Comment from hfriscia

Excellent

I enjoyed reading this piece...The dialogue is awesome, it's like I'm in the room right there with them...I did not see any mistakes in the work...

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012

Thanks. That's exactly the image I wanted to create--the feeling of being right there. Thanks for a good review.

Comment from missy98writer

Excellent

Mystery Writer,
talk about revenge is a dish best served cold. I think Nurse Bitch will get what's coming to her by Chuck. I can understand Chuck's anger. Alice was a victim of abuse sent there by her husband to "Club Head." And then Nurse Wrothily abuses her by give her electro shock therapy for asking for an aspirin. Your story is extremely well written. Your story paints a picture in the readers head. Excellent narrative, great dialogue and very good descriptive writing. You managed to established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your horror and thriller story. After Chuck gets through with Nurse Wrothily I'm sure she will become a member of "Club Head." I wish you good luck in the contest because your story is excellent.
Missy.

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012

You are far too kind (to me, not the nurse), I fear.

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

Whew! What a write this one is and what is in that room, by the way? LOL. Love that you had some fun with this and found it to be well written.

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012

Electroshock therapy is in that room. I think the nurse will get what she deserves. Thanks for a good review.

reply by Gungalo on 22-Sep-2012

Heheh. Good.

Comment from dportwood

Excellent

author,

Hey! What's good for the goose is good for the gander, or something like that. I enjoyed reading this story and spotted no spag. Good luck in the contest.

Duane

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012

Thanks for a great review. You are sorely missed.

Comment from gramalot8

Excellent

Mystery Author, this is very creepy and probably could be true in some asylums. Good job with your imagery, your descriptions and your dialog. It seemed to all go together very well with your mental institute setting. Good job.

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012

Thanks for a great review.

Comment from Sharon Lee

Excellent

A sinister plan, I sense they are going to be quite evil. A great read for halloween, you incorporated the words well in this, good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012

I don't think they'll be half as evil as the evil nurse was to the innocent patients. Thanks for a good review.

Comment from fictionwriter

Excellent

Oh, man. Doesn't pay to be mean to the crazies. It least they can get back at you when they get the chance. Interesting little story. well done.

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012

Thanks for understanding the story so well.

Comment from cheyennewy

Excellent

Hi Author,

I liked your take on this contest. It's creative and original. I didn't expect the ending but that is a sign of a good author...to surprise their readers. You have colorful characters that seem very real. Good conversation and verbiage. Well done and good luck in the contest....chey

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012

Thanks for a great review.PF

Comment from Wolfwind

Excellent

I enjoyed your story about the psychiatric ward, very entertaining. It's nice to see that the sadistic nurse got what she had coming to her in the end. You also showed how people can be very manipulative and we all fall for it sometimes, even when on the look out for such things. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012

Thank for understanding the story so well.

Comment from KayteeF

Excellent

Oh so cruel and hilarious as well.
Chuck sounds like one of those guys that can charm 'the hind .... off a donkey'. A bit too full of himself though.
I appreciate the 'in-patients' point of view.
The patients are not as crazy as they make out, are they?
You have cleverly turned the whole situation round, as Chuck and Carol heads off to wreak revenge on senior nurse.
Well told.

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012

Thanks for a great review. Every one a little mental off-kilter has a bit of narcissism in him or her, I think, don't you?