Comment from Jonez08

Excellent

Yeah!! They made it out. I'm having a celebration Gayle. Well written with flawless dialog and action. Don't know how you do it but you do. What now?

Cassandra

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2008

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2008

Hi Cassandra,

Wow, girl, you're turning my head! Thanks so much for the high comments and your appreciation of the story. You make me smile!

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from Sylvia Page

Excellent

...blood dripping down Jim's cheek[.]

Mmmm, how have left it with a little more suspense again. Looks as though all's not over yet.
Good going, The best to you.
Happy writing
Sylvia

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2008

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2008

'Morning, Sylvia,

Thank you so much for stopping by and for the fab review. I'm thrilled you're enjoying this novel so much. See you soon,

Gayle

Comment from RenieReader

Excellent

Gayle: I'm worn out just trying to help get Jim on board the boats. Whew! What a tussle, especially with the big bag of supplies. Then, I'm sorry, but I'm having trouble keeping the people's names and the dogs' names straight. Is it just me? Next thought: wouldn't the rescuers and the girls' families be just as anxious for them to get medical help as Jim?

"(Omit==>It's okay, buddy. )I got ya[, buddy]. Are you okay?"

Mesmerized[,] they stared at the unbelievable conflagration surrounding them.

The long night finally ended as [the] sun peeped between the trees[,] sending shafts of light to poke around in the thick air. They finished off the last of the health bars and stared at the remaining six[-]pack of water.

Hugs,
Renie

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2008

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2008

I'm sayin', girl, I was out of puff before I got that scene finished! Funny how your work can get inside you. This book in particular has done that to me. We're almost finished! Mostly reunion time ahead...tear jerkers. If you can't end havin' 'm screaming, crying is good!

Thanks so much, Renie, for the great review,

Hugs,
Gayle

reply by RenieReader on 15-Jun-2008

Yes, I fully believe our writing comes from what lives inside us, and continues to live there long after the story is written and published. I have thoroughly enjoyed this one. Thanks for sharing your 'Renters' with us. LOL.

Take care, babe,
Renie

Comment from butterflykiss

Excellent

Boy it was a long night, fire all around no place to lay my head. Its a thrilling story, it move as fast a fire , and keeps you glued to the page.
I'm enjoying this very much. Good luck.
Butterflykiss

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2008

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2008

Hey Jane,

It sounds like you didn't get a good night's sleep! LOL! Thanks so much for the wonderful words of encouragement and for your loyalty and support!

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from Kym Jade

Excellent

This posting deserves a six but we don't have one. Loved the action. Knew the dogs loved Jim; the way they both lay down next to him. So Lenny ad Ella have left Terry with the girls and the three dogs.

Suggestion: (The second sentence didn't read clear to me on the first read. Looking at it again I take it the pillars go out into deeper water. I know what put me off, the word dock gives me the vision of parallel whereas the word jetty going out into the water.)
Jim reached for the pillar, hugging it, while Lenny gave the unwilling dogs a boost up on the dock. Still using the pillars for support, he rolled over on his back and towed Jim into deeper water and the waiting boats.

Love and blessings

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2008

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2008

Hi Girls,

Thanks so much for stopping by and brightening my day. I love the dogs, too. They always add action! Yep, looks like Terry and the dogs got left in the dust. That's okay, they'll meet up in town.

Okay, the docks are built by sinking pillars at regular, three-foot distances, from the lake edge to out as far into the water as you want to go. Then the horizontal planks are laid across the pillars and nailed in place. Kind of like a boardwalk is made.

I just flew through this chapter, so I'm going to tweak it good and maybe I can make that clearer.

Thanks so much for the time and comments and of course, your precious support,

Love,
Gayle

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very good chapter you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. It was interesting from start to finish. Hugs, Teri

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2008

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2008

Hi Teri,

Thank you very much for the R&R and for your comments. They are appreciated.

Gayle

reply by Teri7 on 15-Jun-2008

You are a great writer my friend. Hugs, Teri

Comment from lovemyta

Excellent

Your story was inspirational. I was on the edge of my seat the whole time. It was interesting and cleverly put together. You are a master of your trade. lovemyta

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2008

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2008

Hi Myta,

Well, what a nice review. I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter. We're just a couple of chapters from the end, so coming in late like this and still enjoying makes me smile.

Thanks,
Gayle

Comment from elainec4

Excellent

showtimebook,
Decided to click on and read even though I haven't read any of the other chapters. It was an exciting read, leaving me wanting more! I'll check back in later. Your action and your dialogue were realistic and easy to follow. Enjoyed. elaine

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2008

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2008

Wow, Elaine, coming into a book at the end is hard. But you still had a good time, which makes me think I did my job.

Thank you so much for the review,

Gayle

Comment from AbigailDavid

Excellent

Hello, lots of action in this chapter, it is a great strategy for hooking the reader into your writing. Very smooth read thanks to your good technical writing skills. I enjoy your story when I catch an installment. Your characters are realistic and I have no suggestions for improvement.

Thanks for another kewl read, and one I would recommend, Abby

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2008

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2008

Hey Abby,

Thanks so much for the wonderful review and comments. Your support and loyalty mean so much to me.

Thanks again,
Gayle

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Action packed. Realistic. Great dialogue. Good imagery and descriptive scheme. A real attention getter. I found myself complete engrossed with this chapter. Great Job!

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 Comment Written 14-Jun-2008

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2008

Hello my friend. I was just over in your neck of the woods. Had a good time, too!

Thanks for stopping by and hope to see you again soon,

Gayle

reply by c_lucas on 15-Jun-2008

You're welcome, Gayle