Another Fine Mess
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Comment from gansach
This is an interesting entry for the What A Mess writing prompt competition. A brick and body collision would certainly create a mess to be dealt with~a lot of extra work. I enjoyed reading about your messy dilemma.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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This is an interesting entry for the What A Mess writing prompt competition. A brick and body collision would certainly create a mess to be dealt with~a lot of extra work. I enjoyed reading about your messy dilemma.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much. I appreciate your taking the time,
Comment from Sanku
isnt this a real mess/ blood and gore and bricks. he threw the brick and that resulted in all this mess or hot flushes , shall I say ? All the best for the contest..
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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isnt this a real mess/ blood and gore and bricks. he threw the brick and that resulted in all this mess or hot flushes , shall I say ? All the best for the contest..
Comment Written 18-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much. I appreciate your taking the time,
Comment from bob cullen
This is so good. I love humour poems especially when they follow all the guidelines of good poetry like meter, syllable and rhyme and you've done all that here. Please keep writing and posting.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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This is so good. I love humour poems especially when they follow all the guidelines of good poetry like meter, syllable and rhyme and you've done all that here. Please keep writing and posting.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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The opicture grabbed me, Thank you so much. I appreciate your taking the time.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is hilarious, I love the alliteration and your well chosen rhymes as well as the humour in this poem. A clever and unique post and I was thoroughly entertained, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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This is hilarious, I love the alliteration and your well chosen rhymes as well as the humour in this poem. A clever and unique post and I was thoroughly entertained, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much . I saw the cartoon, flashed ( I Know) back to when it ran my life, and the poem kinda wrote itself.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
I liked this poem about the consequence of losing one's temper and accidentally killing someone and then cleaning up the mess before the authorities discover it.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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I liked this poem about the consequence of losing one's temper and accidentally killing someone and then cleaning up the mess before the authorities discover it.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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Thanks for the read and nice comments.
Comment from Kahlani
I love poems that have humor and gore. I also enjoyed the rhythm of your poem. I know I shouldn't, but my favorite line is: "So, he bled like he was trying to paint the entire kitchen floor."
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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I love poems that have humor and gore. I also enjoyed the rhythm of your poem. I know I shouldn't, but my favorite line is: "So, he bled like he was trying to paint the entire kitchen floor."
Comment Written 17-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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Thank you, I thought that was rather descriptive. It paints a clear picture does it not? I appreciate the read. Sorry, I can't sign my name.
Comment from DonandVicki
You bring out such blood soaked visuals with your poem . The art work adds humor to this work, with out the cartoon this would be a very macabre work.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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You bring out such blood soaked visuals with your poem . The art work adds humor to this work, with out the cartoon this would be a very macabre work.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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With the title harkening back to Laurel and hardy. and the menopause cartoon. The darkness is tapped down a mite. Thanks for the read
Comment from royowen
What an hilarious work you've written here, I just love it indeed, beautifully written as an entry in this contest, it's articulate with a glimpse into the mind of our subject's mind, a terrific post my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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What an hilarious work you've written here, I just love it indeed, beautifully written as an entry in this contest, it's articulate with a glimpse into the mind of our subject's mind, a terrific post my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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The title harkening back to the Laurel and Hardy movies, and the menopause cartoon, I softened the bloody bits. Thanks for the read.
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Well done
Comment from phoegon
The image and the story of this poem is hysterical. I love the image you included as well it sets the voice and tone beautifully. I couldn't stop laughing with this dark humor
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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The image and the story of this poem is hysterical. I love the image you included as well it sets the voice and tone beautifully. I couldn't stop laughing with this dark humor
Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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I think you for the read and nice comments. That picture just cracked me up. I've lived through it. Menopause is not for sissies.
Comment from Gayla putnam
It's delightfully macabre. The picture was great, too. I loved some of the lines, such as the cowboy trick. The tempo flows perfectly. Honestly, I'm still laughing, but maybe I remember the joys of menopause. gayla
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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It's delightfully macabre. The picture was great, too. I loved some of the lines, such as the cowboy trick. The tempo flows perfectly. Honestly, I'm still laughing, but maybe I remember the joys of menopause. gayla
Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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I saw that photo and the poem poured out pretty easy. Thanks for the read and nice comments.