Flash Fiction
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "Shattered Dreams"Collection of Flash, Micro, etc.
46 total reviews
Comment from Trybuck
Let me guess, this one was about lemons. When life offers lemons... make lemonaide... That doesn't quite match the picture or the words.
I would guess hot cross buns but to be honest they look kinda cold.
I think it could possibly be about violence... Yep that's it, Violence.
Well done, Buck
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Let me guess, this one was about lemons. When life offers lemons... make lemonaide... That doesn't quite match the picture or the words.
I would guess hot cross buns but to be honest they look kinda cold.
I think it could possibly be about violence... Yep that's it, Violence.
Well done, Buck
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Buck,
Thanks for the chuckle. I apologize for my late response..Life is crazy and I can't keep up with it as I age...Old lady syndrome I guess. Appreciate you as always, Carol
Comment from jadapenn
This was such a sad tale. I almost cried. To have one's dreams shattered is not a good experience. You did well with this micro-fiction, Smiles. The atmosphere was well developed.
Best wishes for the contest. luv jada
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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This was such a sad tale. I almost cried. To have one's dreams shattered is not a good experience. You did well with this micro-fiction, Smiles. The atmosphere was well developed.
Best wishes for the contest. luv jada
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Jada,
Away from the computer for a few days and I return to 115 reviews...not that I'm complaining but I can't keep up. Myu fingers are about to fall off. Thanks jfor commenting as always. Smiles, Carol
Comment from words
With just a few lines, you painted a picture that is too real to me.
When the Mexican women illegally cross the boarder into the U.S. ,they are routinely raped by the smugglers.
The men and women both pay the same rate to the smugglers, but the women and young children usually pay another price/.
Well done.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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With just a few lines, you painted a picture that is too real to me.
When the Mexican women illegally cross the boarder into the U.S. ,they are routinely raped by the smugglers.
The men and women both pay the same rate to the smugglers, but the women and young children usually pay another price/.
Well done.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Words,
Yes, my heart stops every time I hear or read about another girl. I remember when we were in Texas in the military..WE were told to stay on the base unless escorted. So sad....Smiles, CArol
Comment from TexAnn
Very difficult to write a complete story in 100 words!
I like how you compared the garden from 2 diff perspectives, even if tragic. good luck, texann
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Very difficult to write a complete story in 100 words!
I like how you compared the garden from 2 diff perspectives, even if tragic. good luck, texann
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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TexAnn
Thank you so much for your kind comments. Smiles, CArol
Comment from sugardog
Oh so tragic and sad...I hate the thought of this happening to young girls, it's terrible to think we can't be safe to walk an evening alone. I am happy she had angels to welcome her home. Good luck in the contest! Dana
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Oh so tragic and sad...I hate the thought of this happening to young girls, it's terrible to think we can't be safe to walk an evening alone. I am happy she had angels to welcome her home. Good luck in the contest! Dana
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Dana,
Thank you so much for all your kind comments. I apologize for my tardy response. Life is moving too fast for this old lady. Smiles, CArol
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No worries, Carol, you're a busy woman! You are so welcome. Dana
Comment from anabelle
That's a really good take on this contest. It would be horrible to have your dreams evaporate. It frightening to think of all the horrible things that happen to people every day.
Best of luck in the contest.
Regards, anabelle
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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That's a really good take on this contest. It would be horrible to have your dreams evaporate. It frightening to think of all the horrible things that happen to people every day.
Best of luck in the contest.
Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Anabelle,
Me too! Thanks jfor reading and commenting. I always appreciate it. Smiles, CArol
Comment from geoniasha
How tragic. The heinous crimes inflicted on the innocent are unconscionable. However, this piece satisfies the prompt requirements with no 'spag' issues. Thank you for sharing...and good luck! geo
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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How tragic. The heinous crimes inflicted on the innocent are unconscionable. However, this piece satisfies the prompt requirements with no 'spag' issues. Thank you for sharing...and good luck! geo
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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genoiasha,
Thank you so much for all your kind comments. I apologize for my tardy response. Life is moving too fast for this old lady. Smiles, CArol
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No problem, Carol. You're welcome. I find myself in the fast lane quite often. geo
Comment from bayoupoet
This is a short, but well written story that tells so much in its few words. I always enjoy reading for you, Carol for your stories are so natural and never forced.
sandra
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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This is a short, but well written story that tells so much in its few words. I always enjoy reading for you, Carol for your stories are so natural and never forced.
sandra
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Sandra,
This one is a sad one, but a message that we need to deal with in this unfortunate time of our lives. Thank you...Carol
Comment from btruax
Very sad but moving. This story is almost a poem. I suppose both flash fiction and poetry have an economy of words in common and that is very apparent in your story. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Very sad but moving. This story is almost a poem. I suppose both flash fiction and poetry have an economy of words in common and that is very apparent in your story. Nicely done.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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btruax,
Yes, it's sad that our societ needs to be reminded that this terrible thing still happens to many. Thank you for the kind review. Carol
Comment from fictionwriter
How very sad. At least she went where there is peace and loving after such a violent turn of events. The dirty rotten guys. Well done.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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How very sad. At least she went where there is peace and loving after such a violent turn of events. The dirty rotten guys. Well done.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Joy,
Yes, this one was a sad one...Stealing the innocence for no other reason than their own pleasure...Thanks for reading. Carol