Renewal
Home-Made Carpe Diem89 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello amada,
love the cadence in you poem comparing a woman and a tree
I loved the part how you described the lady and the tree they both seems know where there roots are -
Morning finds my roots
curling in relaxed soil,
My senses morphed
into a splash of lights.
My previous scowl
is now a smile.
Gert
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
  |
Hello amada,
love the cadence in you poem comparing a woman and a tree
I loved the part how you described the lady and the tree they both seems know where there roots are -
Morning finds my roots
curling in relaxed soil,
My senses morphed
into a splash of lights.
My previous scowl
is now a smile.
Gert
Comment Written 15-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
-
Thank you Gert. Lovely review.
-
smiles amada
Gert
Comment from ROBbury
Amanda:
The imagery of comparing tree to an uplifting individual captured me immediately. The thoughts of 'downwardness' turned into positiveness is very uplifting.
This poem reads very smooth and is an easy read with a lot of meaning behind it.
Notice it is for competition, best of luck.
ROB
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
|
Amanda:
The imagery of comparing tree to an uplifting individual captured me immediately. The thoughts of 'downwardness' turned into positiveness is very uplifting.
This poem reads very smooth and is an easy read with a lot of meaning behind it.
Notice it is for competition, best of luck.
ROB
Comment Written 15-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
-
Thank you Bob for reading and reviewing this piece. Much honored.
Comment from lathunder
I really enjoyed this, so I read it twice. I loved the meaning and it made me think once again about things going on. You did a beautiful job. Thanks for sharing with us.
L.A.Thunder
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
|
I really enjoyed this, so I read it twice. I loved the meaning and it made me think once again about things going on. You did a beautiful job. Thanks for sharing with us.
L.A.Thunder
Comment Written 15-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
-
Thank you, L.A. Thunder for the great compliments.
Comment from rmdelta
amada,
Wow, what a great contest entry. OUtstanding stanzas which flow so effortlessly-so smoothly, allowing us to follow its quick pace with no trouble. Excellent choices in the wording you used here, and this is such an 'understandable,' poem. Nicely written, amada.
Reggie
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
|
amada,
Wow, what a great contest entry. OUtstanding stanzas which flow so effortlessly-so smoothly, allowing us to follow its quick pace with no trouble. Excellent choices in the wording you used here, and this is such an 'understandable,' poem. Nicely written, amada.
Reggie
Comment Written 15-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
-
Thank you Reggie.
Comment from ulster3
Hello writer friend.
This is very excellent indeed. The flow and the feel of this poem are actually relaxing. I must say that is a first for me
fondly, rebecca
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
|
Hello writer friend.
This is very excellent indeed. The flow and the feel of this poem are actually relaxing. I must say that is a first for me
fondly, rebecca
Comment Written 15-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
-
Thank you, Rebecca. I truly appreciate your lovely review.
Comment from honeytree
We can always obtain some direction within our lives when we converse with nature.
We let our mind cry and think of sad issues or we can change
our mind to think of happy events and the urge to become happy once again.
"Checking in
with my inner trunk;
I need a lot
of loving advice:
Prisoner of my
own expectations
I'm getting rusty,
grumpy and cold.
As his leaves
swiftly swing
he utters wisdom,
at its very best:
"Silly woman,
you need a rest."
(list not lists)
Great writing I enjoyed every word written.
Honeytree.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
|
We can always obtain some direction within our lives when we converse with nature.
We let our mind cry and think of sad issues or we can change
our mind to think of happy events and the urge to become happy once again.
"Checking in
with my inner trunk;
I need a lot
of loving advice:
Prisoner of my
own expectations
I'm getting rusty,
grumpy and cold.
As his leaves
swiftly swing
he utters wisdom,
at its very best:
"Silly woman,
you need a rest."
(list not lists)
Great writing I enjoyed every word written.
Honeytree.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
-
You are most kind, honeytree. Your words are pretty good also.
-
I am glad to review your work amada and enjoyed reading. Honeytree.
Comment from LadyMary
It was so refreshing just to read this poem. I felt renewal in its words. The imagery projected is wonderful and one knows that we all must allow ourselves to smell the flowers. Excellent, and thank you for sharing. LadyMary
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
|
It was so refreshing just to read this poem. I felt renewal in its words. The imagery projected is wonderful and one knows that we all must allow ourselves to smell the flowers. Excellent, and thank you for sharing. LadyMary
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
-
Thank you Lady Mary.
Comment from Josipher32
This was a wonderfully written poem for this "Thankful Tree" contest. I wish you the best of luck with your entry!
Sincerely, Kristen
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
|
This was a wonderfully written poem for this "Thankful Tree" contest. I wish you the best of luck with your entry!
Sincerely, Kristen
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
-
Hi Kristen. I am so happy to liked this poem. Bless you.
Comment from robeth
I like this poem. It has a great feel to it. My favorite line is:
Let stillness
court my hands
I really should try to do that a lot more often!!
Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
|
I like this poem. It has a great feel to it. My favorite line is:
Let stillness
court my hands
I really should try to do that a lot more often!!
Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
-
Yes, I know, those hands want to do and do. Thank you robeth for the great comments.
Comment from Paradox Tremors
I really enjoyed this write of yours my friend. Not only did I find joy in the reading your words, but I found myself transported into your story and listened and found myself relaxing and forgetting the worries of the world--a true accomplishment!
I'm just sorry I found the end to this piece. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
|
I really enjoyed this write of yours my friend. Not only did I find joy in the reading your words, but I found myself transported into your story and listened and found myself relaxing and forgetting the worries of the world--a true accomplishment!
I'm just sorry I found the end to this piece. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
-
Thank you Paradox Tremors for the very nice compliment, knowing that my words brought some relaxation.
