Forever There!
My thoughts for Nomi28 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Carol, you have outdone yourself! This is so eloquently written. This is what you have experienced and thus is precisely what Nominal needs right now! I'm crying!
Karenina
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Carol, you have outdone yourself! This is so eloquently written. This is what you have experienced and thus is precisely what Nominal needs right now! I'm crying!
Karenina
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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My sweet Karenina! I am thrilled that you got to read this one. I hope that Nomi sees it since it is not in the book or anything and so far he has not read it. My heart was in every word. I cried too! Love you my dear friend.
Smiles, Carol
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I just messaged him, urging him to find comfort in your post...
Comment from Patrick Bernardy
Hello Carol!
I have said this before, but it's always the same. You have such a mastery over written language. Your sentences, grammar, and phrases are near perfect every time I read your work.
Nomi is so blessed to have so many awesome friends. I have done reviews of a half a dozen works dedicated to him and his loss. I have also started a dialogue with him so that I may also become his friend.
Your words to him are wise in message and poignant in imagery. What I like the most are the details that you give, like the chair and cooking in the kitchen. In a lesser writer's hands, a work like this might come off as vague or overly sentimental. But your skill with imagery ("the hammer of emptiness," "emotional pool," "every corner of your life") avoids this trap.
--- "I wish I could snatch it from your shoulders and carry the weight for you" -- I love the metaphor of the "cloak" and how you use it to describe his burden. Beautiful.
Here are a couple things I noticed that you may incorporate if you agree:
---"We shamefully ask for one more day, one more minute, a last sweet kiss," --This is a wonderful sentence, but I wonder why you did not finish up the triad of repetition of the word "one" by writing "one last sweet kiss." I think by making this change it makes the repetition more powerful.
---"spilling what was into an emotional pool of what never will be." --This is small, but I think it would read better if you changed "never will" to "will never." This is totally your choice. You keep it the way it is if you like it better!
---"you live again until it's your turn and you will meet again." --Just wanted to pull this out for you to consider. It may be fine, but I did notice that the repetition of the word "again" may not be ideal. If you agree, just reword it.
I am so happy to be your fan and your friend! The reason I have not read any of your novel is because I WILL NOT start in the middle of something, and I'm just not sure I can go back and start at the beginning. However, let me think about it and see if I can't work it in. I don't mind reading for 1 point and 2 cents, because how else are we going to read someone's novel? We can't expect people to pump all their chapters all the time. So, I am okay with that. Let me see how I can make it work.
Talk again soon, dear friend!
Patrick
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Hello Carol!
I have said this before, but it's always the same. You have such a mastery over written language. Your sentences, grammar, and phrases are near perfect every time I read your work.
Nomi is so blessed to have so many awesome friends. I have done reviews of a half a dozen works dedicated to him and his loss. I have also started a dialogue with him so that I may also become his friend.
Your words to him are wise in message and poignant in imagery. What I like the most are the details that you give, like the chair and cooking in the kitchen. In a lesser writer's hands, a work like this might come off as vague or overly sentimental. But your skill with imagery ("the hammer of emptiness," "emotional pool," "every corner of your life") avoids this trap.
--- "I wish I could snatch it from your shoulders and carry the weight for you" -- I love the metaphor of the "cloak" and how you use it to describe his burden. Beautiful.
Here are a couple things I noticed that you may incorporate if you agree:
---"We shamefully ask for one more day, one more minute, a last sweet kiss," --This is a wonderful sentence, but I wonder why you did not finish up the triad of repetition of the word "one" by writing "one last sweet kiss." I think by making this change it makes the repetition more powerful.
---"spilling what was into an emotional pool of what never will be." --This is small, but I think it would read better if you changed "never will" to "will never." This is totally your choice. You keep it the way it is if you like it better!
---"you live again until it's your turn and you will meet again." --Just wanted to pull this out for you to consider. It may be fine, but I did notice that the repetition of the word "again" may not be ideal. If you agree, just reword it.
I am so happy to be your fan and your friend! The reason I have not read any of your novel is because I WILL NOT start in the middle of something, and I'm just not sure I can go back and start at the beginning. However, let me think about it and see if I can't work it in. I don't mind reading for 1 point and 2 cents, because how else are we going to read someone's novel? We can't expect people to pump all their chapters all the time. So, I am okay with that. Let me see how I can make it work.
Talk again soon, dear friend!
Patrick
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Hello, Patrick! I just love how thorough you are when you do a review and beyond helpful. I just wish you were there when I'm writing it. LOL I made your suggestions and all is good.
