiful poet. You did a fantastic job of blending in that repeating line with the rest of your lines
Would you consider..."With backwards glance..." instead of "A backwards glance..."
It blends in a bit better and seems to be more poetic.
This should do well.
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Just beautiful poet. You did a fantastic job of blending in that repeating line with the rest of your lines
Would you consider..."With backwards glance..." instead of "A backwards glance..."
It blends in a bit better and seems to be more poetic.
This should do well.
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Katiemae. I struggled a lot with that particular line, which happens to be the most important line in the poem. I originally had, 'With a backward glance' but that didn't work because it created nine syllables. I appreciate your suggestion...it's very good. Thank you for your constructive review.
Comment from June Sargent
The quatern is one of my favorite poetic forms. . You've used it beautifully to highlight fall's poignant departure. It will be sad to see the last leaf slowly drift away. But winter has her own beauty. Lovely entry for the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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The quatern is one of my favorite poetic forms. . You've used it beautifully to highlight fall's poignant departure. It will be sad to see the last leaf slowly drift away. But winter has her own beauty. Lovely entry for the contest.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Thank you, June. I appreciate your review and kind words.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi
Tis is a good quatern that personifies the tree and its leaves. It give clear strong images of Autumn.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Enjoy the rest of your weekend.
Joan
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Hi
Tis is a good quatern that personifies the tree and its leaves. It give clear strong images of Autumn.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Enjoy the rest of your weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Thanks, Joan. I appreciate your kind words and good luck wish.
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My pleasure.
Joan
Comment from nancyjam
I enjoyed reading this beautiful poem about the changing season.
Fall is so beautiful, but eventually must wave good-bye and let winter have its turn.
Your rhyming is lovely and the meter right on.
Bet of luck in the contest.
Nancy
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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I enjoyed reading this beautiful poem about the changing season.
Fall is so beautiful, but eventually must wave good-bye and let winter have its turn.
Your rhyming is lovely and the meter right on.
Bet of luck in the contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Nancy, for that sweet and encouraging review. I appreciate your kind words and good luck wish.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Lovely! Great personification of the tree as she sheds her colourful garments and waves goodbye to her friends. Excellent rhyming and flow and I particularly like the echoing farewell. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Lovely! Great personification of the tree as she sheds her colourful garments and waves goodbye to her friends. Excellent rhyming and flow and I particularly like the echoing farewell. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Debbie. I appreciate such kind words from such a gifted writer. Thanks too for your good luck wish.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a lovely quatern poem as the beauty of autumn waves goodbye as winter takes a hold and the cold, bare branches are left to battle the wintertime.
A lovely presentation, and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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This is a lovely quatern poem as the beauty of autumn waves goodbye as winter takes a hold and the cold, bare branches are left to battle the wintertime.
A lovely presentation, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Pearl. I love your description of winter taking control. I appreciate your review and good luck wish.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
you nailed the quatrain format with this quatrain about my favorite time of the year -the autumn. I always loved the fall season because it is my birthday time of year.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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you nailed the quatrain format with this quatrain about my favorite time of the year -the autumn. I always loved the fall season because it is my birthday time of year.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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I most definitely agree with you...it's by far my favorite season. Thank you for your review. I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from estory
This is a poem that employs this time honored, classic convention of personifying a season, in this case, autumn. Keats did this masterfully in his poem, Ode to Autumn. It has also a tinge of art nouveau about it, much in the same way as Mucha painted those beautiful women as the four seasons. estory
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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This is a poem that employs this time honored, classic convention of personifying a season, in this case, autumn. Keats did this masterfully in his poem, Ode to Autumn. It has also a tinge of art nouveau about it, much in the same way as Mucha painted those beautiful women as the four seasons. estory
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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I'm not sure my little poem compares to the works of those two great names, but I appreciate your very kind words. Thank you.