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A book of a mixture of stories

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Comment from Judy Lawless
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What a lovely story, Carol. You carried us through all the stress and pain, both physical and emotional, and then threw some humour at us, sharing the hope of better tomorrows. Well done.

One little thing; The quotation mark is missing at the beginning of this sentence. Please, Katie, I have so much work to finish before the truck arrives."

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2021


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2021
    I like happy endings or at least the hope for better ones...Glad you enjoyed the story, Judy. Thanks for the kind review and I have fixed the quotation marks.

    Smiles, Carol
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
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Our perspective of our parents is always changing. When we are little they are our everything. As we mature we tend to stereotype them and then suddenly when we have matured they are real people who think, sometimes like us. A good portrayal of a changing attitude.

Ralf

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2021


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2021
    That's so true Ralf...Our minds and thoughts about things and people change as we walk down the path of life...Things take on a different color as the sun begins to set. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Leann DS
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Do I sense a new book taking form? I hope this isn't just for a contest. I want chapters, woman! I love this. You are a great writer! The details, dialogue, and descriptions are amazing. Keep sharing. Hugs and blessings to you, my friend.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2021


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2021
    Thank you so much, Leann. You make me smile until my face hurts. LOL I will have to find a new story since the other one is winding down...not sure what it will be yet. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
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So many heartbreaks in this world of ours, there isn't hardly enough time to write about them all. But in this circle of life, we just have to wait around hoping the upside comes soon. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2021


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2021
    You are so awesome and kind... Thank yu for the kind words and the shiny stars. I appreciate it very much. Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Susan Newell
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This is a very heart-warming story, about carrying all kinds of loads, about seeing the light shining through darkness, about the love, vivacity and wisdom of children, and ultimately, about moving on, literally and figuratively. Exceptional story, beautifully written.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2021


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2021
    It's kind of like that motto...Begin Again...LOL Glad you enjoyed the story and I truly appreciate your kind words and stars. Smiles, Carol
reply by Susan Newell on 15-Jun-2021
    Your stories always have depth and you are very good at showing the variety of human relationships and how they impact us.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2021
    OOOH! I got chills from that one...You are so kind.
Comment from Dilettante junior
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Dearest Mama Bear,

What a great little story! It engages with its twists and turns, zooming in and out of the past, then hovering beautifully to the present and the future. You have a gift with kids that is evident in all your pieces. It is difficult to write with oneself as the protagonist, yet you did a marvellous job.

Well done!
Cheers,
Baby Bear

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2021


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2021
    What a wonderful review and such thoughtful things to say. I thank you so much, Baby Bear. Children are very special to me. Thank you so much and for the shiny stars. Awesome. Smiles and hugs, Mama Bear
Comment from Readywriter52
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This is a good feel-good story. Mommy is struggling with depression after her husband was killed by a drunk driver. She's moving to live near her parents. Is this supposed to be a story in itself or part of a novel?

 Comment Written 17-May-2010


reply by the author on 21-May-2010
    Please forgive me for this cut and paste response. I've been having a bit of a thriller myself - been clearing trees, shrubs and weeds and a ringer called poison ivy jumped into the match. I lost and my eyes now resemble a prize fighter--swollen to the max. I can squint today so I wanted to let you know I appreciate your reading Thank you for your continued support and understanding...Smiles, Carol
Comment from daniela.albu
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A well written first chapter. The title suits not only moving back home but also the road taken by one's life. The mother and daughter scene goes on naturally and it is vividly described.

 Comment Written 17-May-2010


reply by the author on 21-May-2010
    Please forgive me for this cut and paste response. I've been having a bit of a thriller myself - been clearing trees, shrubs and weeds and a ringer called poison ivy jumped into the match. I lost and my eyes now resemble a prize fighter--swollen to the max. I can squint today so I wanted to let you know I appreciate your reading Thank you for your continued support and understanding...Smiles, Carol
Comment from Mastery
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Sounds like you have the beginning of a great emotional adventure here, Carol. You sure have all the ingredients for almost anything to occur. You will do well to persue it further, I think. Good luck in the contest, too...Bob

 Comment Written 16-May-2010


reply by the author on 16-May-2010
    Bob,

    Thank you for your encouragement. Thank you for your wishes as I wish you the sme. Smiles, Carol
Comment from sunny39
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As always, you have written a marvelous beginning for a novel.The first two lines were absolute grabbers.

This brought a lot of sad emotions, but your ending gave hope to the reader that life would again be good.

Excellent!

Sunny

 Comment Written 15-May-2010


reply by the author on 15-May-2010
    Suuny,

    Thank you for the continued support and all your kindness. I truly appreciate it. Smiles, Carol