When Horses Come
A CUBE16 Poem26 total reviews
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I enjoyed your poem. This is surely a tough time. It seems as though there is a lot of fear and anxiety for what us coming. Your poem is written well.and descriptive. Great job.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
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I enjoyed your poem. This is surely a tough time. It seems as though there is a lot of fear and anxiety for what us coming. Your poem is written well.and descriptive. Great job.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Brenda.
I appreciate your positive review and comments. We are in a time of trouble, for sure. Stay positive.
Robert
Comment from jake cosmos aller
a great poem about the end times. apocalyptic nightmare of the four horsemen of the apocalypse riding forth spreading disorder, chaos, disease and death in their wake
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
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a great poem about the end times. apocalyptic nightmare of the four horsemen of the apocalypse riding forth spreading disorder, chaos, disease and death in their wake
Comment Written 09-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Jake.
You have certainly perceived my message within this poem. Thank you for your positive words and comments. We are enduring tough times these days. Your understanding is quite perceptive.
Robert
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
The image and black background add to the foreboding of this poem, Robert. Your horses remind us of the four horsemen of the apocalypse; and although Gilead is a reference to a region in the Bible, today many of us think of Gilead of The Handmaid's Tale. For some women, this "tale" is not so far off.
I love the short lines and the way it resembles stacked cubes. I only have one suggestion, add space after the image so that the darkness is equal on top and bottom.
I pray we all seek God's peace in this dark age.
Well done.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
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The image and black background add to the foreboding of this poem, Robert. Your horses remind us of the four horsemen of the apocalypse; and although Gilead is a reference to a region in the Bible, today many of us think of Gilead of The Handmaid's Tale. For some women, this "tale" is not so far off.
I love the short lines and the way it resembles stacked cubes. I only have one suggestion, add space after the image so that the darkness is equal on top and bottom.
I pray we all seek God's peace in this dark age.
Well done.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 09-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
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Hello Pam.
Thank you for your positive and complimentary review. The poetic style is an original I created a few years ago, and it is called Cube16. The rules are a bit restrictive. The rules are posted on my profile page if you have any interest. The "balm of Gilead" I mentioned has both OT and NT references. It is often referred to as a place of healing. I believe prayer is essential to achieve peace in these days.
Robert
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Pam
Thank you very much for the six-star award. I am grateful to you.
Robert
Comment from Neonewman
First, great form. I enjoyed the cubed format and how it tantalized my senses. We are definitely experiencing dark times, my friend. God will see us through as we pray for the light to return.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
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First, great form. I enjoyed the cubed format and how it tantalized my senses. We are definitely experiencing dark times, my friend. God will see us through as we pray for the light to return.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 09-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
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Hello, Steve.
Thank you very much for this positive and encouraging review. God will see us through difficult times. If you are interested in the CUBE16 form, I have the rules listed on my profile page. The style is a little restrictive, but give it a shot. You might enjoy writing in this style.
I am grateful for your positive words.
Robert
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My pleasure, Robert. I'm off Friday, I may give it a go.
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Good deal.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
So this one REALLY speaks to me and my place right now... your short syllabic rhythm helps to drive home the clear message that evil things are afoot and there is but one direction to turn... TRULY enjoyed this one, Sir, especially with your mixing of the Old English throughout - speaks well while 'catching the attention' and, perhaps, making the reader stop and think a bit longer about the phrase!! Thanx for your pen! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
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So this one REALLY speaks to me and my place right now... your short syllabic rhythm helps to drive home the clear message that evil things are afoot and there is but one direction to turn... TRULY enjoyed this one, Sir, especially with your mixing of the Old English throughout - speaks well while 'catching the attention' and, perhaps, making the reader stop and think a bit longer about the phrase!! Thanx for your pen! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 09-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
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Hello Yvette.
I am truly grateful for your encouraging and positive review. The olde English was my effort to make the events in the story both historic and contemporary. I'm pleased you mentioned that and that you enjoyed the poem. Thank you for this wonderful review.
Robert
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great artwork and nice presentation, Robert.
-You wrote a very good poem with a good topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-The first two verses establish the premise.
-You follow that very well describing doubts and angst.
-Good questions to think about in these times.
-Very good closing verses.
-I appreciate all the thought you put into this.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
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-Great artwork and nice presentation, Robert.
-You wrote a very good poem with a good topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-The first two verses establish the premise.
-You follow that very well describing doubts and angst.
-Good questions to think about in these times.
-Very good closing verses.
-I appreciate all the thought you put into this.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
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Hello Pam.
Thank you for your thorough and thoughtful review, and for your uplifting words. I am grateful.
Robert
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You are very welcome, Robert.
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You are very welcome, Robert.
Comment from Janet Foor
Excellent poetic form for this topic. I've never tried the "Cube" form but this poem makes me want to give it a try.
Israel has had problems throughout history and that has not changed even today.
Your last two stanzas give us comfort and hope.
Excellent and timely poem.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Excellent poetic form for this topic. I've never tried the "Cube" form but this poem makes me want to give it a try.
Israel has had problems throughout history and that has not changed even today.
Your last two stanzas give us comfort and hope.
Excellent and timely poem.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 08-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Janet. If you would like to see the "rules" for CUBE16 you can see them on my profile page. Your observations about Israel are quite accurate.
Robert
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Israel has always had problems throughout history, but the Jewish Nation are God's chosen people. If one believes in the Bible, and God created Adam and Eve, they were Jewish, and we are all descendants of them. So, we all have Jewish in us. Jesus was Jewish. I think we should pray for the Jewish people. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Israel has always had problems throughout history, but the Jewish Nation are God's chosen people. If one believes in the Bible, and God created Adam and Eve, they were Jewish, and we are all descendants of them. So, we all have Jewish in us. Jesus was Jewish. I think we should pray for the Jewish people. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Hello Barbara.
I agree. Thank you for your response and meaningful comments.
Robert
Comment from patcelaw
It seems that Israel has always had a tough time with the other parts of the world and I suppose that is because people just don't like the Jewish people because it reminds him so much of Jesus himself. That is a shame because there are not a lot to like about the country of Israel and it's people. Patricia.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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It seems that Israel has always had a tough time with the other parts of the world and I suppose that is because people just don't like the Jewish people because it reminds him so much of Jesus himself. That is a shame because there are not a lot to like about the country of Israel and it's people. Patricia.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your response and meaningful comments.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Deep and riveting, wise and ever-so-fairly hopeful, you've done a wonderful job with the meter and rhyme of this piece and paired it with art that complements it perfectly. From the musical 1776: "These are the times that try men's souls."
Very well done, Robert. xoxo
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Deep and riveting, wise and ever-so-fairly hopeful, you've done a wonderful job with the meter and rhyme of this piece and paired it with art that complements it perfectly. From the musical 1776: "These are the times that try men's souls."
Very well done, Robert. xoxo
Comment Written 08-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Hi Rachelle. These certainly are those times. Thank you very much for your appraisal of the content of the poem. I appreciate your comments and thank you for them.
Robert