Thank you as always.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Neonewman
Wow! What a stunning piece you have offered for Nomi and his family. My tears became heavy as I wept through this piece. Nomi will cherish this, my friend.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Wow! What a stunning piece you have offered for Nomi and his family. My tears became heavy as I wept through this piece. Nomi will cherish this, my friend.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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I cried too! My heart and love was in every word I wrote and I pray that it will help in some small way for Nomi and anyone else who needs it...inluding me. Thank you for your kindness.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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He is blessed to have so many friends who care.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from Wendy G
That is so beautiful and meaningful, and a real gift of love. I too felt my inadequacy as a poet for such a time as this, but I echo what you have written for Nomi, and pray that your piece along with the poems will bring him comfort, assurance and peace.
Wendy
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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That is so beautiful and meaningful, and a real gift of love. I too felt my inadequacy as a poet for such a time as this, but I echo what you have written for Nomi, and pray that your piece along with the poems will bring him comfort, assurance and peace.
Wendy
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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I thank you, Wendy. so far he has not read it and I pray he sees it. It isn't in the book so he might not. I felt every word I wrote and my heart is there. Thank you so much.
Smiles, Carol
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I sent him a personal message to express my care. Maybe you could PM him and direct him to your portfolio. He will be very appreciative.
Wendy
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is such a heartfelt piece that clearly speaks from experience and great warmth and empathy. I'm sure Nomi will be comforted, not just by this, but also your valued friendship. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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This is such a heartfelt piece that clearly speaks from experience and great warmth and empathy. I'm sure Nomi will be comforted, not just by this, but also your valued friendship. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Thanks, DEbbi. I couldn't write a beautiful poem like many did, but I wanted to extend my love, friendship and friendship to him and writing is the only way I know how. Thank you for reading my efforts.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Pearl Edwards
You've written this beautiful offering to nomi from the heart and pen of one who has been there and it shows, Carol. You're right, our loves never leave us, they are with us in our every day and in time nomi will find that too.
Beautifully written,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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You've written this beautiful offering to nomi from the heart and pen of one who has been there and it shows, Carol. You're right, our loves never leave us, they are with us in our every day and in time nomi will find that too.
Beautifully written,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much, Valda for your kind words and understanding. I hope Nomi gains peace and strength from all the poems everyone has written as well as from mine.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
Friends like you are important to those recently bereaved dear Carol, because you've had to deal with the empty pillow, the chair, the shared activities, the memories, the loved ones in common, it's funny I wrote two poems for Nomi, but the second was more relevant than the first, thanks for understanding Carol, he will gain solace, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Friends like you are important to those recently bereaved dear Carol, because you've had to deal with the empty pillow, the chair, the shared activities, the memories, the loved ones in common, it's funny I wrote two poems for Nomi, but the second was more relevant than the first, thanks for understanding Carol, he will gain solace, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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I believe all the poems that have been shared on FanStory are filled with love and hope for a better tomorrow. I pray that Nomi gains strength and leans on the support he is offered until he can once again stand on his own.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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Me too Carol
Comment from lyenochka
Thank you for doing this Nomi! Of course, with all your experiences in grieving, you have grown in giving love and compassion to others with the deepest understanding.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Thank you for doing this Nomi! Of course, with all your experiences in grieving, you have grown in giving love and compassion to others with the deepest understanding.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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I pray that all the poems written including my story will help Nomi as he faces those dark days and nights until he finds the strength once again to stand on his own. Knowing others care won't take the grief away, but it makes it a little easier to face.
Smiles, Carol
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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
This is the best, hands down, condolence letter I have ever read. I thought my letter to him which was only for him to read was pretty good. I teared up while I wrote it, but this is the most magnificent piece of art I have ever read. I want to rip my letter to shreds in comparison. Well, not really, my ego is too big for that. But There are not enough words to tell you you how very good this is. You are so very good at writing. Love to you , you great wonderful thing you! Karen
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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This is the best, hands down, condolence letter I have ever read. I thought my letter to him which was only for him to read was pretty good. I teared up while I wrote it, but this is the most magnificent piece of art I have ever read. I want to rip my letter to shreds in comparison. Well, not really, my ego is too big for that. But There are not enough words to tell you you how very good this is. You are so very good at writing. Love to you , you great wonderful thing you! Karen
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Oh seet Karen, I am blown away! Every person who has written to Nomi deserves a six, because they too have given from their heart their friendship, understanding and hope for a better tomorrow. I am speechless and humbled by your praise. Thank you so much.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Carol,
Your story is so thoughtful and uplifting in Nomi's time of grief.
I really believe true love never dies, it just takes on a more spiritual form when we lose someone close to us.
Very nice words, Carol.
Blessings and best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Carol,
Your story is so thoughtful and uplifting in Nomi's time of grief.
I really believe true love never dies, it just takes on a more spiritual form when we lose someone close to us.
Very nice words, Carol.
Blessings and best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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There is no way that true loves dies...I know that my love for my husband and his love for me will continue to grow in my heart and in our memories until we meet again.
Smiles, Carol
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I agree, Carol!